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November 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
It doesn't make too much sense why Bra wouldn't just hire, with all her money, a babysitter instead of running to family members or friends. I mean, if she so worried about Goten seeing her child then why wouldn't she just have a babysitter come by instead of risking it. This whole story could've been told into chapters or less instead it's been drug out for too long. This seemed like a pretty pointless story I don't know what the motive was of writing it. Not much plot, not much sex, just a bunch of sentences strung together. There were plenty of typos, Unlike what another reviewer mentioned, lots of grammatical errors. I can tell whoever wrote this is not much older than 20, if not younger.
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November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AWWW that was so beautiful
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January 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i really really like this fic. u r very talented as a writer. do u think u could do a little continuation of this story or an epilogue? i really did like this story and i\'d hate 2 see it in....
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January 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
end not in sorry
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September 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*cries* OMG, beautiful... Okay, so... No errors that I remember seeing... Great story, quite original... *wipes the tears away* Nicely done. *claps, then runs away so she can cry alone*
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July 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awwwww! That was an amazing story. Kept me busy all night reading it! Great job, your a very good story teller. I almost died when Vegeta found out, lol!