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spectaculer awsome cant think of ant more big words

Wow, this is one horrible story. Goten raped multiple times by totally human men and women, Trunks being a totally insensitive ass...the evilness of this story goes on and on.

I really love your story!!! I think you should write a part 4! *bites tongue and giggles* XD

Your story is awesome you should continue to write some maybe after a few years in the story and have goten and trunks having problems?

Uhh.. well. It\'s really unrealistic and when it comes to the \"leading up to\" sex parts, the characters dialogue blows. In fact, the one sentence I really hated was when Trunks says something to kate about \"get off the love of my life!\" Now, when you write, you also have to be thinking, would I or anyone else on the face of this planet say something like that?

But for what its worth, it\'s entertaining. You do a fucking fantastic job at sex scenes, though I felt they were a bit rushed in parts. It\'s humorous that Goten got his wang sprang or whatever! hahaha.. I have heard of that as well.. happened to a guy who had a hard one walking to his bed and tripping. It was original in that part and that\'s GREAT! I also think you have a nice flow and a fairly wide vocab. Awesome job.

Goten is pretty weak though so maybe in further chapters you won\'t make him everyone\'s sniveling man-bitch but hey, it\'s your story and it\'s not half bad!

Camaro

Oh, PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE continue this story... this was an awesome Tr/Gt story!

.hehe.Goten/Trunks fic. No offense but Kate\'s a bitch.keep it up.^_^