rate_review Reviews

Stop. Writing. Now.

Why would I want to read about how Goku became a fat earth woman screwed by Vegeta? And you call this yaoi??? Let's back up.

And how the heck do you even turn from Vegeta form despising GOku (canon) to loving Goku? You never explain this in ANY of your fics so far. It's just OUT OF CHARACTER. And despite what you think, people can and do write IN CHARACTER yaoi. Unless it's you, I guess. Anyway, I suppose you think you are being clever (save us from what you call clever please) with the gender bender. So what? I STILL WANTED TO READ A YAOI FIC, NOT A FATTY HET FIC. And don't give me that baloney about how it's still g/v. IF YOU COULD WRITE WELL AND WRITE IC MAYBE- MAYBE- IT WOULD WORK.

But you can't and it doesn't.

Wha.......
That's just disturbing! I hope Goku shapes up that body pretty damn soon! Maybe he'd be a bit better if he wasn't fat. Gods, I so so snobbish. Someone stab me?

i've read both chapters, there is no sex or lime
the 2 short chapters set up what could be a fun situation and then leaves.
another chapter served with lemon would be good