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I was SOOOO excited when I saw that you had updated and of course, you never let me down. It\'s so back and forth with Gohan. There are times when I feel so much compassion for him, when I truly understand where he\'s coming from. Then at other times, it takes Trunks for me to realize that yeah, Gohan IS using revenge to get back at his father, being immature and embittered. It\'s even more wishy washy with Goku since I understand where he\'s is coming from as well. He\'s Saiyan, he needs freedom yet at the same time, why make a family, why take on that responsibility when you have every intention of leaving them?

And how unfair of him to leave that responsibility in Gohan\'s hands? But again, I do think of Chi Chi and although you make her mildly personable in this story, I can DEFINETLY sympathize with his wanting to leave.

Gohan sometimes seems so old to me, like he\'s gone through so much pain and what not. Then at other times, he\'s a teenager again, playing rude tricks on Trunks and making an asshole of himself. Very human how you make your characters.

The only thing that seems more soap opera than human is that you make the characters cry so often. You know me! haha.. I can\'t really feel sympathy for characters when they cry so often... it makes it more special and more touching when they don\'t sob like women in damn near every chapter ya know? Plus, they\'re men! They\'re Saiyans! Yet they bawl so often I find them pitiable and weak...

Other than that, amazing chapter as always.

Camaro

Wow. Ok, this is the first time I\'ve ever commented twice on someone\'s story. It\'s just THAT GOOD!

The end of chapter 13 really fucking hit me. In fact, to be perfectly honest, I cried. I loved the fight scene between them. Because even though their emotions are so totally human, you reminded us in that scene that they are also half Saiyan. With them turning SSJ, and the building about to give out.

I really liked the scene with Vegeta talking to Trunks too. I\'m a huge Vegeta fan, and you\'ve kept him so perfectly..him! I knew that the moment Vegeta mentioned entering the speical Budokai tournament that he wasn\'t joking, even though Trunks was laughing at the comment. Wonderful.

And why the end scene made me cry, was because I could so totally feel Trunks\' pain. Even the physical. I myself have gotten in a fierce fight with someone I love, and the emotional and physical pain you feel afterwards just makes you cave in completely.

You really do seem to be aware of how people think and act in any situation. That\'s what makes the story so totally real. As if you\'ve really bought the characters to life.

Again, looking forward to your updates.

Wow. Just wow. I mean, wow. This chapter was everything I needed today. I swear, I hyperventilate every time I see an update for this fic. ^_~ I wish I could comment on just everything that made this chapter one of my very favorites...but I\'m just...blown away. *grin* I really love this fic; it\'s undoubtedly one of my favorites EVER! I understand, though, that you\'ve got other fics to concentrate on. You can\'t possibly do it all at the same time and still balance real life (or at least, I know I can\'t ^^), so I\'ll be forgiving...this time...lol. Anyway, I wouldn\'t want you to compromise the quality of a chapter just to please us fans. So you keep right on doing what you do, and I\'ll most definitely be here until the end!

O.O...... O.O.... I think I need to blink sometime soon. The first two thrids of this chapter got lost in the drama of the third part. OMG.... How embarassing for Trunks in the first place, and then to have Gohan play that kind of game with him... AAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. Of course, I think Gohan knows that it wasn\'t a very nice game to play now. Sucks that hind sight is 20/20 doesn\'t it?

The confrontation by Vegeta went better than I had thought it would. Of course, I didn\'t even see the blackmail thing coming. LOL, ah, I think Vegeta was going to ask Trunks to participate in the tournement anyway, how nice to have some leverage, Hm?

Thanks for the update on why your updates are so sparatic. Just know that I am always keeping an eye out for your stories!!! :)

OMG!!! U have to update! Like NOW!!!

I\'ve been reading this fic for a while now, and am just now managing to give you a review! ^.~

I\'m truly amazed at your ability to keep the characters such as themselves, but, for Gohan\'s part, give them a whole new light. You\'ve kept me, and no doubt others also, on the edge of my chair, even in the middle of a chapter, and cliff-hangers are usually at ends of chapters! ;) Heh.

The way you\'ve built up Gohan\'s character in this story is wonderfuly.. WONDERFULY done. I love how Trunks is handling the situation though. You\'ve kept his modesty, but added some more human emotions to him, like jealously over the picture of Videl. The emotion of jealously can strike even the best of us, and you\'ve shown that. I also admire how you\'ve kept the characters such under control. Some writers make characters crack and break too easily, which in turn, ruins the the story in my opinion. And even when the characters get angry in your story, it doesn\'t make you think \'Whatever, he/she would never do that.\' Which goes back to my comment about keeping the characters as themselves. It\'s almost as if you\'ve reached inside the TV screen, taken a fair few characters from the dragon ball world, and put them into a whole new world, and they\'re just reacting to how things have gone.

Again, beautifuly writen. I sincerly wish to read more of this story, and your others, in which I\'ve just started reading.

Great work.

I\'ve really enjoyed this story so far. I have a couple of small quibbles, though. If you are going to make the saiyajins powerful enough to go super saiyajin and to ascend, you might want to reconsider whether Gohan could *ever* be injured by an ex-boyfriend, and whether STDs and such are likely to be a problem for his demi-saiyajin immune system.

Trunks seems a bit too tentative, but Gohan is dead sexy.

I hope that you get through the flashbacks soon, actually, because I\'m interested in seeing what Trunks\' reaction is to Gohan\'s story.

I love the way this is fleshing out. The pace isn\'t too fast or too slow (even though I wish you\'d UPDATE a whole lot sooner...^_~), and the portrayal of emotions is fantastic. The fact that Gohan broke down into tears when Piccolo left was a fabulous touch, showing that Gohan still cares about the people he left behind. And in this chapter you can see signs of the person he is to become...and I can\'t wait for more!!!! MUST HAVE MORE!!!!! *squeals* I absolutely ADORE this fic, and I really do check everyday to see if you\'ve updated. O_O Please update soon!

Wow. Good thing Gohan switched to wearing the mask. Unruly crowds are no good during an event.

You do a great job portraying the emtions of the characters. Keep it up.

~Webtester01~

Very powerful. I\'m close to heart-broken now...