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schedule
June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
\'Kay coutinue coutinue I wanna to see what happens
schedule
August 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i like the ideas but i dont really like your writing style. it\'s just a lttle too...erm..basic. can i ask how old you are because you do realise this site is for 18+ right? i dont mean to offend you it\'s just that i got the impression that maybe you were like 14 or summin. sorry.
schedule
June 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the advice Agent182 and I shall use it wisely and it\'s my first time for a yaoi so sorry.
the author,
Vgirl
the author,
Vgirl
schedule
June 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I know it\'s short but hey im updating tonight so hey what the heck and I promise I\'ll update daily.
the author,
Vash_sgirl
the author,
Vash_sgirl
schedule
June 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Good start. Very short to my dismay but i can live with it.
O.O i was hoping to see a lemon there... but i guess not.. *frowns* hopefully there will be one sooner or later.
Hm, next time add more detail and make spaces between the dialogue, it\'s hard to read in huge paragraphs. Make it like this:
\"Hello Kakkarot\"
\"Hey Vegeta\"
- 2 spaces between the dialogue or paragraphs. Just some hints that i hope help. I hope you update soon.
Agent -182-
O.O i was hoping to see a lemon there... but i guess not.. *frowns* hopefully there will be one sooner or later.
Hm, next time add more detail and make spaces between the dialogue, it\'s hard to read in huge paragraphs. Make it like this:
\"Hello Kakkarot\"
\"Hey Vegeta\"
- 2 spaces between the dialogue or paragraphs. Just some hints that i hope help. I hope you update soon.
Agent -182-