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This just keeps getting more and more interesting! Keep up the good fic. writting.

The song is \"Send the Pain Below\" by Chevelle. The thought popped into my mind in the middle of reading a chapter, and now, every time I see the title, the song pops into my head, especially that specific line. I\'m kinda confused about the \'dorky Prince\', but I understand about Goku being nearly identical to Bardock. Is Krillin a prince?, or did I just totally missed reading that in the earlier chapters? * bac back to check chapters.* Hm, nope, no mention of Krillin being a prince, but he\'s definitely not a servant. Oh well, car cares? Or should I care? Bulma, with a TAIL??!! Interesting turn of events, or at least a different idea on looks. Do we really want to know where her tools are? Maybe, maybe not, but Krillin will never know. \'Nowhere your ever going to see.\' Like the attitude, keep up the great work Card!

OMG I love this story. It is very different from your others. I like the way this is going. and I can\'t wait until you up date again.

I was just wondering, what happened to \'Even more of us\' ? Oh and I love all your stories!

Superb

Wow well yeah I am a little confused and I am definately interested and yeah I think you are slightly insane, but it\'s good to be a little crazy...

You have a way with words like no other...
I was instantly drawn to this story and am immediatly wondering why Goku keeps referring to freedom. He seems troubled by something, maybe by how he obtained his own freedom?

He seems to know why Vegeta is there and hopefully how to get him out...
At first this fic reminded me of Moulin Rouge..then the Matrix and now I just want to know what is going to happen.

I really hate Frieza...but am happy he isn\'t perverted enough to watch...
I am impressed with Goku\'s pov and how he has managed to fool Frieza thus far by giving off the right smells and whatnot.

I wonder why Vegeta is so fixated on that finger...
This is just so freaking wonderful...the way you write Goku blows me away. I fall in love with it. I LOVE the emotion that is poured into your work. I feel badly for him, it seems as though he has been through a lot and has had to make some tough decision in his life...

I just hope he can help the Prince and himself.

This is really amazingly written, beautiful.

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Ch. 2

And it moved toward the door, stared at him like it was drowning, like it was the one that had been used.--wow that is deep...love how you describe situations...

faceless one--like that and I like how Vegeta is dealing with things. Not like it, but like how itwritwritten. How he remembers things and then denies them.

So we got to learn a little more about what is going on.
Goku went through alot and I am sure I don\'t know the half of it, but what I do know is very sad. He had to get that device cut out of his leg and ouch...I am assuming that is Vegeta is always sucking on his finger...

And Vegeta is keeping himself in denial...trying to push those thoughts from his brain.
That is so sad that Goku was kidnapped and had to endure all of that stuff.
But I do love the storyline...

I find it very interesting and highly addictive.

Also loved that Bardock is the one that saved Goku.
Loved your Vegeta pov also...just love everything.
Can\'t wait to read more...
and I don\'t have to since it is 5:00 a.m. and you will probably update in a few hours although I will be asleep but I will read when I awake b/c I must know what is going on.

^.*

-MB-

This is a very haunting story. I have such conflicting emotions when I read it. It stays with me for a long while after I\'ve finished the cer. er. Vegeta\'s brief flashes of memory, followed by him shrugging them off, his appraisal of Goku, and once again shrugging him off...he is like everyone else, a nameless, faceless thing, which sometimes enters his world, uses his body and then leaves him to once again enjoy his solitude with the amazingly wonderful sensations his finger produces at the back of his mouth. Bloody tragic. So very well written.

\"But honestly, what could he—the one who was most often on display in the lobby, naked and oil-covered—say about a scarred wrist?\"

See here, on some level, Vegeta knows that this world os iss is not right, not decent, but it\'s a distant notion, so he remains in acceptance of it. Deeply disturbing is the fact that he is on display,a loa lobby, completely exposed to any who wish to view him. Here\'s where the conflicting emotions come in. Part of me is aroused by the image of an oiled-up naked Vegeta, and the other part just wants to jump in front of him, arms outspread, telling everyone who\'s looking to bugger off.

I can\'t stand the idea that his tail had been removed, and Goku\'s as well. It\'s all so very heartbreaking.

Vegeta\'s thoughts after Goku had left him, really got to me, the fact that he was having an inner struggle with what he was living and his vague notions that there was something more to his existence, and oh Gods, he\'s only seventeen...

Goku\'s reaction once he got outside tore me up as well, I see now that he wore a disguise, and that Freiza had indeed been his captor from the past. The fthatthat he went back into this establishment, saw Vegeta, Must have seem himself as he watched him, had to go through with it for the Prince\'s sake. No wonder he felt like he was betraying him...not just because this was his Prince, but also because he was in that position once. It must haeen een torture for him. I almost can\'t stand , bu, but only because of how it affects me. You are a very captivating writer.

Goku\'s memories involving his father was very disturbing. It must have been amazingly difficult for Bardock to keep a level head at that point. It must have been tearing him apart. I imagine that was the reason for him closing his eyes and humming as he sat back in the chair...trying to keep control of his anger.

\"...but there were moments—when freedom got to hard to bear—that he really wished he had never been saved.\"

Yeah, I can totally understand this sentiment. It\'s going to be a long time before he can truly feel free (if ever) and the Prince is going to have to go through this too...and with his pride as the Prince, he\'s got that extra hurdle to jump. Both Goku and Vegeta are so going to need each other, because no matter how many sympathetoiseoises anyone else may make, they are never going to understand what these two have been through...and you\'re nearly making me cry, with this. You do have a gift. This is an incredible story so far...and it\'s only on the second chapter.

\"Remember my signature is the angst/humor combo.\"

Oh thank God! Need the humour. Your ability to evoke emotions wiour our writing is amazing, I\'m not knocking that at all. But this is really making me incredibly sad, so yeah, looking forward to somuckluckles. Some quick relief from your end dialogue, enjoyed it very much :-)

Ah, so Goku is his real name. Okay, interesting. :-)

\"Poor ‘Geta. It will be horrible for him if Goku manages to succeed in his plan. *pets the oblivious *naked* prince.*\"

I know. *whimpers* Also wants to pet the naked Prince... See what I abo about conflicting emotions. :-) *sigh*

Cool, I listen to music when I write too. Ahh...great minds think a like. I\'m thinking that I\'m gonna like Krillin in this one too. Thank goodness...it\'s about time. Oh and don\'t hurt Pixelgoddess, she has to finish \'Maintaining\' first! Oh and Bardock rules! There...

Im loving it! Vegeta sucking on his fingers is sooo hot. *fans self* Poor Goku. He\'s all mentally scarred and stuff.. *sniffs* DAMN Frieza!! I hope he really gets whats comming to him!! *shakes fist at Frieza, but runs when he tries to catch him, tail swaying behind him* Please update soon I don\'t think I can stand more than a little anticipation!

Prisma Kakkerra, Princess of all Saiyans

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Once again, you got me hooked. The Krillin thing is disturbing me, but you can blame that on Pixelgoddess. I am in a noseless ex-monk bashing sort of mood. I am extremely interested in this fic though, and you plan on making me like Krillin for once don\'t you?

Don\'t know what to say, except that I\'m glad that Vegeta\'s starting to remember more about what he used to be. Poor Goku, at least he\'s getting a little better at being with Freiza-yeah right- but the most important thing is that he\'s also helping Vegeta remember his past, and is showing him a small bit of his own past.
Like the title as well, did you get it from a song? *Thinking of more to say* Ah! Dammit! My train\'s been derailed and I can\'t get it back on track. Till tomorrow!!