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Hey! I resent that Calico! Hahaha, Just playing, I know.. I\'m an asshole. But hey, I know talent when I see it and I guess that\'s a rare gift around here. Awesome story babe, just dropping by to reasure you that I am reading and have yet to be un-impressed by a chapter that you write. You still create the same fascination in me that the first two chapters held and I find that as you progress, your talent at capturing mood and displaying the settings increasing. You are beautiful to me...

Love
Camaro

Fucking beautiful honestly. I can\'t even offer any constructive criticism because I feel that you really captured the essense of this character. It was almost as if the reader could sense YOU speaking because you truly made Goku your own. You obviously put YOURSELF in his mind and as a result, created an absolute masterpiece in this chapter. It isn\'t cliche, it isn\'t overdone. It\'s personable and draws you in from the very beginning, almost like he\'s holding a conversation with you. And the emotion is amazing, I really wanted to point that out. You were so subtle about it rather than advertising in neon lights what he was feeling. You didn\'t have to because you really have a gift at writing powerfully. Your words flow and your vocabulary is even more extensive than I saw in this chapter... I know that because I really get the sense that you\'re a great author. All of the clues are there because again, I see that you put yourself into this and that includes your spirit and even some of your personality.

Thats fucking beautiful just like I said. I\'ll continue reading this because I VERY VERY seldom find a story that captures me like this one did. And I even more rarely ever leave entirely nice reviews! haha so there\'s your proof. You\'re fucking amazing!

Love
Camaro

Very simple and pleasant to start out. Building up to something dark? Mabey. Or our two beautiful sexy Saiyans expressing emotions like no other could before. I can't wait to read more.

Please, continue writing. :)