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(Oh, she’s not dead.) That was Goten’s mental voice in his mind. (But she should be. They put their blood back into her. Freiza wants her.)--O_O, I figured something was up when they took her body. But sheesh they give you a choice to die you kill yourself and they bring you right back...that is hell.

Trunks is worried about where Goten is going to sleep he must have a soft spot for him...

I loved when Goten was talking to Trunks through his mind. ^_^

I feel badly that Goten has bled as much as he breathed and has so many scars on his body. Even if he can turn off the pain, it is still horrible toe toe to go through the pain and have scars as reminders even if you cant feel it.

(Oh, shit, Trunks, you should see his mind. Its so full of scars its impossible to understand how he’s still standing. Tell him she’s fine. No, I’ll tell him.)--that is horrible, that makes me so sad. It must be pretty bad...I love how Goten seems so caring and concerned about everyone\'s well being.

Whose flesh was marked with the crimes of their past. --wow, so is that what happened to Goten then? That is a very interesting idea, I thought it was very cool.

So if you’re going to stand there and pity anyone, pity your self. I never asked you to like me.)--That\'s right! You tell him...and the Juro do seem to live a pretty sheltered life. Seem to be weary of everything, but at the same time that is their life. But it would be nice to see if Krillen coulep oep out of his box...if he does I wonder if he would just drive himself mad for breaking the laws of the Juro. And at a time like this when everything is falling apart you would think he wouldn\'t care any longer to uphold these rules but he does and some part of me respects him for that, because that is a very hard thing to do. But the other part of me says will he ever think what\'s the big deal...and do somng wng without thinking if it is upholding the Juro, if he will just act sponatenously.


But really, he shouldn’t have been surprised that this creature could control his mind while his body slept. --that is freaky.

Goten\'s end yell at Krillen very good...Krillen needs to hear these things maybe one day he will understand...

The end notes were hilarious!!!!

If you think the ‘exploding’ trick was awful, wait to see what Goten does next… *says this like a cheesy commercial *--LMAO!!!!!

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Grr, so I\'ll have to fight for you then, eh? I\'m willing to, this one update a day just makes me so happy I could explode.

Excellent!

I wonder who Goten likes, if anyone.

And with th\'in\'interesting limitations,\' why can\'t anyone touch him? Will they bonded?

Explode? Heal his wounds?

Alright. Enough about Goten. I hope Freeza gets what he deserves.

Keep it coming.

A mind reader with no training in how to block out others\' thoughts (Goten) I am surprised he isn\'t crazy (to the point of no help). I did notice in the other chapter that the Juro Gods seem to have a VERY personal interest in Goten. Makes me wonder.

Yes! Chi Chi is still interested in Trunks, not that this would ever be my favorit couple, it just seems okay for this fic. (this is a really cool A/U)

So, Bulma being a cat, does she really have nine lives? That could get interesting.

dialog at end, \"Yeah Trunks, what are your going to do about Goten\'s ablilities, Hmmm?\"

Can\'t wait for next chapter, *wrings hands in worry, \"Please save Bulma gang, Please!\"

I\'m glad Bulma is alive - Really I am! I like kitty folks and I\'m sure that the the strange team you have built will retrieve her before anything too terrible happens...*trying hard not to remember all the years YOU left Vegeta there* Goten is a neat character. Are you going to go into Gohan\'s background in the fic or just keep it as a thought?

Goten\'s here!!!!!

Saw the six dots on the strange things forehead first—the mark of the Juro—and then the black tail, the spiky black hair and the dark eyes--oo so he can read mind to. Alright very interesting indeed.

“No,” Krillin said, struggled tt bat back to his feet, “He’s going to kill him!”
“Good,” Vegeta said. Crossed his arms over his chest.--LoL. love the contrasting personalties. Although I am with Vegeta on this one...who cares if he dies.

and Gohan’s whole body burst.
Exploded.--eww that is so gross...

And when Goku looked up again, Gohan was right there, on his knees and shaking—but he wasn’t dead. He was whimpering and sobbing, but he wasn’t dead. --LMAO!!!! That is horrible, how could he do that...hehe he is c.
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First: Nobody knows about me because I never told anyone about me. --hehe, I like his story that he told very cool. He is just as cool as Trunks well maybe not as cool looking because Trunks is looking hot in this fic, but pwer wise he is very cool. He seems to have killed everyone he was around well not everyone but his mother and etc...

“And while I am very fucking powerful, Prince Vegeta, I will admit that I have limits. Interesting limits.” --what are the limits I wonder...

That he was powerful, and that nobody would remember him when he had gone. How the fuck was that useful?--rofl! I love that

Vegeta didn’t really care. Wasn’t interested in the kid’s life story, in his nifty ability to make someone think they had just blown up--lol, Vegeta\'s not impressed eh? I do wonder what Goten depends on though...

“Some things even we cannot see.”--I am very glad that this was pointed out to Krillen.


“Who does these washes?” Goku asked.--these washes are very interesting, just shows me that in a world of ppl with different powers how far wone will go to , attain their own power or control...you have to be very creative to livein a world such as this one I suppose.

*gasp* Goten can\'t touch anyone? *is very interested to know all about his powers*

The end notes had me lmao!
ooo so Krillen is going to have a tough time in this ficcie...I kinda figured that b/c he is dead set on not going agt ant any of his teachings. I cant wait for next chap this ficcie is sooo good!!!
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I\'M BACK!!! Sorry, been busy past few days. (Try reading five stories at one time, and not getting confused.) I\'m glad that Bulma\'s alive, but I don\'t want her to be in the Ice-jin\'s hands, but I\'ll deal. I don\'t know who\'s cooler, Trunks or Goten. It\'s a shame that he can\'t touch anyone, though. So, does a lash appear everytime he uses his powers? Definitely glad that Gohan\'s dead, and he was the liar. But, it was for the better, believing that he was an OK guy, and then having this happen. He shoulda listened when Trunks told him not to piss him off, but then we wouldn\'t\'ve seore ore of his cool powers. Still am anxious for more, and no, I wasn\'t making fun of Bulma the other day, I just thought that it was funny. Later, Card.

Yeah, Bulma\'s alive! Is this part of Bardock\'s plan, or is Frieza working on his own? Hmmm, if Chi Chi can\'t have Trunks is she going after the kitten?

This chapter certainly explained a lot of things, but it also left me with so many questions.

If you would it would be a big help to me cause it\'s litterly only a couple days old. I\'ll even give you a darksaiyan e-mail address if you whant (I\'m kinda unlimited on the number of those I have he he) The website is going to be a dragonball site, and fic archive. I needed to learn how to do everything for my boyfriend\'s hosting company ukhs.com cause someone left recently. So I had to regester the website, set up all the hosting side (litteraly from name server records to hosting space, all the stuff you take for granted to be done for you). As a result I\'m very proud of my little mess... er.. website.

Na would need to be a VERY big fish to eat em, and if there was one that big in my tank what would stop it from eating me? :D Think I like these spiders anyway.

-Hudine-

www.darksaiyan.com

www.darksaiyan.com/eFiction/index.php - no link up on actual mainpage yet

I love this story. It is the highlight of my day. I love mobid, depressingly dark stuff. I am a tad excited though, Bulma is alive...with the Icejins...which is bad, but she is alive. I love Bulma, she\'s a cool cat...please say she will be okay. I\'m glad everyone is going off to save her. Good people.

Anyway, glad for that little tidbit on Gohan.

And yes...I will make sure to tell you about updates in the future. And I am writing...fast...but I must warn that the next stuff will have the beginnings of a Goku/Geta \'thing\' but there\'s so much stuff it will probably be two (or three depending on my mood) chapters. *hides behind couch* Sorry, I told everyone this fic would be ridiculously long...me and my overactive imagination.