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March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank you, thank you, thank you!!!! I love this story so much! I can\'t wait for part two!!! Thanks!
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another cliffhanger!! I still love this story! Update soon! Don\'t leave me in suspense!
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another F/V would be nice for the next chapter. Good story.
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February 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is a great story!!! I really like it alot. who beta\'s for you though? I thought it was camaro, did you cut off half her name in your summary? awesome story!!
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February 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!!! I love this story! One of my favorite on the net!!! And BONUS! You don\'t take six months to update either! I\'m on the edge of my seat here with suspense! Cliffhanger! Please continue with this story! Can\'t wait to see what happens to Vegeta! Update soon! I will be reading! Never stop writing!
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February 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome awesome awesome.
::still laughing at pitiable fools who must wait for chapters::
Excellent writing, awesome storyline: creativity, originality. All my favorite attributes. Excellente!
Camaro
::still laughing at pitiable fools who must wait for chapters::
Excellent writing, awesome storyline: creativity, originality. All my favorite attributes. Excellente!
Camaro
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February 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You have to get some new chapters up cause i want to know what happens next. Good job by the way.
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February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooohhhh Lovely lovely! Great chapter as always!
::points and laughs at all the desperate fools who have to wait for the next chapter when I get to see it first::
Muahahhahah!
Camaro
::points and laughs at all the desperate fools who have to wait for the next chapter when I get to see it first::
Muahahhahah!
Camaro
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January 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, not bad at all. I\'m really glad I read through all five chapters and I\'m looking forward to more. But, you sincerely need a beta reader.. .I mean BAD
You wrote \"genitally\" instead of \"gentle\" Hahahahaha!
I\'d be happy to if you were so inclined though I warn you, I don\'t go easy on things and if something sucks, I will be telling you about it. Other then that, it was really good. I genuinely like the characters though you\'ve made Vegeta fall in love much too quick and much too easily. It\'s only been one day and already the cold hearted Prince is letting down his walls? That\'s dumb.
But on the other hand, I have to commend you for taking your time on this. Most stories around here begin with sex in the very first chapter, but you\'ve kept us waiting and wanting it even more. That\'s such a brilliant idea! I mean, seriously... that\'s awesome because it really establishes personalities and characteristics before rushing into sex. That way, it seems more based on actual feelings then on just raunchy fuck fests.... (not that I\'m much of a good example in this regard but we won\'t go there. haha)
So definetly, let me know if you\'d like me to beta and so far, so good.
Camaro
You wrote \"genitally\" instead of \"gentle\" Hahahahaha!
I\'d be happy to if you were so inclined though I warn you, I don\'t go easy on things and if something sucks, I will be telling you about it. Other then that, it was really good. I genuinely like the characters though you\'ve made Vegeta fall in love much too quick and much too easily. It\'s only been one day and already the cold hearted Prince is letting down his walls? That\'s dumb.
But on the other hand, I have to commend you for taking your time on this. Most stories around here begin with sex in the very first chapter, but you\'ve kept us waiting and wanting it even more. That\'s such a brilliant idea! I mean, seriously... that\'s awesome because it really establishes personalities and characteristics before rushing into sex. That way, it seems more based on actual feelings then on just raunchy fuck fests.... (not that I\'m much of a good example in this regard but we won\'t go there. haha)
So definetly, let me know if you\'d like me to beta and so far, so good.
Camaro
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January 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story so far. Different and very unique which are two qualities that I appreciate more then I think anything. Grammar and punctuation were just fine, a few mild mess ups here and there, nothing worth bringing up though.
I like the content and even though Goku is dumb (and yes, he\'s really stupid so far) I still feel as though you made the characters likable. At this point in a story, 9 times out of 10 I stop reading and don\'t even bother to review... but I figure, this really seems worth going through another chapter and I look forward to your portrayal of Vegeta and Goku.
Very very good so far.
Camaro
I like the content and even though Goku is dumb (and yes, he\'s really stupid so far) I still feel as though you made the characters likable. At this point in a story, 9 times out of 10 I stop reading and don\'t even bother to review... but I figure, this really seems worth going through another chapter and I look forward to your portrayal of Vegeta and Goku.
Very very good so far.
Camaro