schedule
January 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey it is coming along great... Oh how old are Trunksie and Goten-chan supposed to be?
schedule
January 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This just keep getting better and better.
Goten and Trunks may have to share a room if the ship is small, but I will have to see, since I don\'t know the size of the ship.
Furthermore, tensions will rise between the group, predict.
I look forward to more.
Goten and Trunks may have to share a room if the ship is small, but I will have to see, since I don\'t know the size of the ship.
Furthermore, tensions will rise between the group, predict.
I look forward to more.
schedule
January 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, your fic is VERY interesting! I LOVE it!
However, there are a bunch of spelling and
grammar mistakes. I\'m one of those annoying
\"Police\" type reviewers lol. I\'m just suggesting
that you use a spellchecker or have someone
re-read and edit it before you post it =D and
then all will be well! ^_^ If you need someone
to edit it I can do it! You have to give me a
specific time you need the fic BACK and edited
by though so I don\'t slack off haha! Just email
me with a yes or no for my offer! My email should
be in my review! Ja ne!
However, there are a bunch of spelling and
grammar mistakes. I\'m one of those annoying
\"Police\" type reviewers lol. I\'m just suggesting
that you use a spellchecker or have someone
re-read and edit it before you post it =D and
then all will be well! ^_^ If you need someone
to edit it I can do it! You have to give me a
specific time you need the fic BACK and edited
by though so I don\'t slack off haha! Just email
me with a yes or no for my offer! My email should
be in my review! Ja ne!
schedule
January 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh! A twist!
More!
More!
schedule
January 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good start. Definetly set the seen up for a lot of angst.
You should, however, find someone to beta for you, but not me. I am terrible at spelling and grammar. There are a couple of mistakes that stood out, but I can only remeber one at the momment. You used Clock when I think you meant to use Cloak. *shrugs*
I\'ll be interested to see the second chapter.
You should, however, find someone to beta for you, but not me. I am terrible at spelling and grammar. There are a couple of mistakes that stood out, but I can only remeber one at the momment. You used Clock when I think you meant to use Cloak. *shrugs*
I\'ll be interested to see the second chapter.