rate_review Reviews

It looks as though Vegeta is giving Goku every chance in the world to return some sort of feelings. Maybe not love, but to say that he sees all his faults and still would stick by him... makes me wonder. Then of course, there is still a very confused Goku. Still doing those things which he thinks are morally wrong, but does them anyway. And he says he WON\'T love Vegeta... even couldn\'t.

Well, it\'s good to see that Bulma knows something is up, even if Chichi can\'t seem to see beyond her own nose. It\'s like Chichi wouldn\'t give Goku a chance to change even if she wanted him to.

Maybe Bulma\'s vote of confedence will get Goku out of the rut he seems to be stuck in?

Hey I\'d just like to say thanks for giving me some constructive criticism for my story. It really gave me a lot to think about. As for your story...Wow is all I can say. Do you have any published works? Because a writer of your caliber should write and be published. I love the storyline, plot and character development. It\'s so well put together. Anyway you are an awesome writer and I hope you continue your story.

Wow, that\'s a story !!!

I\'ve never read a story this dark without it being sad.

A question, does Vegeta love Goku ?
In the latest chapters it seems so, but I really wonder if or if not.

I really like Monster since it is so different, your Goku acts and feels like a real person(as far as he can be)
and Vegeta reminds me of Mephisto, a human one, with a heart.
Please don\'t laugh but there are scenes,it looks to me like this.

However, write on, I want to read the whole story and don\'t you dare to change your way of writing.

Yours Anna R.

P.S. Don\'t let the flames bother you! Even when they are awful, they are fedback
...and you don\'t have to worry about decency answering them.
And please excuse my language, no native speaker here.

Ah church...I\'d have to agree with Goku on that one. It scares the fuck out of me. Especially with creepy perverted priest wondering about. *groans* This was a fabulous chapter. I could totally picture the scenes in my head. Poor confused Goku. I say he should just go with the flow. I don\'t see anyway out of it.

o_0 someone saying those things? I guess it\'s a burden to be so talented, ne? ^_^ How freaky was that preist...i was like \"What?!\" I can\'t wait untill the next chap,
Ja ne!

I don\'t think your story is the anti-christ, like some ignorant people. I think the religon aspect of your story is perfectly fine. The only thing I\'m not sure if I like yet, is the fact that you make me question my own beliefs in God. And I don\'t mean this in a negative way; I\'m simply trying to tell you that your writing is so good, that it seems real(even if it centers on Goku and Vegeta).

Keep updating!!!

Creepy. That whole confessional thing went from normal, to disturbing to down right creepy. I got lulled into it. Okay, Goku wants to confess to feel better. Okay, now the priest is asking questions that make me sudder with embarassment. WTF happened to his eyes? Then I remembered one of the characters from Goku\'s \'dreams\'. It\'s him.

Interesting how Goku thought about how the bed wasn\'t big enough for the three of them. I have a feeling that, had he told Vegeta, Vegeta may well have killed the other fellow for him. Or, I could be wrong, maybe Vegeta wanted him to experience it. I don\'t think I\'ll ever figure that out on my own. I\'ll have to read more.

I think I would have had a mental break down before I ever made it far enough to need a confessional. He\'s still riding that roller coaster, I love Chichi, but want Vegeta.

But where do you get off calling this a religious fic when you have sex in it as well. Those two dont mix and you have no right to even label it the way you do. Its like you contradict yoruself just with the summary. LIke an oxymoron all in one sentance. Im so pissed writing this. I hope when you pray you remember that in this story you sold your soul for shock effect. This is the literary anti-christ. you should be ashamed ofyourself!!

HOLY SHIT! You weren't kidding!! That is BY FAR THE STUPIDEST flame I've ever read.
Ok, lets think about this "Just being Honest" You claim to be one of those bible thumper
types and yet you used the word "pissed" in your review. Isn't that in itself a contradiction?
Your the type of person that crushes liberal minds and creativity with your boring mumbo jumbo
bullshit attitude. If you didn't like the content, why did you start reading? She left a
warning right in the summary!

GET A FCKING LIFE!

If Goku is even half as confused as I am, well I feel sorry for him. Not that what you wrote didn't make since, but his toggeling back and forth between what's good and then doing what's wrong is where I am feeling confused. Yes, I have been in siionsions that I knew what was the 'right thing' to do, but did something else that seemed more fun at the time. I usually pay for it with a hangover the next day though.

Is all of his daring really getting him what he wanted though? Now he's tried marijian and it seems as though he's going to have sex with TWO men. Hmmm, I see more and more what you were talking about when you said that Goku was on the path to 'finding' himself. Is he going to know when he does something that isn't himself though?

Sorry this review came so late. I've been very busy.