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January 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooppppsss I mean Horrifying, not horryfying. So sorry
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January 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I couldn\'t possibly put it better myself macha...the story is coming along and it keeps getting deeper. It scars me that this is happnign to goku...but in a way...you kind of want it...you like it, and you want to see what goku can really do. In reality I just think goku needs a big hug...maybe if we all gave him one he\'d know how to love again ^_^;;
Bytheway, I will never forget your kindness Camaro...We all love you!
Bytheway, I will never forget your kindness Camaro...We all love you!
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January 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O.O Oh my. I have one word for this chapter. Bleak.
Even though I know it\'s not what the story is about, I keep saying to myself, \"Goku will come to his senses, I know he will.\" Of course, in total denial that there is even a possiblity that he won\'t. Then he goes and breaks Chichi\'s arm, and says those things, and now my conveictions are falling apart! *sighs* The words he used were so.... Vegeta like in a way. \"You won\'t go any where, because no one will have you.\"
Gohan blowing up Ichoras (sp?), and Goku knowing that all his words are just that, empty words. *shudders* All the strange behavior, and now this? What kind of thoughts are going through the child\'s mind? Personally, I hope to never \'understand.\' Sure, I\'d like to know what he\'s thinking, but I don\'t ever want to \'feel\' that it\'s alright to do such things. (Well, I did have my teenage years.... *shrugs* I hope I have grown beyond that *grins*)
And all those people thinking that it\'s moral decay that is happening, when, really, it\'s social decay. The standards that governed peoples behaviors have gone out the window in favor of survival. Or is it even worse than that? Has it gone beyond the survival instincts? Just doing these things because one can? If that is the case, then it is moral decay.
Even though I know it\'s not what the story is about, I keep saying to myself, \"Goku will come to his senses, I know he will.\" Of course, in total denial that there is even a possiblity that he won\'t. Then he goes and breaks Chichi\'s arm, and says those things, and now my conveictions are falling apart! *sighs* The words he used were so.... Vegeta like in a way. \"You won\'t go any where, because no one will have you.\"
Gohan blowing up Ichoras (sp?), and Goku knowing that all his words are just that, empty words. *shudders* All the strange behavior, and now this? What kind of thoughts are going through the child\'s mind? Personally, I hope to never \'understand.\' Sure, I\'d like to know what he\'s thinking, but I don\'t ever want to \'feel\' that it\'s alright to do such things. (Well, I did have my teenage years.... *shrugs* I hope I have grown beyond that *grins*)
And all those people thinking that it\'s moral decay that is happening, when, really, it\'s social decay. The standards that governed peoples behaviors have gone out the window in favor of survival. Or is it even worse than that? Has it gone beyond the survival instincts? Just doing these things because one can? If that is the case, then it is moral decay.
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January 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What is the point of reading if there isnt any love in the story neways? you talk about writing sex for sex sake like its bad and then you put religion and sex in the same story. Your a HYPOCRITE! You may write well but you flame other peoples stories for having rape stuff and then yours has religion and gay sex in it., thsoe two DONT MIX WHORE!!!
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December 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ah, the benifits of reading through this tiwce. I missed something the frist time, but saw it this time. \"It wasn\'t the hand...\" Vegeta said. So, if it wasn\'t the hand that had him terrified, and there was only one other thing discribed in that particular paragragh, it had to be...., well, I am not going to say. I am going to let other folks get it on their own.
So many things in this one chapter. I am very sorry to see that Krillin choose the easy way out, rather than wanting revenge against the thing that had taken is girlfriend. I also think, that somewhere, this effected Goku deeply, because, since Krillin had taken his own life a wish to the dragon couldn\'t bring him back.(I don\'t know that Dragons and wishes have any part in this story, but that\'s how I enterpret it.)
Vegeta\'s crassness about the whole situation, well, I am glad to see that Goku has finally grown a pair. I just have to wonder how long they will last.
So, Vegeta isn\'t trying to convince Goku there isn\'t a God, just trying to turn him from Him? Interesting.
So many things in this one chapter. I am very sorry to see that Krillin choose the easy way out, rather than wanting revenge against the thing that had taken is girlfriend. I also think, that somewhere, this effected Goku deeply, because, since Krillin had taken his own life a wish to the dragon couldn\'t bring him back.(I don\'t know that Dragons and wishes have any part in this story, but that\'s how I enterpret it.)
Vegeta\'s crassness about the whole situation, well, I am glad to see that Goku has finally grown a pair. I just have to wonder how long they will last.
So, Vegeta isn\'t trying to convince Goku there isn\'t a God, just trying to turn him from Him? Interesting.
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that made me lose my breath. Why would anyone want to delete your stories? I\'ve run across so many more that are ten times worse. I agree that flamers are made up of underaged corrupted kiddies and ppl looking in the wrong category but never fear, for I am neither. The monster sounds like the devil. It\'s scary as hell. The whole dream creeped me out, but in a way it is very fascinating.
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
With the sheer violence and malisciousness in which these people kill themsleves,coupled with those piles of burning scripture and the blackness of their eyes, it makes me think of that creature in Goku\'s dreams. Like maybe he\'s the one who\'s doing it all. that person, the one from the video camera, they were screaming \"It
s coming! It\'s coming!\"\'\' But if they\'re all supposed to be killing themselves and eachother, then what exactly were they afraid of that \'was coming\'? Vegeta wants a drink? Heehee.
s coming! It\'s coming!\"\'\' But if they\'re all supposed to be killing themselves and eachother, then what exactly were they afraid of that \'was coming\'? Vegeta wants a drink? Heehee.
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Jesus... Was this the only killer in which Goku saw through their own eyes, or were there more than just this Pizza Man? I\'d go completely insane if something like that happened to me. I\'m astounded that he can just roll over after me wakes up and enjoy the sunshine. Yikes!
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December 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is just a wonderful story. It\'s so fascinating and you can never tell what’s going to happen next. I also love the spin on Vegeta\'s character. It\'s all so mysterious from Goku\'s eyes ...And here comes the finale, or should I say apocalypse, eh.
Oh, and also I was listening to this song the other day (Time Is Running Out by Muse) and it just seemed to extremely well with your story. You really should check it out yourself. It’s a great song. That’s all. Thanks for writing such a wonderful story.
Oh, and also I was listening to this song the other day (Time Is Running Out by Muse) and it just seemed to extremely well with your story. You really should check it out yourself. It’s a great song. That’s all. Thanks for writing such a wonderful story.
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December 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
“How come it is, that every day terrible people live? How come it is that these monsters can get away with murder, with stealing, with anything? And how come the purest of them all is the one to go in the end? You sacrificed yourself to save strangers and to save your family,” He sobbed. “And I can’t understand it. What does that make of me?”
-I loved this line. It\'s truth is sickening to me, but the truth all the same. The scene with Krillian was wonderful. It stirred feelings within me that i don\'t like... but feelings none the less. I loved when he told Gohan that Goku was the sun and the sky. Beautifully written. It seemed hopeful yet sad. The ending was wonderful, with Vegeta showing up and telling Goku to tell him to stop.. the monster within him reappearing. The ending line was wonderful as well.
I have to say this fic is very good. Original and that is something i always love. I read your profile and i laughed. Not because it was humorous because of the stupidiy of the human race. People always say they want you to tell them what they did wrong, right. That is what reviews are for. to tell you what you did right and what you did wrong. But once you say what they did wrong, they instantly feel offended. Obviously they won\'t be able to take their writing any further in life. Rejection and failure is a part of being in the writing business. People would rather be fed lies than hear the sad truth. I\'m sure you knew this already. Flames are when you sit there and say this fic sucks blah blah blah. I have seen some reviews of yours and they didn\'t seem like flames to me. You are stating the truth that no one else is willing to admit and the writer isn\'t willing to hear. I think the stupidity from ff.net is transfering over here. The kids are probably just wanting to piss someone off.
I\'ve seen fics with many reviews... and the fic was horrible when i read it. Stating that reviews don\'t really matter. Half of them could have been flames anyways.
People have no repect for originality. They want to read the same shit and write the same shit. Almost all of the fics on either site are the same. 2 characters fall i love. The end. Boring if you ask me.
I think if you have the talent you can flaunt it and think highly of yourself. Which you can. I always see the word \'bitch\' as someone who is extremely stupid and unkind. You seem very intellegent to me, i don\'t know about the other part yet but from what i heard from my good friend Macha there is another side to you. I guess i will end my review and say i do love the fic. It drips with originality, something that isn\'t always loved but should be.
I think the world has already gone insane. Not many have noticed yet.
-Agent182
-I loved this line. It\'s truth is sickening to me, but the truth all the same. The scene with Krillian was wonderful. It stirred feelings within me that i don\'t like... but feelings none the less. I loved when he told Gohan that Goku was the sun and the sky. Beautifully written. It seemed hopeful yet sad. The ending was wonderful, with Vegeta showing up and telling Goku to tell him to stop.. the monster within him reappearing. The ending line was wonderful as well.
I have to say this fic is very good. Original and that is something i always love. I read your profile and i laughed. Not because it was humorous because of the stupidiy of the human race. People always say they want you to tell them what they did wrong, right. That is what reviews are for. to tell you what you did right and what you did wrong. But once you say what they did wrong, they instantly feel offended. Obviously they won\'t be able to take their writing any further in life. Rejection and failure is a part of being in the writing business. People would rather be fed lies than hear the sad truth. I\'m sure you knew this already. Flames are when you sit there and say this fic sucks blah blah blah. I have seen some reviews of yours and they didn\'t seem like flames to me. You are stating the truth that no one else is willing to admit and the writer isn\'t willing to hear. I think the stupidity from ff.net is transfering over here. The kids are probably just wanting to piss someone off.
I\'ve seen fics with many reviews... and the fic was horrible when i read it. Stating that reviews don\'t really matter. Half of them could have been flames anyways.
People have no repect for originality. They want to read the same shit and write the same shit. Almost all of the fics on either site are the same. 2 characters fall i love. The end. Boring if you ask me.
I think if you have the talent you can flaunt it and think highly of yourself. Which you can. I always see the word \'bitch\' as someone who is extremely stupid and unkind. You seem very intellegent to me, i don\'t know about the other part yet but from what i heard from my good friend Macha there is another side to you. I guess i will end my review and say i do love the fic. It drips with originality, something that isn\'t always loved but should be.
I think the world has already gone insane. Not many have noticed yet.
-Agent182