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for Innocent Dance

by Might

person Emily
schedule January 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AH!! Poor Rei. He has to deal with mean old Kai picking on him. I would just back hand the little brat! O well, there will be a day when Rei gets revenge. This is a very entertaining story however. I enjoy it a lot! I really hope you will update soon!
person Death Girl Miya
schedule January 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WAII!! YOU MUST MUST MUST UPDATE SOON!!

Hahaha I laughed at the part where Rei was all like surprised that the hero was Kai. It cracked me up!! I fell over my chair and my mom came in and shutted down the computer. Aghh she caught me on the computer...when I was supposed to be grounded...oh well -_-;;

I love the play part!! I loved it so much!! So when you said Julia, do you mean the Julia from F Sangre(or in english its F Dinesty...or however you spell it)?? Cuz if it is, then Julia and Kai would\'ve danced together!! Haha thats kind of hard to imagine!! But I loved it anyways!!

KAI IS WRONG!! REI IS A REALLY GOOD PERFORMER!! THE BEST, IN FACT. In a lot of fics they make Rei seem so feminine. Thats why I love those kind of fics. They make Rei a girl LOL. And that chapter was so not lame! It was the best chapter you wrote!!

Just gotta say this is my favorite fic. Keep up the good work!! Update soon!!
person Death Girl Miya
schedule January 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey I really liked this story!! Please update! Oh and his English name\'s Miguel. He\'s a real hottie ;D Kekekeke..

I love your stories! This one\'s my favorite so far! Haha Max working at a Donut Shop...I can imagine that =D Well take care! I really liked it!
person Raenef
schedule December 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Just like you i like Sora and Ken but i really like Deal and i think Yuri is a bastard if i havent said so already.
person Rhonnie
schedule December 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far. =)!

Just to let you know Mihaeru is Miguel of the Barthez Battaleon. Quite a cutie, isn\'t he?
person Bluumberry
schedule December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You have a great idea going here but you\'re missing out some important things. The tenses are a bit weird as their in preesens but that isn\'t the bad thing, that\'s the fact that you mix up with is/am/are the likes. Then you haven\'t really described the places they are in, how they feel(you have the best position for this as Rei should be feeling VERY miserable) and so on. The fact that you torture Rei so really pissed me off, I mean dancing is his dream and you snatched it away from him. Well that can happen in the real world as well, but snatching it away like this isn\'t a very good idea. I mean he came to the whole college to dance and as that was taken away I can understand that he would stay and help around the performance area, but to succumb to just watch as Kai makes his life miserable-that\'s not Rei. And then the tripping part, he\'s a dancer-and he has grace- so I can\'t possibly believe that he would fall flat on his face every time he was tripped. He can jump over the leg and if he is tripped stay on his feet(it is possible, I should know).

Like I said, you have a good plot and I like some parts of your writing style, but you need to improve it a little and go more in-depth to the characters and then you\'ll make a masterpiece ^_^
person Raenef
schedule December 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey its Raeny again and i just wanna say this story is progressing very well and i sorry if im annoyiing but i wanna know what kinda dancing are they doing because i had weird thought of Kai and Rei doing hip-hop dancing? Also i wanted to know who\'s your favorite character in Kaledo Star and if its Yuri just have to say i hate him ALOT!
person Raenef
schedule December 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ok i really like your story but i was wondering if you got this idea from kaledo Star if you ever seen this anime?
person maria
schedule December 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey awesome story. its getting very interesting. update next chapter soon.
person Sai
schedule December 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hmmmm its interesting so far. I thought Kai was going to be Rei\'s roomie but he is not :(. Ohh well looking forward to see where this story is going!

P.S If I review more of your stories watch out for my terrible spelling.

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