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Wow, it really has been a long time.

I liked the character developement in this chapter. Videl being futlie and admitting to it. Goky feeling the same, but not wanting to admit to it. Trunks feeling resigned to the whole situation. Vegeta seems uncaring, but I think he\'s rather entertained by the whole situation, and wondering if Goku (or someone) is going to manage to pull a trick out of thin air and save Earth once again.


Update soon please.

Progressing nicely I see, wonder if it is the revelation or just a very good ploy by some oddball alien to make them think that there is nothing they can do? Nah, probably the revelation.....right? lol Great chapter! UPDATE SOON!

Wow! That is really all I can say. Just wow! I wonder if the Revelation is really upon them? Before I reached the age of reason(lol) I used to love the book of Revelations, it was a wonderful story told in convoluted detail that made my inquisitive mind wonder about the end of days, of course being as I was 8 years old at the time I ended up with some hellish nightmares; some plague me even today at the grand old age of 25! Anyway, great chapter and I can\'t wait for the next one to be posted.


UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!


Love ya babe!

Vegeta\'s Mate

I really do like this chapter. Seems as though the serious shit has already hit the fan. I know it\'s barely registered in Trunks\'s subcouncious, and I wonder how he well react once he has woken up from blacking out and doesn\'t have that easy \'ostridge\'s head in the sand\' way out.

I know when I first read this I thought, \"The paganism at the beginning of the chapter is a nice touch, but I am not certain what it has to do with this chapter.\" Well, after reading it again, I had a different thought. No, it may not have anything to do with this chapter, but everything to do with this story. After all, you are writing a fan fiction based on sayians, and what more appropriate thing to write about than a exsurp (I am not certain that is even the correct word, certainly not spelled correctly) about drawing down the power of the moon.

Looks as though the final days may just be at hand, and I really can\'t wait for the next update to see how chaotic everything becomes. MWuahahahahahhaha

Love the chapter.

Hey, great job, but I\'ll need to email you later.

Camaro

To Lilith,

Yes, I have read Salvation(good story) by Makota. But I am in no way trying to mock her. It\'s just a fic about religion and since they are both about religion expect some similarites. I actually posted part 1 and 2 of this story before I even heard of Salvation so it is pure coincidence. Besides if you read my reviews Makota reviewed this story.

This is written very well. However it sounds a lot like another fic I\'ve read called Salvation by the author Makota. I\'m not accusing you of stealing, or anything like that, but it just sounds the same. A paper that has to be written, the temple of set (Though I wish Makota would finish it! She (he?) left if hanging), just sounds similar.

And why is Chichi\'s family talking like rednecks?


Don\'t take this as a flame, because it\'s not. I just wondered if you\'ve read Makota\'s fic before and if it had any sway in your writings, otherwise it\'s just a creepy conicidence. Though, with Salvation it wasn\'t really at all devotional and it only had one chapter of Christianity, which wasn\'t very nice to the Catholic Church. Sorry I\'m rambling. Never mind. I do like how you write and how Trunks mind works and I will continue to read this. Good luck with the rest of this fic.

cheers,
Lilith

I\'m impressed. Congrats on tackling the taboo subject of religion, it does take a certain amount of guts to do so and it looks as if you\'ve done your research well. Or perhaps it\'s personal experience...doesn\'t matter. I can tell you know what you\'re talking about, and that\'s very important.

But religion aside. I think the thing I like most about this story is the writing style. You write beautifully and the characters are believable. I especially like your attention to detail. I encourage you to keep writing and I certainly will keep reading.

Very nice job.

This chapter had a lot of good info in it. I am surprised Trunks is taking this route with his paper, but then, I really had no idea what kind of paper he wanted to write about religion... I am glad it became religons.

So, we know he is writing a paper. We know he\'s been to parties, and it seems like this isn\'t the first or last. We know Bra annoys Trunks and that Bulma has become a convert thanks in part to Chichi. Niether Goku or Vegeta seem to be buying into (which is a surprise for Goku, most people write him as cowtoeing(sp?) to Chichi on everything, except for training time.)

I guess I am still wondering where all of this is going to take Trunks.... And... What happened to all the people? O.o

Good job. Looking at the Bible from an outward point of view is hard for Christians to do, and if you are a christian then you did a really good job at looking at it from an objective point of view.

Whenever you get around to writing about Trunks\' trek into paganism I will gladly help out in anyway that I can. I find that I am enjoying this story more than I had imagined myself doing when I first read the first chapter. Update soon!