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by Pixelgoddess

person Macha
schedule November 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Do we get to vote? I vote FOR the yuri honeymoon. *shrugs* I may be the only one though. *sighs*

I am glad that you... uh... finished the ki fetish. I liked it. And you had me going for a moment. I was thinking "Oh NO, what's happening now?" and then you explained Goku was drunk on ki. hehe

I liked the wording of the ritual, even if mostly copied, it was well worded. I like the symbolisims also. I hope Vegeta can find sayian mating rituals soon. I want those two mated as well as bonded.

I still love the banter between Piccolo and Vegeta. You write it so well, and it always makes me smile.
person jaygoose
schedule November 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*sigh* Your first flame. You should be so proud. I long for the day when someone will hate my story so badly that they will curse and say ungodly things about it. *looks off all stary eyed*

The wedding ceremony was so great. I envy your ability to write so many characters in one chapter and it seem so seamless. *pouts* Poor Geta...they have to get mated. They have to! *runs off sobbing*
person chichi's boytoy
schedule November 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
your crap! why would you make goku and vegeta gay? why make chichi a lesbo? that's just sick! whawronwrong with this fucking site! i can't say you have a very good writing style either! GET SOME TALENT YOU HOMO OBSESSED FUCKWAD!
person suisheu
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
eeeehehehehehheee! ::tries in vain to keep her eyes covered but ends up reading the whole chapter anyway (as if there really were a choice in the matter):: ^_______^ god I just love your writing! ^_~ hmmm..... a very interesting bet the Ouji had going on... heeheee...
person Violet
schedule November 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*Glomps back* Thanks for the welcome.

OMG, why was Piccolo so uncomfortable? That’s the main question on my mind right now lol! The homecoming was an excellent idea, you really made it seem as if everyone was glad to see him come home, you manage to give the characters life. Rather than just the usual ‘dead image’ that is imprinted into my mind. The backward ‘e’ idea was sweet and just helps add to the scene of being home.

Aww, the reunion between Vegeta and Trunks was well done, you did not make it to sappy but still sweet enough to feel the characters emotions. Oooh, *smirk* Bulma has blackmail material, you have to appreciate the woman’s idea of brining a camera. I like the interaction you placed between Gohan and Vegeta it kind of made it seem like the older demi was accepting him into the family.

LMAO, I hope Bulma doesn’t try to take on the Kais single handed who know what will happen to her… Although I must say I still want revenge, Kill the kais!

This bit here was soo sweet, I love the way you’re developing the characters ^-^

"Hey Dad," Trunks ran up, Goten in tow. "Can Goten train with us, too?"
Vegeta grinned at his son. "Sure. Can Goten's dad train with us, too?" he echoed.
Trunks grin matched his. "Sure."


The boys finally got to have some fun. This was a well-written and described chapter. I can’t wait for the next one. Your story is amazing.

Good luck with finding someone for Piccolo, there aren’t many singles left. The only person I can think of is Dende and I really don’t think that would happen. Well I hope everything works out, your plot is going nicely so far. *Sits at computer and waits for next chapter*

Sorry about not reviewing sooner!
person macha
schedule November 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*pant, pant* La Purr, La Meow... Whoops, wrong cartoon...... This was GOOD. I liked it very much. hehe, Ki fetish... I guess there are a lot of things that can be acomplished with ki. Why not pleasure instead of pain?

person Webtester01
schedule November 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was ... ... desciptive. You choice of words was very apt.

It is nice now for then to be able to have time together without worrying about brainwashing or possesion.
person jaygoose
schedule November 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*grins* Pure unadulterated Kank. I do believe you're trying to kill me. You know that this is the first lemon I ever read that used ki this way. That is quite an accomplishment.

Poor Piccolo, I have faith that you'll think of something or someone for him.
person maria
schedule November 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i need a shower after reading this...maria
person suisheu
schedule October 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Good? Like? Try, AMAZING!! LOVE!! YAAAAAAAAAAYS!! Good thing Yamucha didn't open up his big mouth and start something with Vegeta. Hmmmm... Piccolo? Actually, truly upset? but, why? Because there was a crowd? Because it was goku? touching? Meh. I wants to knoooooooow! food food food, I am so hungry right now. I wish I could steal some of their food. ^^ YES! Good! Excellent! they're getting revenge on the kais! MWAHAHAAA! but, couldn't they put in another mind thingy and make them forget what they did? Awww.... they are so cute together. It's shocking, vegeta allowing snuggles in public. ::gives author all her M&M's::

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