schedule
March 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sex scene could of been slower, and written longer for romantic perposes, but all in all I think it was a very good short story, and I liked it, hope you write more in the future.
schedule
January 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Its a good story and i like the way you put sum of the detail in your writting....... i just cant see ed do that i dont know i just cant see him do that
schedule
December 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very good, except for one thing that slightly annoyed me...the capital letters. Other than that, great. You should continue it and add more lemons. I might be able to give you some ideas if you need any help, just e-mail me.
Luv+Hugz~~Lady Kari
Who is more foolish? The fool, or the fool who follows him?
Luv+Hugz~~Lady Kari
Who is more foolish? The fool, or the fool who follows him?
schedule
December 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
not bad, but couldn;t you have been a bit more descriptive?
schedule
November 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Man too good to miss, loved it, short but sweet., not rushed at all, well mabey just a little here and there, but still a-ok in my books lol, very nicly done
schedule
November 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was... purely smut. You needed a decent plot, and grammar. Obviously, you seem to be very in-expncednced. Try again with another one that has grammar and a real plot other than a pure smut-scene.