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for Saiyan Enlightenment

by CardDragonBall

person Webtester01
schedule June 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM

My favorite parts and my responses to them are in bold.


“Trunks,” he said—and was very proud of himself for not growling out the word because he was feeling much better about life in general this morning—“You can’t learn to control nature. So go find your boyfriend, be honest with him and then fuck him.” Crossed his arms over his chest. *chuckles*


Kakarot snorted. “And then,” he said like an old lady teacher, “Come back and we’ll give you a big gold star!” -LMAO at this remark.


“Uh…sfterfter I do that I won’t want to do it again?” He didn’t look like he really believed this to be the truth.


Was it the truth? Not entirely. There were still times he would like nothing mohan han to shove Kakarot to his knees and have a bout of animalistic sex. That sort of thing just didn’t go away because you did it once, but generally the urge wasn’t ever as strong as it was the first time. That first time was killer, because it took control of you until you had little choice but to give in. Stronger men than him had tried to stop the impulse and failed. But after that initial encounter, it was easier to handle. He looked at his son, who was still fidgeting and answered him (after much too long of a delay to be comforting.) “Not like you do now.” *rolls on floor laughing*


“Ah, well,” she said with an attempt at a smile. “If you’re going to be here fohilehile I’m going to go take a shower…or a bath. Are you going to be around long enough I can take a bath?”


He rolled his eyes at her and her long-ass baths, but nodded. She tossed the burp clothe on his shoulder patted him and ran off, up the stairs gleefully squeaking all the way. She was always a bizarre woman. -Squeaking all the way? Bizarre indeed! *chuckles*


Goten huffed. “Alright, look. Why are you hanging on to this so hard? Are you really going to let Dad’s decision to be with Vegeta to ruin every single aspect of your…TRUNKS!” He jumped up from the rock he had been sitting on and charged across the space and tossed himself into his boyfriend’s arms. (Never mind he looked like a spastic fangirl mauling her favorite bishie.) *rolls eyes*


“Every aspect of my trunks?” Gohan inquired, turned around and looked at them with a raised eyebrow. (Just a little tiny bit of amusement that warred with a lot of near-disgust.) How could Gohan be so dense? *laughs at his ineptitude*


I am now wondering what Goten\'s response will be when Trunks tells him what he wants to do to goten. *smirks*


KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!! Oh and review chapter 12 feaseeaseease.


I am slowly trying to put my story up on Hudine\'s site as well.



person Webtester01
schedule June 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM

My favorite parts and my responses to them are in bold.


“Trunks,” he said—and was very proud of him for for not growling out the word because he was feeling much better about life in general this morning—“You can’t learn to control nature. So go find your boyfriend, be honest with him and then fuck him.” Crossed his arms over his chest. *chuckles*


Kakarot snorted. “And then,” he said like an old lady teacher, “Come back and we’ll give you a big gold star!” -LMAO at this remark.


“Uh…so, after I do that I won’t want to do it again?” Hdn’tdn’t look like he really believed this to be the truth.


Was it the truth? Not entirely. There were still times he would like nothing more than to shove Kakarot to his knees and have a bout of animalistic sex. That sort of thing just didn’t go away because you did it once, but generally the urge wasn’t ever as strong as it was the first time. That first time was killer, because it took control of you until you had little choice but to give in. Stronger men than him had tried to stop the impulse and failed. But after that initial encounter, it was easto hto handle. He looked at his son, who was still fidgeting and answered him (after much too long of a delay to be comforting.) “Not like you do now.” *rolls on floor laughing*


“Ah, well,” she said with an attempt at a smile. “If you’re going to be here for awhile I’m going to go take a shower…or a bath. Are you going to be around long enough I can take a bath?”


He rolled his eyes at her and her long-ass baths, but nodded. She tossed the burp clothe on his shoulder patted him and ran off, up the stairs gleefully squeaking all the way. was was always a bizarre woman. -Squeaking all the way? Bizarre indeed! *chuckles*


Goten huffed. “Alright, look. Why are you hanging on to this so hard? Are you really going to let Dad’s decision to be with Vegeta to ruin every single aspect of your…TRUNKS!” He jumped up from the rock he had been sitting on and charged across the space and tossed himself into his boyfriend’s arms. (Never mind he looked like a spastic fangirl mauling her favorite bishie.) *rolls eyes*


“Every aspect of my trunks?” Gohan inquired, turned around and looked at them with a raised eyebrow. (Just a little tiny bit of amusement that warred with a lot of near-disgust.) How could Gohan be so dense? *laughs at his ineptitude*


I am now wondering what Goten\'s response will be when Trunks tells him what he wants to do to goten. *smirks*


KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!! Oh and review chapter 12 for me please.


I am slowly trying to put my story up on Hudine\'s site as well.


person Elenek
schedule June 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow! It only took Trunks what 10 minutes to do more than Goten and Piccolo did in one week. You’re still missing the main conversation needed though. I know, it’s in the outline. You’ve been hinting at it for so long now. What is Gohan’s problem anyway? Is he just homophobic or does he just not trust Vegeta. If it’s the first then he’s just going to have to learn to live with it and there really isn’t much anyone else can do. If it’s the latter then he really just needs to be taught about saiyan culture and bonds. Yeah! Vegeta’s being a Dad again and not just nnoynnoying jerk.
person chibi_vegeta
schedule June 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM



these past two chapters, 30 & 31...completely define this fic...*grins*

what may seem to be conflicts between the two are more than just that, they are also the things that bind them together...an excellent definition of love, if I may say so...

thank you...

c_v

person Webtester01
schedule June 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM

I greatly

First step: fuck. Second step: fight. Third: meditate on it. Trunks missed the first step,

screwed up the second and failed the third altogether. -LOL


It seems there is a new lesson plan. *Grins*


Keep up the great wo/p> /p>

How do you like my formatting my reviews with bold, etc.?


person Webtester01
schedule June 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM

I greatly enjoyed the update. Aff is back up... Whoohoo.


First step: fuck. Second step: fight. Third: meditate on it. Trunks missed the first step,

screwed up the second and failed the third altogether. -LOL


It seems there is a new lesson plan. *Grins*


Keep up the great work!


How do you like my formatting my reviews with bold, etc.?


person SaiyajinNeko
schedule June 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
~Crys~ I can\'t beleive that AFF.net was down for so long, it was so frustrating. What great couple of chapters, i love the bit where Vegeta and Piccolo where makingll jll jokes and Goku didnt find them funny,lol. And i wondeful lemon, i really felt all of Gokus feelings this time, i felt kinda like i was there. Weard ne? And the passion comment wreatreat. ^_^ Poor Veggie, hehe sex is like his life line. Can\'t wait till the next chap Card-san, and i hope you are feeling better, Ja ne!
person Mechanical Butterfly
schedule June 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
he really wanted to get to that ‘learn to control your impulses’ part so he could go find his son and apologize and not have to worry about beating his face into the ground. --hehe yeah that would be nice thing to control...nobody wants their face beat in.

“She thinks I’m wrong about Da…Goku. That I’m being a stubborn prick.”--he is really hurting about this if he wont even listen to his wife...that is insane that he is letting his marriage suffer.

“You know,” his brother said, glaring at him levely (which wasn’t intimidating thanks to the oversized clothes falling off his shoulders)--lmao and you know what even if he was dressed normally I dont think it would be that intinidating.

Oh. Lord. His brother thought like a woman. --LoL

Va jua just left Bulma, how the hell does anyone here expect to be able to trust that he won’t just leave Goku?--So this is what bugs Gohan. The fact that Vegeta is random. I never really thought of it. From a son/daughters pov I can somewhat understand where he is coming from, not that I really agree with him. Because Vegeta is flawless in my eyes, but I do understand and yes...I do think he is thinking like a woman. And if Vegeta went through he hhe has gone through and he hasnt left Goku yet that has to show for something.

and mentors didn’t randomly sigh at thpupipupils for no reason. --LoL

I hope you feel better soon. ^_^
Vegeta: *wearing biohazard suit *---LMAO! Vegeta in a biohazard suit and you are a dead zombie *sobs* I feel like I am trapped in a resident evil fic. *looks at Claire Redfield sleeping in Goku\'s nest and a zombie is hiding in a tree*

^.*
-MB-
person Macha
schedule June 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You spent a significate amount of time with Piccolo, Gohan and Goten this chapter. Piccolo is so wise. Can I be like him when I grow up? Well, maybe not, concing ing the lack of lemons. He was really helpful in being the con to Gohan\'s pro in this debate.

Vegeta picked a very good atmosphere for Goku to be meditating in. I hope that it turns out well for him.

Krillin was a little strange. It\'s nice to see that he was trying to be civil.

I had to laugh at how many times Goku wished that he\'d just leave.

person SaiyajinNeko
schedule June 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Woooooooo, ~Hugs Piccolo~ The almy Piy Piccolo-san. Now that we know what Gohan\'s problem is we can have it sorted easyer, hopefully. Sorry the review can\'t be longer, i have to go out. Can\'t wait for the next chap, and i hope you feel better soon, Ja ne!

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