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January 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
"Decent" is an adjective I would use to talk about your grammar; actually, no, your grammar writing is more than decent (considering the fics there are).
But your closure... "don't think, Trunks. Feel." was PERFECT
good job
But your closure... "don't think, Trunks. Feel." was PERFECT
good job
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February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
“You’ve been bothering me ever since you came to this time. You want my approval that badly, boy?” Vegeta smirked haughtily. “Then bow to your Prince.”
(swoon & drool) I love it when vegeta get\'s all demanding! (stil drooling all offer the keyboard) thehe...so naughty I love it! :p this is a very good fic, a very high two tumbs up for you, good job! :p
(swoon & drool) I love it when vegeta get\'s all demanding! (stil drooling all offer the keyboard) thehe...so naughty I love it! :p this is a very good fic, a very high two tumbs up for you, good job! :p
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January 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*crys* I love this.... it\'s so beautiful yet.... the sex... at the same time!! *hugs* if I could get pregnant from just reading something.... I would so be having like..... a litter of brats right now!!!
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November 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I liked it. You could make it even longer if you wanted to. Allow Trunks to some how go back to his father and try and be with him. Or some shit like that. Inscet isn\'t really my thing and I prefer GxV but you write well!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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November 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awww That was so cute, I normally don\'t read Vegeta/Trunks fics unless they\'re writen well, and this one was. Great fic! ^_^
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November 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Sweet. As strangely as it is to call such a relationship sweet, it is. Vegeta saying, \"Don\'t think, Trunks. Feel.\" seems to make everything alright. (I loved that line!) The last bit about love made me smile! It was more than decent and I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Good stuff!
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November 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Again, another great fic, Rayne! ^_^
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November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*drool* that was hot and stemy i always wondered how did trunks earn vegeta approval beside turning into a super sajyin
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November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my lord. That was so wonderful. It did have a moral to it afterall. Damn that Vegeta...he\'s so good in every lemon he\'s in. I love this btw. *grins*
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November 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
For a PWP this was good. There was enough there for a story though it could have been fleshed out more. It held my interest and the emotion it contained made it satisfying to read. I\'m glad you decided to share it, and I look forward to seeing your future work and how your style matures.