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by Camaro

person woa!
schedule March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is like a trip!
person Yuurei
schedule February 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Checking my mail was certainly a pleasant surprise. All I could think was, \"Woohoo! Get yo hands up!\" Then I did a little happy dance before rushing to the new chapter. Thanks so much for the early update. I\'m a little sad to hear that the story is nearing it\'s conclusion, but I\'m excited as well. ^^ In reading your story I also feel inspired. I want to push myself harder with my own writing.

Keep up what you do, and update again soon. ::hugs:

~Yuurei
person Macha
schedule February 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eew, it sounded like Goku was in more than a terrible state when Yamcha and Tien found him, and that was just from Goku\'s POV. He must have been really bad off. The DBZ gang is too dependant on sensus for survival, but hey, it\'s anime. Besides, if there were such things, I\'d be climbing Korin\'s tower to get me a handful, also.

So, as far as how the bean got into Goku\'s system. O.O WTF? Vegeta? Does he want Goku to live to spar another day or what? And then saves his ass AGIAN by giving him the hemlick. Of course, maybe if the bean hadn\'t been shoved so far down his swollen throat, that wouldn\'t have been necessary. *shrugs*

Tien or Yamcha\'s comment about Vegeta being shorter. Uh... Yeah, I thought he normally was too, so now that it\'s been brought to light that this wasn\'t the case.... (You have discribed \'Vegeta\' very well, I just have this mental image stuck in my head and it\'s difficult to get around it unless something surprises me.)... *Head tips sideways here*

Vegeta came and kidnapped his own wife? What kind of sense does that make. Now he has horns and looks like the devil. I am beginning to see a picture here, and it\'s bringing me to one coclusion, I just don\'t know where that conclusion leads. The horn wearing version is certainly NOT Vegeta. The shorter one maybe, but how could two Vegeta\'s exsist, and no body notice it?

This Bruder character. I loved the way you discribed his features by the way, especially the part about his/their smiles.

He certainly has Goku almost seren (sp?) after just a couple of moments. I am hoping the old man doesn\'t get more than he bargained for when Goku tells him the story.

Interesting how Goku noticed he felt like... Goku again after just a few moments in Bruder\'s presense. Can\'t wait to see how the old man reacts.

Oh, and before I forget, Dr. Briefs calling Goku to ask about Bulma. His acting abilites have me scratching my head, if everything Bulma said was/is true.
person Elizabeth
schedule February 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love your story and your little notes,
i can honestley say i never read anything like them.


E~
person Yuurei
schedule February 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Honestly, this is like nothing I\'ve ever read before. After the first chapter I knew I wanted to read this to completion. I couldn\'t even pull myself away. At the end of every chapter I kept finding myself clicking that \"next chapter\" button until I no longer had that option. I feel that anything I could possibly try to describe your story and it\'s quality as would only fall short of how truly amazing I believe it to be.

I\'ve seen some of the reviews you\'ve written to people and I\'ve seen some of the reviews you\'ve recieved just because people were angry with what you said. I\'ve also seen your author\'s notes in regards to them. I must say, for never holding back with your writing and the reviews you give, I respect you. I\'ll be waiting to read more from you soon.

Yuurei


person KittyKath
schedule February 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Incredible work....I haven\'t read a story like this one in quite awhile. It brings to light many different issues...as well as you, the author, bring intellegence to the pages. Kudos and 5 stars for this one.. look forward to more stories of this caliber
schedule February 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dear camaro,
I have to say that story was wild I dont know what interested me more the story or you fighting off all of the nasty reviewers. Well i hope you continue this story. Because Fanfiction is all about imagination and the whole pizza guy thing had me fucking laughing out of my seat! although the rape of a fat guy really distrubed me....
anyho nice writing style! You should ignore the opressors and keep on writing love!

-IN
person FallenAngel411
schedule February 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I haven\'t read this yet, but I\'m about to. I know you from FF.com (yes, I hate them), where I read some of this...and also what I consider to be one of the greatest pieces of literature I have ever read, Dark Angel. I cried when it was deleted.....but I had it saved anyway ^__^. So yeah....I would also now like to BEG you to repost Dark Angel on this sight, where it doesn\'t stand a chance of being deleted and will be enjoyed, hopefully, but another 3,000 people. Or more.

I\'m babbling. Anyway, you\'re writing rocks the world, and you are my idol. I hope to someday be able to write like you. Ignore the shit that anyone gives you (like you even need to be told, lol) and just remember that you are truly something special, an amazing talent. If you ever get published, please write me. On that note, I seriously hope you\'re thinking about writing something besides fanfiction in the future.....your awesome imagination would definitely take you places. So consider writing for profit if you haven\'t already.

TTFN
person Sue
schedule February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great chappie as always. There really isnt anything like this story
person Ryuuko Nakasawa
schedule February 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*blinkblink* Holy shit! Dang, man! Ok, first off, fantabulous as always. It was so disturbingly creative. o_O I\'d like to peer in that head of yours and see what\'s running around. I adore your descriptions and the way you\'ve climbed into Gokuu\'s head. While he seems to be OOC, he\'s still _so_ Gokuu. Anyhoo, I\'ll be impatiently awaiting more!

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