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May 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well I have finished reading what you have posted so far, and I think I\'m actually keeping the characters straight.
I think the only thing I\'m confused on was what happened between Goku and Chichi.
She broke it off with him because she loved him and wanted to see him happy,
but we find out later she has been cheating on him. (broke his heart twice)
Well I won’t worry about it too much seeing how she is dead now.
Wonderful word illustration and I enjoy the diff POV
I think you like food as much as Goku. (chocolate good *grins* )
For my first time reading any DBZ I\'m enjoying it. (hmm I lost my DBZ virginity)
You write s\'more and I will gladly read s\'more
I think the only thing I\'m confused on was what happened between Goku and Chichi.
She broke it off with him because she loved him and wanted to see him happy,
but we find out later she has been cheating on him. (broke his heart twice)
Well I won’t worry about it too much seeing how she is dead now.
Wonderful word illustration and I enjoy the diff POV
I think you like food as much as Goku. (chocolate good *grins* )
For my first time reading any DBZ I\'m enjoying it. (hmm I lost my DBZ virginity)
You write s\'more and I will gladly read s\'more
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May 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
He almost bit him!!!!!
DAMN IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I want him to bite Vegeta.
This was a very good chappie had me all excited, I can\'t wait until the next one.
I still love your writing style...very cool.
I really loved those openeing paragraphs and how you described everything was very good. ^.~
But when he sees Vegeta, his cup falls out of his hand, to the floor and shatters, accentuating the look of utter surprise on his face.--How could you end right there?! That is so evil!!! and your going to be on vacation too? EVILNESS I tell you!
aww I\'m only kidding...maybe.
*patiently waits for next chapter and hopes biting is involved*
^.*
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DAMN IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I want him to bite Vegeta.
This was a very good chappie had me all excited, I can\'t wait until the next one.
I still love your writing style...very cool.
I really loved those openeing paragraphs and how you described everything was very good. ^.~
But when he sees Vegeta, his cup falls out of his hand, to the floor and shatters, accentuating the look of utter surprise on his face.--How could you end right there?! That is so evil!!! and your going to be on vacation too? EVILNESS I tell you!
aww I\'m only kidding...maybe.
*patiently waits for next chapter and hopes biting is involved*
^.*
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May 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! The Cruelty! The cruelty! *sobs*
Okay. I\'m over it now; well, I\'m not over it. That was extremely cruel. I loved the fight. *eggs on fig fighting * Fight dirty! Fight dirty! Ah, but no heat-induced happiness. (ie sex.) *pouts *
And Goten really sounded upset about his mom, didn\'t he? Why, he was upset for years about it. *rolls eyes * But then, if my Mas Cas Chichi I wouldn\'t be upset... ...well, if I was Goten I wouldn\'t be.
More! Now!~ *growls, stares at story, taps fingertips on table *
J/K Take your time. I liked this chappie. But it was evil of you to leave that cliffie
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Okay. I\'m over it now; well, I\'m not over it. That was extremely cruel. I loved the fight. *eggs on fig fighting * Fight dirty! Fight dirty! Ah, but no heat-induced happiness. (ie sex.) *pouts *
And Goten really sounded upset about his mom, didn\'t he? Why, he was upset for years about it. *rolls eyes * But then, if my Mas Cas Chichi I wouldn\'t be upset... ...well, if I was Goten I wouldn\'t be.
More! Now!~ *growls, stares at story, taps fingertips on table *
J/K Take your time. I liked this chappie. But it was evil of you to leave that cliffie
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May 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I have been missing a lot
sorry haven\'t reviewed in awhile, I feels bad.
But I have been sooo busy -_- it is annoying..anywho
I am loving the fic and the chapter where Vegeta carried Goku upstairs I died I thought that was soooo cute! and romantic and just plain sweet.
And that song My Immortal by Evanescence I love that song so much it is beautiful.
Oh wow and ChiChi going to Paris? Good riddance!!!!
and Goku is being aggressive commanding Vegeta to eat...I always like that... *dies*
^.*
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sorry haven\'t reviewed in awhile, I feels bad.
But I have been sooo busy -_- it is annoying..anywho
I am loving the fic and the chapter where Vegeta carried Goku upstairs I died I thought that was soooo cute! and romantic and just plain sweet.
And that song My Immortal by Evanescence I love that song so much it is beautiful.
Oh wow and ChiChi going to Paris? Good riddance!!!!
and Goku is being aggressive commanding Vegeta to eat...I always like that... *dies*
^.*
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May 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Aw. That was so sweet. *sweat drop at that pun. * Okay, I meane Goe Goten and Trunks thing was sweet. *pets the Saiyans*
Poor Goku. Good thing he\'s got Vegeta right there so he can... Feed him cake. O.o Want to know what this cake-eating thing is. Am going to wait. *taps fingers together impatiently *
Sorry about not reviewing earlier. Saw this chapter up and didn\'t get to the reviewing until just now. Sowwy. *ducks head *
But I like it. Want to know what\'s up with the cake, the teacher and the King.
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Poor Goku. Good thing he\'s got Vegeta right there so he can... Feed him cake. O.o Want to know what this cake-eating thing is. Am going to wait. *taps fingers together impatiently *
Sorry about not reviewing earlier. Saw this chapter up and didn\'t get to the reviewing until just now. Sowwy. *ducks head *
But I like it. Want to know what\'s up with the cake, the teacher and the King.
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May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh, look, I\'m signed in still. *ponders this thought * Anywho.
I really like that telepathic/telekinetic guy. he seems like a decent person. *pets him* Mostly like the King. (Never was a fan of him.) Am still wary of that teacher feller.
And Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!~ We don\'t get to see what happened with Trunks and Goten and Goku and Vegeta?! *sob sob sob * *sniffle *
No, really. I like it. And I can wait. (Mostly.)
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I really like that telepathic/telekinetic guy. he seems like a decent person. *pets him* Mostly like the King. (Never was a fan of him.) Am still wary of that teacher feller.
And Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!~ We don\'t get to see what happened with Trunks and Goten and Goku and Vegeta?! *sob sob sob * *sniffle *
No, really. I like it. And I can wait. (Mostly.)
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May 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Rabid Monkeys? Bite? Naw. They dance!
*pout * Come on, Goten, finish stripping him! And how did Trunks manage to forget that he had bitten his friend? *gives Trunks a look. *
Yeah! Goku and Vegeta are in a bedroom together! Yeah! *rolls lemons into the bedroom. * Come on! Pick one up! You know you want to! *rolls some more *
Anyway. Mean Chichi, I hate her. She better not try and come back or I\'ll kill her. *pulls out knives * *thinks about it for a moment * *sicks \'Alida (from You\'re Not the Only One)\' on her. * Mwhahahahahaha!
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*pout * Come on, Goten, finish stripping him! And how did Trunks manage to forget that he had bitten his friend? *gives Trunks a look. *
Yeah! Goku and Vegeta are in a bedroom together! Yeah! *rolls lemons into the bedroom. * Come on! Pick one up! You know you want to! *rolls some more *
Anyway. Mean Chichi, I hate her. She better not try and come back or I\'ll kill her. *pulls out knives * *thinks about it for a moment * *sicks \'Alida (from You\'re Not the Only One)\' on her. * Mwhahahahahaha!
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May 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Duh, ks. ks. I mean, aren\'t you supposed to be a little genius or something? \"Er...what were you doing with that picture of me while you were...\" No, really. *pets Trunks * It\'ll be okay.
I would really like to kill Chichi. I won\'t. But I would like to. Do you think Vegeouldould do it for me? *goes off to find Vegeta and ask him * Lying meaning! *kicks Chichi in the shins *
Anyway. *like a rabid monkey * More more more!
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I would really like to kill Chichi. I won\'t. But I would like to. Do you think Vegeouldould do it for me? *goes off to find Vegeta and ask him * Lying meaning! *kicks Chichi in the shins *
Anyway. *like a rabid monkey * More more more!
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May 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
loving it so far, I can\'t wait till King Vegeta meats his son again.
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May 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Meep. Sorry I didn\'t review yesterday. I saw the chapter and I didn\'t get to it. *meep * But I\'m here to day. *throws confetti *
Huh. So King Vegeta is alive. The hooded folks don\'t have their hoods on anymore and there is a fellow named... *Notices that some people read the reviews before the story * Okay, so wro wrote it, obviously you know what happened. But Yeah!
Oh, and I like the mute telepath. That\'s such a fitting irony. *pouts that she didn\'t think of something that clever first *
I like it! Want more. Now.
What are you waiting for?
:)
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Huh. So King Vegeta is alive. The hooded folks don\'t have their hoods on anymore and there is a fellow named... *Notices that some people read the reviews before the story * Okay, so wro wrote it, obviously you know what happened. But Yeah!
Oh, and I like the mute telepath. That\'s such a fitting irony. *pouts that she didn\'t think of something that clever first *
I like it! Want more. Now.
What are you waiting for?
:)
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