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August 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You know I found it kind of scary that when I opened up your fic, the ad at the top was for a book on 'How to register to vote and then vote.' I guess I figure, if you can't figure that out on your own- you probably shouldn't be voting period. o.o;;;
OK on to the fic! Like I said in your lj, it's very sweet. I like the added bit from the original lime scene regarding Ed's shaken nerves. I think it really gives more to the scene, as well as the characterization. You really got, especially Winry's speech pattern down well. I could hear her voice in my head with the lines you gave her, and that's rare. It shows that an author really knows their characters perfectly.
So yay- awesome job. Hope to see more smut attempts from you. >D
OK on to the fic! Like I said in your lj, it's very sweet. I like the added bit from the original lime scene regarding Ed's shaken nerves. I think it really gives more to the scene, as well as the characterization. You really got, especially Winry's speech pattern down well. I could hear her voice in my head with the lines you gave her, and that's rare. It shows that an author really knows their characters perfectly.
So yay- awesome job. Hope to see more smut attempts from you. >D