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oh my god!!! I want to cry so bad! those poor boys! I am very relieved that those vile monsters were slain for that act... I grieve for Zarbon, too. this is getting so sad! I must read on! ~chapter 8~

Camaro...let me just say that I am in awe...complete and utter awe of your amazing writing abilitites. Your powers of description are above and beyond what most writers even dream of achieving! And let me say...you can write M/M relationship scenarios that have even a B/V purist like myself intrigued. You create such an incredible emotional bond between characters...I can\'t wait until Vegeta gets to the part where he finally meets Bulma. I\'ve like your story immensely thus far...but I am highly anticipating the future chapters! Great work and don\'t sweat ff.net...I do not even visit that site anymore. My account got deleted and I just said...\"F*ck it, if they want cheese and fluff posted on their site...then I do not have to waste my time (or money) supporting their endeavors. There will always be an outlet for talented writers such as yourself and many others... and that is where I will be reading.
~Caralin Fury~

I don\'t understand \'human\' behaviors, and the actual wish to see bloodshed. Even though the audience wasn\'t all human in the stadium, I still felt as though I was hearing stories of when people use to put on shows before exicutions. This is what Freiza had meant to do in the first place, wasn\'t it? Have one of the two die? So, other than the fact it was a game, of sorts, it was clearly a way to exicute one of them.

And then they refused. I don\'t think I would have had the constitution to do the same. Of course, I probably won\'t be alive had I gone through what Vegeta has. Actally, I take that back, no probablies about it.

And then the sick bastard tortures Vegeta, not for this current indiscression, NO, for something so far in Zarbon\'s past, Vegeta knows nothing of it.

Dr. Tanzil (sp?) is just as human as the rest of us. Is he hearing the story out because of sick fasination, or is he doing so because it\'s his job?

hes 18 r u that stupid and he thinks slags like u should get a life and u really think i care what people say u r just a stupid sad bitch with no life

*O.o this is my real e-mail address, though I have no name on AFF as yet* I know that I\'m only on chapter six, but a few circumstamces will not allow me to continue until tomorrow. To start off, OMFG. Just the simple fact that you could write something, go so in depth into the psyche of these individuals, the immense complexity of their thoughts and emotions, the way that they talk, the way that they act, the way that you make them EXIST... All I can say is that I can\'t catch my breath, I can\'t see strait, and I feel like I\'m being dragged right into your words. I Don\'t ever want to leave this spot, don\'t want to stop! But alas, stupid homweork.... *sigh* You are by far the most talented and dedicated and completely AMAZING author I have EVER come across and ever will. I promise you. I will remember you forever. I am so completely immersed within your story, even at this point, that I can\'t think of anything else. you have made my day, truy. Or my entire year, whichever pleases you more..... is it too soon to say that I love you? Heehee.

Ah, Goku gets introduced into the story. The meeting at the grave yard was heart wrenching. Goku\'s word were very true. Time won\'t heal it, but only put distance between the then and now. I was very interested while reading when Goku touched the doctor\'s heart, and then announced that he couldn\'t heal the hurt found in there.

I wonder if the doctor will eventually put two and two together. He did notice the similarities between Vegeta and Goku. How did Goku know about Laura? Is he stalking the Dr.? I think I remember a vauge reference about when the doctor was home one night, and didn\'t feel as though he were alone.

Continueing with Vegeta\'s story. I am glad he is not looking for justifications or forgiveness for the things he has done. He certainly has rebelled since Zarbon kicked him out. Interesting that just as he realizes he doesn\'t need Zarbon as a protector, Frezia puts the two of the against eachother, in a fight to the death no less. Other than being evil, I wonder what the white bastards motives for this are.

i am fuckin english i dont have microsoft word and u are really sad if u have a wall of hate i even have my boyfriend backing me up on that so PISS OFF cause i have to deal with people like u every day so im really fuckin scared about what u got to say an what u goin to do jump out the computer and kill me AND I READ YR SHIT STORY I WOULD RATHER RIP MY EYES OUT MY SOCKETS BEFORE I READ YR STORIES BITCH

i think this story is rubbish and i have a little problem with english so buttout

I've only read up to chapter six, and I admit that I wasn't too impressed at the beginning, but you get serious mad props for the way you've portrayed Frieza and Zarbon. Frieza's characterization especially gave me chills. What a different way, but probably so accurate to look at these characters. Trunks' death was a surprise as well, but with each element, you are building a better story. Congrats!

I have to agree with Vegeta on one thing. After having such a vaction, it would seem like someone had condenmed me to hell to go back and work for Frezia. *thinks about three day weekend and having to go back to work tomorrow*

Well, I guess Zarbon really does have Vegeta's best interests (not to mention his own) for making Vegeleepleep in a different room. Although I agree with Zarbon, it's for the best, a childish part of me says, "That SUCKS". *shrugs* If Frezia does find out how close those two have(had) become he will use it against, not one, but both of them. Frezia is and EVIL SCHEMEING BASTARD. (Always will be.)

I can also almost see the shock on Vegeta's face when he really realized he had hit Zarbon. O.O

At least Zarbon explained his reasoning. I can't imagine anyone who has known Vegeta for any length of time to actually believe the Prince would just take a "because, I said so," as any sort of real answer.