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person jaygoose
schedule July 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am so confused now...There! Are you happy now. What the hell is going on...come on, you can tell me...no one else has to know that I know...Please? Fine! Keep your secrets! I have ways of making you talk! Muhahhaahhahaaaa! *cough*
person Macha
schedule July 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Not wierd, just hentai! hehe

Okay, so in the last chapter, I kind of thought that the conversation Chi Chi was talking about was about Bra and not a bra. So, now it would seem I was correct. It also seems that although Vegeta knows about her (although he hasn\'t said as much) he doesn\'t think she is his baby. And maybe where this story is going Bra isn\'t his daughter.

Krillin is now over he addiction for Vegeta because he saw Goku kissing the Prince sayian? Well, I guess he isn\'t as hentai as me, because I would have been joining the two and not running away. hehe

Goten and his beat around the bush questions. Doesn\'t he know his Father any better than that? The man doesn\'t take hints and sometimes not even straight out questions. I hope he learns someday.
person Webtester01
schedule July 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM

His two best friends in the whole world had suddenly irreversibly shattered his belin inn innate goodness. -Goku finally woke up to the real world. Not everyone \'good.\' Vegeta in this story seems to have a need that he cannot see.


So he left, but only for a little while, a few hours a day until he found that he was having sparring sessions with Gohan every Tuesday (thus far he’d only had the one, obviously, since it had only been a week.) Goten came to see him all the time and dragged him out to this great thing called a buffet where you paid them a little and they let you eat until you weren’t hungry anymore. (Big mistake for them. Lucky break for him.) Of course, Goten kept giving him rather odd looks and asking him odd questions about what he had done when he was a teenager. (Save the universe, son, the same thing I do now that I’m an adult! Goten hadn’t been amused, and pointed out that his father had only saved the universe once, and that he hadn’t done it alone, Vegeta had helped. It turns out Goten was talking about Buu.) His favorite color (which for some reason, Goten kept insisting ought to be purple, and he didn’t like purple.) If he had ever heard of a show called Tele-somebodies and some ling-po or sing-lala. Or Tinky Winky… The questions got a bit more bizarre after that and he was staring to think that the ‘scratch the back of your head and chuckle until EVERYONE is staring and thinking you’re a freak’ tactic wasn’t working. -Goten doesn\'t seem to care about Goku\'s privious \'saving the world\' work.


So, he’d had gotten up (from the buffet) and grabbed his son by the back of the neck, carted him out of the buffet while he stammered and said things like ‘geez, dad! I’m not a baby!’ and ‘I can walk you know!’ and ‘I can fly too!’ But he didn’t really care, he carried Goten until they were outside and dropped him on his butt in the middle of a park where little old ladies were making snide comments about the young ladies attire and children were playing with the dogs. -LOL Goten being dragged outside. That\'s a good one. And little old ladies making snide comments? How true.


So, that\'s it. Bulma had another child with another man. - Oh, Bulma, Bulma, Bulma. *shakes head*


“Tell me what happened Vegeta. Then I’ll leave you alone.”

He didn’t turn. That wasn’t what Kakarot came for and they both knew it. -LOL *smirks at Vegeta* Looks like he is going to get it this time.


Great chapter.


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person Mechanical Butterfly
schedule June 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*law and order music plays* Goku\'s on the case!!!! yay! Detective Son.

“You don’t…uh…think of me like that, do you?”
“No,” Trunks said.--*runs off screaming* The insanity of it all! *curls up in Saiyajin Enlightenment* ahh...that\'s better.

“Just what is that supposed to mean?” Trunks demanded, “Is my dad not hot enough for yours or something?” --LMAO!

“Honestly, I was thinking of calling up Vicky and getting laid.” --yeah he is calling me!!!! My 1st name is Viktorija middle name Mia..although no one has ever called me Vicky. *shrugs in defeat* So....I guess he\'s not calling me.

“Right,” Videl said, “So you and Vegeta and sex. Why did you come here?” Lady had a point.--well duh to tell stories of his exciting sex life and make everyone jealous!

“And we were talking about how…” this part sounded even worse “You could die. From sex.”--O_O!!! *falls out of chair laughing* Oh gosh, yeah that does sound somewhat ridiculous.

She looked frazzled. Chichi looked frazzled when she got horny.--Lol I thought so.

And what is this new clue about a bra...hm...I wonder what it all means! Detective Son will figure it out!

^.*
-MB-
person EleneK
schedule June 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Gohan is not an ass. I really must be rubbing off on you. He\'s not even that much of a prissy prude. He actually stayed in the room while a perent was talking about sex. Not even my sister is able to do that. Especially when Goku shows up in the kitchen covered in the evidence. LOL I loved the Uncle comment. That was just rich. The fact that Trunks and Goten are even discussing it sends shivers down my spine. gak! Poor Chichi still gets horny at the sight of Goku (or was it the pheremones?) and now she can\'t have him. Well, thats what she gets for divorcing a fine looking man like that. Oh no Bulma was pregnant. I like the fact that you reversed which woman lived and died. see ya -El-
person jaygoose
schedule June 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*gasps* Opps. Sorries. I am so lame. Heh...heh. This is like some kick ass murder mystery you know. It is so interesting. I feel so bad for the poor hetros (Trunks and Goten) I am amazed at how well Videl and Gohan took the news that Goku and Vegeta \"had fun together\". I like this so much.
person Macha
schedule June 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Does Goku really think that he is going to be more knowledgeable about the whole situation by going around asking everyone he knows just one question? It would seem as though he doesn\'t want to fall off the afformentioned wagon by staying with one person and asking a whole lot of them. Maybe it\'s a question limit with him? Ask one, okay, ask two, okay, ask the third and it comes out really stupid? Sorry, I think that it would be kind of funny in a way if that was how his mind worked. (Am I strage or what? do I really want you to answer that question? *thinks about it* I guess you already know that I am *Shrugs*)

It does seem to be that he is getting some where asking several individuals one question though. He was a horrible liar. hehe, Piccolo/sex....Riiiiight.

Gohan did take the whole situation really well.

Poor, poor scared Trunks. And disturbed Goten... hehe, good idea, become undisturbed by having hetero sex. hehe. (of course, yaoi sexsn\'sn\'t bother me. *thinks for a moment* niether does yuri sex.)

person Webtester01
schedule June 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM

Goten finding out from Trunhat hat happended -LOL

Goten looked sick. “Uh. No. But… Aw, man! Why’d he have to go after my dad?! Krillin was bad enough and why in the hell did you have to come tell me?” He made a noise of displeasure and then looked at him again. “Why? My dad could get anyone he wanted, why the hell would he go for Vegeta?”


“Just what is that supposed to mean?” Trunks demanded, “Is my dad not hot enough for yours or something?” It was only after he said that when he realized he was defending his father homosexual attractiveness, and the magnitude of that thought was enough to make him shiver a little as he sat down in defeat. Because he had no damn clue just what the hell was going on with this fucked up world anymore. “What are we going to do Goten?” -LOL Looks like Trunks has some mixed feelings and is currently in denial.


“Oh, Dad,” Gohan said and pinched his nose. “You stink. And what’s that on your…” His son’s eyes got huge and loo looked down at his chest, made a noise that was much too high pitched for a male to have made and grabbed the nearest towel to scrub at his skin. “I don’t think I should ask but: What happened?” He moved back to his feet and yanked Goku up by his arm, careful not to touch him for too long. -*Laughs hysterically.* The look on Gohan\'s face is priceless!


Oh. Right. He remembered…no. He knew nothing about these sexually transmitted thingamajigs at all. But if you could die from them that was a starting point. So he flashed his son a smile and said “Thanks Gohan!” before he raised his fingers to his head again and set out to find someone else that could help him with his little crusade. (Someone with whom he felt much more comfortable talking about sex.) When he reappeared, he found himself in Chichi’s living room, looking at her and her new husband sitting docilely on the couch. She was mending clothes and he was being a snore fest. (Poor woman. She traded in he who was never around for this square that was always around and never interesting.) *blinks* Oh, Goku, your sex education is sorely lacking. LOL Chichi\'s new husband is a snorefest.


Keep it comeing.


person Webtester01
schedule June 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Sorry I forgot to close a tag, so everything turned out bold. Ooops.
person Hecate18
schedule June 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I have stayed away from Aff for far too long, (I\'ve got alot to catch up on \'Saiyan Enlightenment\')

Wow! This fic is original, I just love what you\'ve done with the characters.
I\'m thinking Vegeta is mentally unstable, (But isn\'t he always???)
Actually everyone seems odd (in a good way.) ^_^

Goten and Trunks have GIRLFRIENDS!!!
Noooooooooooooooooooo ::runs out of breath::

And Chichi, she\'s um, nice!... and re-married O_O

::Sits patiently waiting for the next chapter:: ^-^

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