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Gotta love the effects of pot and from your descriptions of Goku's experience, seems to me youve had your share of run ins with it. Great chapter and please be quick with the next.

God, this is awesome. You were right when you said it was like nothing I would or have ever read. But I'm sure you already knew that, right?

What else can I say? I love it.

It's very very interesting, love the story and the inner conflicts, the darkness of it is enthralling. Very good stuff indeed.

Truly amazing story. You weren't kidding when you said this would be unlike anything I've ever read before. Every chapter I'm completely stunned by the details and subtle biblical points you bring out. Its truly incredible. Wish I had a talent to create something out of a cartoon that ought to be published. I'd have to say this is by far the most thought out, original piece of fanfiction I've ever read. Believe me, I've read quite a bit too. Keep up the good work. I'd say you're an inspiration to any authors out there who are starting to think that every corner of fanfiction has been covered. You set your own mold and thats great.

Towards the end of the chapter I found myself wanting to squirm away, sympothizing for Goku's situation. The odds certainly aren't in his favor, 20 against 1(?), but he still keeps on spouting out what he believes. Yes, there were two times that he failed to see if the shoe fit on his foot before he started opening his mouth, but he hasn't backed down, just felt REALLY uncomfortable.

I liked the analogy in thest pst part of the chapter, with Vegeta being Goku's addiction. Seems to fit. He knows he shouldn't, but he keeps on anyway. How very strange that it seemed almost as Vegeta wanted Goku to love him. I would have to agree with Goku's reasons for not doing so.

wow this is super unique to say the least! update soon

Brilliant, as usual. You haven't really spoken much about sin in awhile though. I'm actually concerned about how you’re going to go about this. This is going to sound horribly juvenile, but, are they going to, excuse the phrase, "get together"? This chapter has given me the impression that, as of now, Goku just doesn't feel THAT WAY for Vegeta. But I get the idea that Vegeta isn't telling the entire truth (oh coarse, I'm sure that's intended). Anyways. I continue to follow along with this story and continue to wonder where it’s going to go.
You had two updates so close together, it was just wonderful!

You most certainly deserve a whole new genre dedicated for your "appraisable" style.

Goku with a hair cut? What's he doing to himself? Ah, I guess I am just use to the anime, and Goku not seeing any reason to change his outward apperance. So, he feels a need for a change. I am wondering why. I can come up with a couple of answers, but I don't think they are really what is making him make these decisions. Maybe he is a little more worldly now, and can tell the difference?

The 'ghost' was interesting. Saying he could see inside to/of 'Kakarott', not Goku. And the ring that made the impression. I don't recall you writing what it was made of, just that it was cold and hard.

Why does Goku seem to have a need to seek out Vegeta to tell him that he isn't interested any more? It seems to have failed time and time again, wouldn't just not going to see the other sayain work out better? I am thinking he is starting to like not being able to tell Vegeta no, or maybe, telling Vegeta 'no' and Vegeta proving how wrong he is.

I can't imagine Goku just watching what was haing ing at the party and letting it happen until it was almost too late. We he hoping Vegeta would actually show mercy? Maybe, somewhere deep inside, hoping the Prince wasn't the monster he allyally is turning out to be?

The painting was interesting. Was it meant to be part of the back ground, or were we suppose to be paying attention to the details, such as black feathers making a home amongst the white?

Were the differences Goku had been making in his own apperance playing tricks on his memory of Vegeta's own appereance?

I guess thiseview turned into a Q and A session. Sorry about that.

Whoa! this is totally a different kind of story, unique being one of the reason. Holy shit I hope you keep updating. this by far is the single greatest, most original thing I've read along the lines of fanfiction in ALL categories. why do you waste your time with this stuff though? You have the potential to be one of the greatest out there. Email me when you update OK?