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Oww...two lemons for the price of one. This be a joyous occassion! Me oveactiacting again. Heh...Heh...Anyway, Goku is truely an amazing man. Still being able to preform after taking the mother of cold showers. Heh...Heh...

Finally Vegeta can overcome the nighmares of Freeza.

Looking forward to more.

Two, two lemons! Ah Ah Ah Ah.

Very daring of Vegeta to touch Goku after he was all icy cold from his washing.

I think it is adorable the way Chi Chi thinks of Bulma as \'her\' kitten.

*does a dance* Frieza is dead! Wahooooooo! *gets suddenly serious, and rubs hands together* \"Is Bardock next?\"

Weird sort of sympathy dream that the Juro Gods gave to Goten. The wording in this chapter made it seem like they do that often.

I like Chi Chi\'s peoples custom of bring the head of the defeated. It may have given Vegeta some of that closure that he was worrying about, and no one can get the bright idea to try to cyborg Frieza back together.

No Bulma and no Krillin, I understand that they wouldn\'t have much to do with what is currently going on, and really, the time frame isn\'t much more than a couple of hours.

Eww...Frieza\'s head. That is extremely creepy. I am glad to find out that there wasn\'t really a choice for our Saiyan Prince. Oddly it make me feel a bit better about the whole thing.

Aww...poor Gohan...*rolls eyes*...sure having your pet frog blowed up by your daddy is a good reason to be a traitorous ass clown. But I\'m sure there\'s more, right?

So the Juro Gods, dare I say it, jealous of Goten\'s power? Hmmmm, interesting.

*brings pom poms out for fferfferent occasion* Go Goku, beat his ass to a bloody pulp! (Okay, lousy cheer, but I was never really a cheerleader, I just like the pom poms!)

Really smart of Chi Chi and Trunks to yse their cooling abilities to slow the flow of Goten\'s blood.

I hope that Vegeta can make SSJ.

Me favorite story...did I tell you that? Anywho, Bardock is the worst fucking father that I have ever heard of. I am glad that Goten kept the ass clown Frieza from telling Goku that. It made me so sad. *sigh* I glad you\'re stretching out the bastard death too. He so deserves it. Also very DBZ.

And I quote from disclaimer, section B:

\"ALL RIGHTY. *rubs hands together and looks up terms for the list of warnings: * Sadly, this is AU, but folks, don’t run away already screaming. You can read it. I swear It’ll be chocked full of lemony goodness. LEMONS (Not talking about the fruit here, either. I’m talking about the sex ones; although how did it come to be a ‘lemon’ anyway?) Homosexuality (er…duh.) Also (warnings I’ve never useforefore! Gasp): bondage, shady professions, and graphic descriptions. (Hopefully graphic anywho.) Also, dirty language doubtlessly. DARK. BAD THINGS HAPPEN HERE FOLKS.\"

Or to be more specific...:

\"...I swear It’ll be chocked full of lemony goodness...\"

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Thmon mon countage has gotten too low... viewers need smut! *crosses her arms and pouts* DON\'T U EVER LISTEN TO YOUR BISHIES!? >_<

*sighs* It\'s what keeps me going when the plotline gets too confusing... -_-0

But no matter... I\'m just ranting. ~_^ I know you\'re a professional.

First and formost sorry i haven\'t reviewed ine 10e 1000000 years. Just lazy I guess. anywho :) I was gladglad when Bulma wasn\'t really dead. I really like her in this story. and I was as glad as one can be when Gohan died he was an evil jerkhead. Poor Goten hes all powerful and those mean and nasty gods wont let him be. *sighs* I think since he doesn\'t live on that planet he shoult hat have to live b thier rules........unksunks with ewwwwwwww the only good part about that was Vegeta when he was like \"Why should he care who his brother fucks.......\" or something along those lines. I chuckled.

Thanks for like 10 really good chapters....I think that was the last time I reviewed I am so bad at this.

~*Noel*~

Reviewing chapters 21, 22 and 23

\"...Because for a long time—much longer than Trunks would admit to anyone out loud—Goten was the only one in the universe that thought he was anything but a murderer.\"

This explains alot about Trunks\' somewhat distant nature, and determined edge. Can\'t have been easy for him to live with this sort of attitude constantly around him. It certainly explains the cave. I\'m glad that he and Goten found each other... everyone needs someone.

Trunks and ChiChi getting together? (shudder)

Bulma seems to have definitely had a wake up call with that abduction... not that I blame her, waking up in that tank would have been horrifying. I can well imagine her reassessing alot of things after that experience. I\'m glad that she now sees some of the value in Trunks and no longer thinks of him as \'the murderer\'.

\"...If he wanted to chew his food loudly he was more than welcome to chew his food loudly in her presence.\"

(Chuckle) Yup! that would pretty much be my attitude as well. :-)

Yeah, I really like that Goten can influence Bardock\'s mind through false visions... but the fact that Goten temporarily becomes the person whose mind he is in, definitely sounds like a dangerous action. (shudders at the thought of being trapped within Bardock\'s psyche)

Good to know that Goten can heal Goku\'s mind. Got very annoyed with Krillin buttingon ton that and telling Goten and Vegeta that he won\'t allow them to mess with his mind... ironic really, considering that (albeit unintentionally) it was Krillin\'s fault that Goku\'s mind is messed up in the first place, due to him allowing Bardock access to it all those years ago.

\"...Because today was the last day of Freiza’s life. Tomorrow of hof his abused would be back, and they would claim thggotggot’s life.\"

\"Vegeta would have liked it to be him.\"

I can totally sympathise with this. It would be good for him to at least be able to witness Frieza\'s demise at the hands of Goku, but I can fully understand how Vegeta would love for it to have been him who would kill Frieza... it would go a long way in restoring some of what he lost to the bastard... still, at least another of Frieza\'s victims will have the chance of killing him and restoring something of himself in the process... so that\'s good.

Irritated beyond all means by this:

\"...Felt that Freiza hadn’t taken him against his will, but taken him with his will and that made it hurt so much worse. Wanted the fucker dead so he could never speak those words, could never say out loud what had happened.\"

Understand at this point that this is Vegeta\'s self-loathing speaking to him, convincing him that it was his fault etc, etc, etc, but I wish just for once that he would damn well get a grip on reality and stop beating himself up over what coult bet be helped. I\'m certainly not unsympathetic to what he must be going through (I think that\'s very obvious by now) but he\'s never going to be able to move on with his life if he keeps thinking that everything that happened to him was somehow his fault. Maybe his mind is not so \'scar free\' as Goten thought.

\"...(Most often in procedures such as this, the healer actually became possessed of the painful memories and acted them out in their gory details.\"

Shit... Goten is very brave to venture into Goku\'s mind if this is a strong possibility. Stuff the Juro Gods, if they condemn such a courageous action. I hope he can clear Goku\'s mind completely.

\"...Because there were things that Goku hadn’t remembered. Like his tail. Bardock took his son’s tail. Like the words that Bardock said to him when he saved him. How he told him he was so pretty, and let him bleed and cry and loved it.\"

Bardock is one sick bastard to do all that to his son. I\'m not exactly sure how this \'cleansing\' process of Goku\'s mind works, but I hope that these things that Goku didn\'t remember, aren\'t suddenly brought to the forefront of his mind whilst this process is occurring... that would be horrible.

Deeply glad that Goten\'s mind can be washed from all that stuff he experienced in Gok min mind. Not really something you would want to remember.

Well, all caught up, and somewhat glad of it... this is a very draining fic... one chapter at a time is so much better. :-)