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seriouly, this fic...when I readed it like a half year ago, I lost many nights' dreams and I just couldn't take the story off my head o_o simply too amazing, too dramatic, too...good. I don't know what else to say ^^u

This is such an unusual story. I read it on Saiyan Hideaway and thought you weren't going to finish it, so am delighted you are still continuing it.

Love the character progression Goku went through to become Kuroichi, as well as Vegeta's journey to accept his feelings. There have been so many twists and turns in this story. Now Trunks and Goten are going through similar trials.

This is very well written and I hope you can update soon.

please update, this story is so amazing, please don't let goten die!

This is one of my most favorite DBZ stories on the net, thank you for it.

just reread the entire story. It's still one of my favourites, even if it hurts to read it sometimes. Even if sometimes the characters change around a bit too much and there's a few little plotholes. It's still a very good story. Kudos, Jewel. *bows

i just have to ask...why haven't you been updating this story??? its amazing, the best one here and i would love to read more of it!

please please please update!! *offers tribute*

see i have tribute!!

Well, I have a lot of good things to say about your story and a few light flames. First of all, it took me three days to read this (the joys of being a mother and being unable to just sit down and read something) and I want to say that your twists in the plot and your development are phenominal. However, some of the transition are a little choppy, and it leaves me looking at the page going, 'huh?' It's ok, though. I think it's just your writing style, but try to bind some of the happenings a little better. I think you're doing good so far.

I see a potential in you to write a really really dark fiction. This is kinda dark and angsty, but if you've ever read Monster by Camaro or Breath of Sorrow by me, you'll know what I'm talking about. You have the ability to write something so incredibly dark and forbidding that you could literally wow and scare a few readers. I'm enjoying the dark bits of this story immensely.

As for the characters being OOC, I'm not sure I mind it much in your story. In all darkfics, the characters have to be OOC somewhat, so I think you've done a good job. I'm enjoying the cast because you make your characters tangible and real. Too many times, I touch a fiction, and the characters are bland and cardboard cut, and it makes me really mad. Dragon Ball Z has some of the most colorful and fun characters in the entire anime world, and I'm glad you've taken that and run with it.

All in all, I'm intensely enjoying this story, and I'm hoping that you update fairly soon. Please take the time to read my darkfic (Breath of Sorrow) or Camaro's Monster. I think that maybe you would enjoy them and get some inspiration too.

Great job! Toodles!

this fic is so good! I'm so glad I found it again or it was updated or something dang...31 chapters is not enough! I'm hooked!

this story is amazing ...but...but ...it is still not clear to me why Vegeta is beating him...i am still in love with it though its a great story