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Barely ever do I review stories here, I usually save them for ff.net for some damned reason. But I had to review this one because, and there just isn\'t any other way I can think to put it, this was just beautiful. You wrote this so well that I thought I was watching an episode. I had tears in my eyes at the sweetest moments, and tried to keep from snorting loud enough to wake the neighbors at the humor in it. I absolutetly loved this and I can\'t wait for your legal one, yip! ^^ And you\'re right, I would have thought ther would have been more roy/ed fics out there, I mean, why not? Hope to see more from you.
Truth^~

Bah, go for the jailbait, man! He can take it, he\'s the Full Metal Alchemist! ....besides, afterwards he\'ll need comfort, aww..

OMG beatifully done. I never reviewed a fic Adultfan before but how could i not after reading this. I love how indept it was and in my opion What more can I say it was just plain beautiful written. I cant understand why there aren\'t many review tho People are just lazy I guess(heck i know i am :P) You must continue this it just too good not too.

An interesting story, though it was a little wordy. I have to say, I\'m a little dissapointed with how *innocent* things turned out, but I\'m no pedophile. Edward was just too young in this story for anything of *that* nature. One other comment that I have is that you wrote all of the characters so darkly. It was an interesting perspective, but not one I\'m sure that I really liked. It would, however, make for a *very* intriguing sequel.

You\'re gonna continue this, right? Right? *gives big puppy eyes* RIGHT?

I have to say that was a truly amazing story. I just loved it. You have an amazing talent for writing. I am so blown away at how good this was that I\'m speechless. I do hope that you continue this because this story could defenitly go a long way.

As I type this there are only 24 stories on Adultfanfiction.net in the Fullmetal Alchemist section and yours is the best. I know that since there are so few that compliment may not mean much, but I think that even as more start to come in yours will continue to rise above the rest. Don\'t let this story die, there\'s nothing I hate more than authors that start good stories and don\'t finish them. The long chapters are absolute eye candy and I hope you continue to make them that way. I think that you portrayed Roy very well but based on what I\'ve seen of Edward I think that he would be more of a fighter. They tend to make him out to be a pansy in the anime, but in the manga there\'s nothing he can\'t handle. I wish I could see just a little more dialoge in your story it makes it seem like things aren\'t going so slow. You have true tallent as an author and outstanding grammar. Don\'t ever let anyone tell you otherwise.

Keep up the good work,
Pickles

Wow, this piece was really well written, I\'v gotta say!
You wrote it very realistic and it makes one belive it, really... and I guess you got the reaction you were looking for, cuz I was REALLY pissed when I read this è_é I really made me angry...
anyway, is there gonna be more, or is it over after this? *want more* ^_^
it\'s just really good, very well written! keep up!! XD

forget about wrong and wright just dont stop writing this story!!its really awesome, cool, fascinating!!! I love the way you upt how roy is attracted to ed!! I love the way have you put eds personality and emotions HELL I LOVE YOUR STORY!!Id be shame not to continue so please update!!

^^ I have to admit - this is by far the most descriptive and appealing story I\'ve really ever read. I\'ve never left a review for any story on AFF before, but I feel this one deserved it more than any other. o.o I have /never/ watched FMA before - only heard about it. All I knew was Ed hated being called short, was in the military - knew the Alchemy part, and about Roy - but that was it. Now I feel as if I know the full anime. :3 If only there was a way to genuinely applaude someone for a job more than well done online - *Claps* ^_^ Wonderful work, and I really really hope you plan on continuing! This story definetily deserves many more reviews than it\'s gotten!
And silly - don\'t worry about the age - if worse comes to worse, there could always be a time skip of sorts to aid the legal age. With the way you write - I\'m sure you could pull off anything! Please do continue! <3

~Jewell