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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, that was fun. :) I can easily see Vegeta standing there with crossed arms as the whole thing began. I found the idea of Goku showing a different side to his normal perplexed self in such a situation, showing Vegeta something that was always there, they just needed the right setting for it to show. I found the last couple of paragraphs a little confusing. I wasn\'t sure where Chichi was on the bed in position with Goku or where Vegeta was after that. Was it Vegeta that finished inside her? It didn\'t seem that clear to me. Oh, I like how Vegeta noticed how tan Goku was too. (I will leave the same review on SaiyanSlash. :))
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AAAAHHHH!!!!!! Wow the harpy got some!! *claps* Another wonderful lemon as always, Card!!! ^__^
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh Gods! Hot hot hot, checks clock, yes 12.34 am. Must be me! Usually I can\'t stand CC,but Gods that was well worth it. Where\'s my fan? Thank you thank you thank you!
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
...shrugging his shoulders, letting the awful orange gi slip down, pulling off the blue undershirt. Hair touseled, lazy expression of dominance and superiority on his normally jovial face...
That was one of the sexiest mental images I\'ve had of Goku in a loooong while. I loved the way you wrote him, and I even liked ChiChi in this. Vegeta was hot as usual, the arm crossing was cute (it was him) and worked really well. Yet another great fic, Card!
That was one of the sexiest mental images I\'ve had of Goku in a loooong while. I loved the way you wrote him, and I even liked ChiChi in this. Vegeta was hot as usual, the arm crossing was cute (it was him) and worked really well. Yet another great fic, Card!
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Mhm, now THAT was interesting...
I agree with Webtester... now you HAVE to write a Goku/Vegeta/Bulma! First with an uke Vegeta doing Bulma (I LOVE UKE VEGETA!) and then with Vegeta doing Goku and Goku doing Bulma (Goku/Bulma is one of my favourite het couples).
*Hey, if Chichi lets Vegeta do her husband, then Vegeta should let Goku do his wife! It\'s only fair... ^_^ *
I agree with Webtester... now you HAVE to write a Goku/Vegeta/Bulma! First with an uke Vegeta doing Bulma (I LOVE UKE VEGETA!) and then with Vegeta doing Goku and Goku doing Bulma (Goku/Bulma is one of my favourite het couples).
*Hey, if Chichi lets Vegeta do her husband, then Vegeta should let Goku do his wife! It\'s only fair... ^_^ *
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh, that was GOOD. Though I got kinda lost when they came, like you didn\'t really say that they did and so I only knew when Kark...forgot how to spell his name *blush*
came the last time.
came the last time.
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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ROFL.
That was unexpected, but interesting. The next thing I know you\'ll be writing a Bulma/Goku/Vegeta Chichi fic. LOL (Hmm quite a party.)
Anyway, I liked it.
Look forward to another chapter of White dragons.
That was unexpected, but interesting. The next thing I know you\'ll be writing a Bulma/Goku/Vegeta Chichi fic. LOL (Hmm quite a party.)
Anyway, I liked it.
Look forward to another chapter of White dragons.