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June 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
\"Pssst,\" looks around warily ahisphispers some more,\"the Krillin lemon wasn\'t that bad.\"
In a normal tone, \"If Goten is taking any more emotionally scared patients, can I sign up?\"
Sorry if I pout, but I was kind of hoping for some yuri between Chi Chi and her kitten. That would just be strange, and I guess that I am happy that it didn\'t happen.
It just seemed for a while that the sotry was headed in that direction. *shrugs*
I am very happy that Vegeta is taking a VERY personal interest in Goku.
So one more chapter huh? Well, you\'ve certainly given us one heck of a good A/U.
*scratches head* I can\'t remember what I said in my review yesterday to start that, but your responce was sure funny. I guess I have to go and read my own review now to find out.
In a normal tone, \"If Goten is taking any more emotionally scared patients, can I sign up?\"
Sorry if I pout, but I was kind of hoping for some yuri between Chi Chi and her kitten. That would just be strange, and I guess that I am happy that it didn\'t happen.
It just seemed for a while that the sotry was headed in that direction. *shrugs*
I am very happy that Vegeta is taking a VERY personal interest in Goku.
So one more chapter huh? Well, you\'ve certainly given us one heck of a good A/U.
*scratches head* I can\'t remember what I said in my review yesterday to start that, but your responce was sure funny. I guess I have to go and read my own review now to find out.
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June 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this was soooooo good. It was kind of angsty, but both men had questions and emotions that had to be answered. And answer some of them they did!
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June 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
And the man that raped the Saiyan world with his perversity.--I loved the openeing paragraph and the sort of short synopsis of just what Bardock had done...the damage he caused. Loved how it was written.
castrated him with a single thrust of his sword, and there was a scream. --O_O, that is cruel, but I honestly believe he deserves that and I was cringing while reading this and I practically cheered when he screamed. I was waiting fort mot moment.
“The heart,” Chichi hissed.
“And the head,” Vegeta added.--these two are not playing around...especially ChiChi she has been talking about having his heart for awhile now.
“Just kill him,” Goku said from behind them, “Now.”-- :( *feels sad for Goku*
Held it in her hand as it throbbed one last time and the brilliant red blood of the traitor dripped off her fingers in long, thick strands.--glad she finally got her prize..
but Vegeta stood as their King, with the crown on his head and the air of the roy aro around him so thick it was nearly tangible. --*cheers* YEAH! I\'m so loving that he is goregeous *dies*
BARDOCK IS DEAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YEAH!!!!!! and he died painfully...and in a cruel manner, but so well written it was perfect! YAH!
His mind was nothing but a mind now, no powers, no knowledge.--that has to be hard for him to deal with. this was tery ery thing he had been trying to avoid.
And thought that he should have just helped. Should have said ‘fuck you’ to the Gods and done what he knew was right. --yeah that is what he should of done, because he ended up whre he didnt want to be anyway.
I had my very first dirty thought about Krillin while I was writing this chapter. *shudders again * Just this Krillin though. …is that a bad thing? --lmao! OMG! do did I, I am ashamed of myself. And I even found myself wanting to draw this Krillen..well actually I have been wanting to draw all the characters from this story...and the twins. I have been debating it.
LoL at end notes
and yeah I think you could have done a way better job at writing Angelus.
LoL about Spike and Angel...when the Immortal visited..hehe ^.~
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“The traitors heart pumped its blood into my hand,” she said, “The little fry cried.”--LoL I love how Bulma and her interact...how she always calls her kitten and seems to take care of her.
The King is…will soon be on his throne.” A smirk there, “He is currently on som els else at the moment.”--LMAO!!!
Foolish bastards, Gods are, that take their immortality and mock us with it. --damn it she is cool! I loved that line. if I did cosplay I would make a costume of her and go to a anime convention...then everyone would be like, \"who are you supposed to be?\"
Awesome lemon!!!!!
Bulma: My head s cas can I have some Tylenol?
Goku: Nope. Doesn’t exist.--LMAO!!!!
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castrated him with a single thrust of his sword, and there was a scream. --O_O, that is cruel, but I honestly believe he deserves that and I was cringing while reading this and I practically cheered when he screamed. I was waiting fort mot moment.
“The heart,” Chichi hissed.
“And the head,” Vegeta added.--these two are not playing around...especially ChiChi she has been talking about having his heart for awhile now.
“Just kill him,” Goku said from behind them, “Now.”-- :( *feels sad for Goku*
Held it in her hand as it throbbed one last time and the brilliant red blood of the traitor dripped off her fingers in long, thick strands.--glad she finally got her prize..
but Vegeta stood as their King, with the crown on his head and the air of the roy aro around him so thick it was nearly tangible. --*cheers* YEAH! I\'m so loving that he is goregeous *dies*
BARDOCK IS DEAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YEAH!!!!!! and he died painfully...and in a cruel manner, but so well written it was perfect! YAH!
His mind was nothing but a mind now, no powers, no knowledge.--that has to be hard for him to deal with. this was tery ery thing he had been trying to avoid.
And thought that he should have just helped. Should have said ‘fuck you’ to the Gods and done what he knew was right. --yeah that is what he should of done, because he ended up whre he didnt want to be anyway.
I had my very first dirty thought about Krillin while I was writing this chapter. *shudders again * Just this Krillin though. …is that a bad thing? --lmao! OMG! do did I, I am ashamed of myself. And I even found myself wanting to draw this Krillen..well actually I have been wanting to draw all the characters from this story...and the twins. I have been debating it.
LoL at end notes
and yeah I think you could have done a way better job at writing Angelus.
LoL about Spike and Angel...when the Immortal visited..hehe ^.~
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“The traitors heart pumped its blood into my hand,” she said, “The little fry cried.”--LoL I love how Bulma and her interact...how she always calls her kitten and seems to take care of her.
The King is…will soon be on his throne.” A smirk there, “He is currently on som els else at the moment.”--LMAO!!!
Foolish bastards, Gods are, that take their immortality and mock us with it. --damn it she is cool! I loved that line. if I did cosplay I would make a costume of her and go to a anime convention...then everyone would be like, \"who are you supposed to be?\"
Awesome lemon!!!!!
Bulma: My head s cas can I have some Tylenol?
Goku: Nope. Doesn’t exist.--LMAO!!!!
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June 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Excellent.
The traitor got what he deserved.
Goten\'s scars were healed? I wonder if the saiyan gods healed him and gave him some
of their power. As he becomes stronger, is it possible he could be a challenge to the juro
dieties? And what happened between the the gods? The saiyan ones obviously were not
happy that the juro ones invaded their turf.
Looking forward to more.
The traitor got what he deserved.
Goten\'s scars were healed? I wonder if the saiyan gods healed him and gave him some
of their power. As he becomes stronger, is it possible he could be a challenge to the juro
dieties? And what happened between the the gods? The saiyan ones obviously were not
happy that the juro ones invaded their turf.
Looking forward to more.
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June 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ah, the carnage was lovely. I hope that you have a few more chapters for this story up your sleeve.
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June 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my. Those lemons were soooooooo good I can taste them. Oh, wait, that\'s the Mike\'s Hard Lemonade I\'m drinking. How appropreate! *takes another sip* \"mmmmmmmmmmm.\"
I know that I should have at least ten question about things like the throne and the other characters, but I won\'t ask them. As a matter of fact, I may just go and reread the chapter!
I know that I should have at least ten question about things like the throne and the other characters, but I won\'t ask them. As a matter of fact, I may just go and reread the chapter!
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June 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well, you never said \"The End\"... but it sure felt like a beautiful ending. *sigh* Maybe Goten can ease Krillin\'s poor mind? Even if there isn\'t a epilogue, I would like to believe it happened.
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June 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
How the hell did I get two chapter behind. oh well, anyway. I loved the way you killed Bardock it was so deserved too bad there is only so much you can do to a body while its still alive. *sigh* I feel so bad for Krillin...I damn near cried. *pouts* But the Goten and Trunks sex brought me right out of it. *lecherous grin*
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May 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
, fingers that felt like metal brands and tightened with every passing second, prolonging the loss of oxygen just to prove that he could.--o_O my poor por Vegeta...
Even with his ears bleeding from the loss of the Juro slaves, he was impervious.--psycho bastards are usually unstoppable. Gosh he is upsetting me!
The hands tightened, just a fraction, and the smile on that bastard’s face got a little broader as he realized he held the heir to the Saiyan throne in his hand, and the other ones…--Ugh! that bastard thinks he has the upper hand! He thinks he is so great I know he does!!! *sobs* I want him to die so badly!
“That’s were you belong, on your knees….whore.” --*screams*!!!! Oh god...I cannot wait for Bardock to die...I will throw a party and everything! I him him so. I hate when he calls Vegeta a whore! It makes me want to AHHHH! *takes large heavy pipe and bashes Bardock\'s head in* Ah...feel a little better now.
“Do me one last favor, whore,” Bardock whispered, “Scream when I kill you.”--he is a cruel man...and a sick twisted one too. To get pleasure from Vegeta\'s screaming in pain!!! NEVER, I don\'t want him to ever have that pleasure.
saw a vision of rape wou would have devastated everything beyond what it was now--if Bardock raped Vegeta...I would..ugh that was just be soooo horrible and unthinkable. I would find a way into this fic and kill him myself.
The king moved, moved with swiftness that Goku would have thought was long gone from his limbs giving the decayed nature of his body, but the King was worthless against his father--I am happy that Vegeta\'s Father did attempt to stop Bardock and happy Va dia didn\'t have to kill his father or anything like that.
Froze the Prince solid and hacked through him until he shattered like glass, and all that remained of the crowned prince was little chunks of read ice on the floor of the throne room.--that is cruel of you to put this!!! It was real and I was like about to cry and then I got to the next paragraph and I finally could breathe again!!!! Cruel! you cruel, cruel woman. I was like what a twist...he can\'t be dead...
and Vegeta was laughing.
Cackling.
--*is slightly alarmed*
made the fuck fall to his knees and scream, --I\'m glad he fell to his knees.
she wiped the tears off his face with her hand and licked them off her fingers. “You are truly something precious.” --that is so sad it just tugs y bly blackened icy unloving heart and makes me want to cry. I feel so badly for him, and I wish it didn\'t have to be this way for him.
Trunks raised the sword…--AHHHHH! whre is the rest of the story!?!?!?!?!? hehe...
*would pat him, but the king is dead, so doesn’t *--rofl
Its actually been somewhat a challenge to come up with ways to make him even more disturbing, twisted and evil.--well you did a superb job b/c I hate him! and he is very twisted. I know what you mean about Angelus..that was SO dissapointing.
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Even with his ears bleeding from the loss of the Juro slaves, he was impervious.--psycho bastards are usually unstoppable. Gosh he is upsetting me!
The hands tightened, just a fraction, and the smile on that bastard’s face got a little broader as he realized he held the heir to the Saiyan throne in his hand, and the other ones…--Ugh! that bastard thinks he has the upper hand! He thinks he is so great I know he does!!! *sobs* I want him to die so badly!
“That’s were you belong, on your knees….whore.” --*screams*!!!! Oh god...I cannot wait for Bardock to die...I will throw a party and everything! I him him so. I hate when he calls Vegeta a whore! It makes me want to AHHHH! *takes large heavy pipe and bashes Bardock\'s head in* Ah...feel a little better now.
“Do me one last favor, whore,” Bardock whispered, “Scream when I kill you.”--he is a cruel man...and a sick twisted one too. To get pleasure from Vegeta\'s screaming in pain!!! NEVER, I don\'t want him to ever have that pleasure.
saw a vision of rape wou would have devastated everything beyond what it was now--if Bardock raped Vegeta...I would..ugh that was just be soooo horrible and unthinkable. I would find a way into this fic and kill him myself.
The king moved, moved with swiftness that Goku would have thought was long gone from his limbs giving the decayed nature of his body, but the King was worthless against his father--I am happy that Vegeta\'s Father did attempt to stop Bardock and happy Va dia didn\'t have to kill his father or anything like that.
Froze the Prince solid and hacked through him until he shattered like glass, and all that remained of the crowned prince was little chunks of read ice on the floor of the throne room.--that is cruel of you to put this!!! It was real and I was like about to cry and then I got to the next paragraph and I finally could breathe again!!!! Cruel! you cruel, cruel woman. I was like what a twist...he can\'t be dead...
and Vegeta was laughing.
Cackling.
--*is slightly alarmed*
made the fuck fall to his knees and scream, --I\'m glad he fell to his knees.
she wiped the tears off his face with her hand and licked them off her fingers. “You are truly something precious.” --that is so sad it just tugs y bly blackened icy unloving heart and makes me want to cry. I feel so badly for him, and I wish it didn\'t have to be this way for him.
Trunks raised the sword…--AHHHHH! whre is the rest of the story!?!?!?!?!? hehe...
*would pat him, but the king is dead, so doesn’t *--rofl
Its actually been somewhat a challenge to come up with ways to make him even more disturbing, twisted and evil.--well you did a superb job b/c I hate him! and he is very twisted. I know what you mean about Angelus..that was SO dissapointing.
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May 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m sorry I haven\'t reviewed in a while. I\'ve been out of town and trying to finish my own writing... Any who, I\'m finally caught up and am now jumping up and down with glee. I love torture and that thing with Bardock and Goku\'s memories was just evil. Which of course means that I absolutely adored it. I do feel sorry for Vegeta though. He is surrounded by all that raw physical power and has none of his own. pposppose having the political power helps even the score out some but eventually he\'ll need the physical power just to keep the political power. Go GOTEN!!!! Did I nail that theology or what? I now am worried about Krillin. Is he dying? Is he living? I don\'t like the idea that he can\'t go home. The Juro Gods should be punished just for being anoying and stupid. I don\'t like them. AS for the next chapter being bloody... Bring it on!
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