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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I know I already reviewed this on mediaminer but I wanted to make sure you got one here as well so that everyone knows what terrific fic I find this. (Plus, we ALL know how rarely those come along) So here ya go!
Great chapter. I will have you know that when he walked in on Chi Chi looking at his pictures, I quite literally said \"Oh my GOD!\" out loud! I covered my mouth and just read on. You\'ve got this amazing shock appeal that just blows my mind Dharma. And to think, I was afraid this story would end up mushy gushy.. yet look how amazingly far you\'ve taken it.
Absolutely ASTOUNDING! I\'m still reeling from all the shocks and how incredibly you\'ve developed the storyline. Truly interesting and I found most of the details completely balanced, yet crucial to the plot where they were. Hard to describe, I know.
Videl\'s and Gohan\'s interaction was so real and human, I could almost feel the shame he must have indured yet I also completely went along with his reasonings, even using his father\'s own faults as an excuse never to make the same mistakes. I also loved that Videl didn\'t go ape shit on him and start calling him names like \"Faggot\" and \"queer\" and what not like other stories do. And that she questioned her own adequacy in bed with him. Very sad, yet she admitted to understanding, despite the very real love she must have had for him.
Truly heart wrenching and in depth. I positively LOVE this story now. You\'ve won me over. Like I\'ve said, I\'m a groupie now and I cannot wait until you update this. You do realize I\'m always checking right? Yours is the only story that can ever do that to me. And I have limited words now, so I gotta end this with AWESOME!
Also, since MediaMiner cuts off reviews, I just wanted to elaborate more thoroughly on a few points that I specifically (do you know how tired I am? It took me about 10 tries just to remember how to spell that word! haha) appreciated.
He dressed and then flew to her house, the sky still dark blue and studded with fading stars.
It\'s like you\'re setting the mood for us in this sentence, using the surroundings as metaphorical images to effect the setting and the emotion of the characters. Like... the love is still there, still holding on slightly, but inevitably, it will fade with time, erupting in a new day, a new life. Absolutely gorgeous! You see how crazy I am when I\'m tired?!
I loved how thoroughly Gohan had thought it through, admiting (probably most regretfully) that while his father may have been marrying for the WRONG reasons, he had NOBLE reasons at least. And now, in a different scenario, Gohan is using nobility to admit to himself and to the woman he loves the inevitable decline that would be their relationship together. He uses his mind to sort out his own emotions, laying to the wayside attachments and indeed, following the truth in his heart. (Do I still know what I\'m talking about? Probably not, I\'m rambling but it made sense at the time). Regardless!
I think the most unique thing about this story is the love between Gohan and Videl. THE GUY IS GAY! Yet, it doesn\'t effect the natural love between him and this woman. I find it so unique because most yaois (admittedly, including my own) have the character very quickly detach themselves emotional from their \"frigid\" wives. But you really broke the mold, letting Gohan\'s love for her remain thriving, yet still admitting that there would be a part of himself he could never truly surrender to her. Beautiful, absolutely beautiful.
And again, I\'m going with her reaction because I didn\'t have time to expound on it on mediaminer (or rather, space to elaborate). She first thinks of her own possible inadequacies in bed. What woman WOULDN\'T think that once their boyfriend told them he was gay!? It\'d be like my first reaction! \"Oh my God, he was picturing me with a penis! Good LORD!\" Or... maybe I\'d say something like \"Hey, there ain\'t nothin\' on no man that I can\'t strap on sweetie\".. or well, let\'s just chalk that one up to my being deliriously tired.
But wow, how humane of her to put aside her own pain and recognize the sheer nobleness (is that a word) in his actions. Her love for him is SO strong that even the barrier of sexual preference can\'t stand in the way of her respect and affection for him. Maybe it\'s her love that keeps her civil, her respect for his honoring her.
Amazing. I really do have so much more to say. I wanted to comment more on how uncharacteristic Chi Chi was and how cool it was that you pointed it out when you did, to let the reader know that YEAH! That IS OOC but hey, there\'s a damn good reason for it. And I wanted to point out how selfish Goku seems, yet there is always the strange underlining love and even respect that I imagine still plagues Gohan since he can understand his father\'s reasons for marrying Chi Chi, while stupid, were noble.
I also wanted to point out how phenomenal the dialogue was, not one word thrown in there without reason, every swear stinging the story with shock appeal. Every word was SO strong and meaningful, even me as a reader going \"God damn Gohan!\" And his parent\'s reaction, albeit a BIT different from what MINE would be if they found cock suckin\' pictures (can I get a \"Good Lord\" for that one?) was very appropriate and tied into the storyline well. Awesome awesome job if I haven\'t stressed it enough.
But bed calls and I think I\'ve quite thoroughly hogged your review board. Oh well, I can do that since it\'s pretty rare now days that it isn\'t a comical flame or just an all out \"This sucks and I\'m gonna tell ya why\" review. This was great and I want people to know it, especially you. I always keep an eyeout for updates I\'ll have you know (though I\'m pretty sure I just said that and am still rambling like a psycho with terrets but hey!)
mediocre job. BAH! JK.. Great job, I\'m gonna be uncreative and end this with a delightfully cliche \"plz update soon!\"
Camaro
Great chapter. I will have you know that when he walked in on Chi Chi looking at his pictures, I quite literally said \"Oh my GOD!\" out loud! I covered my mouth and just read on. You\'ve got this amazing shock appeal that just blows my mind Dharma. And to think, I was afraid this story would end up mushy gushy.. yet look how amazingly far you\'ve taken it.
Absolutely ASTOUNDING! I\'m still reeling from all the shocks and how incredibly you\'ve developed the storyline. Truly interesting and I found most of the details completely balanced, yet crucial to the plot where they were. Hard to describe, I know.
Videl\'s and Gohan\'s interaction was so real and human, I could almost feel the shame he must have indured yet I also completely went along with his reasonings, even using his father\'s own faults as an excuse never to make the same mistakes. I also loved that Videl didn\'t go ape shit on him and start calling him names like \"Faggot\" and \"queer\" and what not like other stories do. And that she questioned her own adequacy in bed with him. Very sad, yet she admitted to understanding, despite the very real love she must have had for him.
Truly heart wrenching and in depth. I positively LOVE this story now. You\'ve won me over. Like I\'ve said, I\'m a groupie now and I cannot wait until you update this. You do realize I\'m always checking right? Yours is the only story that can ever do that to me. And I have limited words now, so I gotta end this with AWESOME!
Also, since MediaMiner cuts off reviews, I just wanted to elaborate more thoroughly on a few points that I specifically (do you know how tired I am? It took me about 10 tries just to remember how to spell that word! haha) appreciated.
He dressed and then flew to her house, the sky still dark blue and studded with fading stars.
It\'s like you\'re setting the mood for us in this sentence, using the surroundings as metaphorical images to effect the setting and the emotion of the characters. Like... the love is still there, still holding on slightly, but inevitably, it will fade with time, erupting in a new day, a new life. Absolutely gorgeous! You see how crazy I am when I\'m tired?!
I loved how thoroughly Gohan had thought it through, admiting (probably most regretfully) that while his father may have been marrying for the WRONG reasons, he had NOBLE reasons at least. And now, in a different scenario, Gohan is using nobility to admit to himself and to the woman he loves the inevitable decline that would be their relationship together. He uses his mind to sort out his own emotions, laying to the wayside attachments and indeed, following the truth in his heart. (Do I still know what I\'m talking about? Probably not, I\'m rambling but it made sense at the time). Regardless!
I think the most unique thing about this story is the love between Gohan and Videl. THE GUY IS GAY! Yet, it doesn\'t effect the natural love between him and this woman. I find it so unique because most yaois (admittedly, including my own) have the character very quickly detach themselves emotional from their \"frigid\" wives. But you really broke the mold, letting Gohan\'s love for her remain thriving, yet still admitting that there would be a part of himself he could never truly surrender to her. Beautiful, absolutely beautiful.
And again, I\'m going with her reaction because I didn\'t have time to expound on it on mediaminer (or rather, space to elaborate). She first thinks of her own possible inadequacies in bed. What woman WOULDN\'T think that once their boyfriend told them he was gay!? It\'d be like my first reaction! \"Oh my God, he was picturing me with a penis! Good LORD!\" Or... maybe I\'d say something like \"Hey, there ain\'t nothin\' on no man that I can\'t strap on sweetie\".. or well, let\'s just chalk that one up to my being deliriously tired.
But wow, how humane of her to put aside her own pain and recognize the sheer nobleness (is that a word) in his actions. Her love for him is SO strong that even the barrier of sexual preference can\'t stand in the way of her respect and affection for him. Maybe it\'s her love that keeps her civil, her respect for his honoring her.
Amazing. I really do have so much more to say. I wanted to comment more on how uncharacteristic Chi Chi was and how cool it was that you pointed it out when you did, to let the reader know that YEAH! That IS OOC but hey, there\'s a damn good reason for it. And I wanted to point out how selfish Goku seems, yet there is always the strange underlining love and even respect that I imagine still plagues Gohan since he can understand his father\'s reasons for marrying Chi Chi, while stupid, were noble.
I also wanted to point out how phenomenal the dialogue was, not one word thrown in there without reason, every swear stinging the story with shock appeal. Every word was SO strong and meaningful, even me as a reader going \"God damn Gohan!\" And his parent\'s reaction, albeit a BIT different from what MINE would be if they found cock suckin\' pictures (can I get a \"Good Lord\" for that one?) was very appropriate and tied into the storyline well. Awesome awesome job if I haven\'t stressed it enough.
But bed calls and I think I\'ve quite thoroughly hogged your review board. Oh well, I can do that since it\'s pretty rare now days that it isn\'t a comical flame or just an all out \"This sucks and I\'m gonna tell ya why\" review. This was great and I want people to know it, especially you. I always keep an eyeout for updates I\'ll have you know (though I\'m pretty sure I just said that and am still rambling like a psycho with terrets but hey!)
mediocre job. BAH! JK.. Great job, I\'m gonna be uncreative and end this with a delightfully cliche \"plz update soon!\"
Camaro
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
longer!!!!!!!!!!!!! The chapters must be longer
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just about fell outta my chair when I saw this was updated! I\'ve been waiting for what seems like forever...!! Don\'t make us wait so long next time! ^_^ But yeah, this fic is amazing and I sit eagerly waiting for more of Gohan\'s story. We\'re getting to the good part. Always love a nekkie Gohan. ^_~
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AH, Beautiful... well, at least the last part was. Gohan\'s determination,
will and \'bod\' landing him a stripper job. I really did like the way the
club manager/owner(?) handled the situation. I am glad that Rick was
willing to give the new-be the chance.
Now, you may ask \'Why?\' I am happy about this. Gohan may have turned out as
a badass, and he may have ran away from home, but there are certainly much
worse things that could have happened to him (at this point in his life). I
have a feeling that those things may have happened eventually, but he was at
least a little more prepaired to handle them.
Secondly, if Gohan had been put to shame and had to go home at a time that
his pride demanded that he do something else, well, he may very well have
been a whipped puppy for the rest of his life, and I don\'t like to see most
people as whipped puppies (there are exceptions... -_-... and a recent one
at that), but Gohan isn\'t one I would like to see as a whipped puppy.
ANYWAY, I am glad you continued with Gohan\'s story, and it doesn\'t seem as
though it is going to end soon.
Is Goten a possible key to getting Gohan on track? What happenes if Goten
follows Gohan\'s example? O.O
Excellent chapter,
will and \'bod\' landing him a stripper job. I really did like the way the
club manager/owner(?) handled the situation. I am glad that Rick was
willing to give the new-be the chance.
Now, you may ask \'Why?\' I am happy about this. Gohan may have turned out as
a badass, and he may have ran away from home, but there are certainly much
worse things that could have happened to him (at this point in his life). I
have a feeling that those things may have happened eventually, but he was at
least a little more prepaired to handle them.
Secondly, if Gohan had been put to shame and had to go home at a time that
his pride demanded that he do something else, well, he may very well have
been a whipped puppy for the rest of his life, and I don\'t like to see most
people as whipped puppies (there are exceptions... -_-... and a recent one
at that), but Gohan isn\'t one I would like to see as a whipped puppy.
ANYWAY, I am glad you continued with Gohan\'s story, and it doesn\'t seem as
though it is going to end soon.
Is Goten a possible key to getting Gohan on track? What happenes if Goten
follows Gohan\'s example? O.O
Excellent chapter,
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March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I LOVED the exchange between the angry Gohan and Goku, and how Gohan is so caring when it comes to his little brother. (Goten is just too cute, I swear...^^) You MUST update this NOW or else I WILL go mad....
*grins* Hope to see more soon! ^_^
*grins* Hope to see more soon! ^_^
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
::Humps story::
Did I mention I like this?
Camaro
Did I mention I like this?
Camaro
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March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m tellin\' ya! Gohan is doing all this for a reason! He wants that perve Greg to see and give em\' money! (((could be totally insane)))
Have you updated on mm.org?
::runs to check::
Oh by the way! Good story!
Keeps me reading!
Camaro
Have you updated on mm.org?
::runs to check::
Oh by the way! Good story!
Keeps me reading!
Camaro
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March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMN, this is so good! I LOVE the way your mind works!!! ^__^ You\'re welcome for the reviews; I just thank you for writing something that I can finally get hooked on. I can\'t wait to read more (and you\'re so good at updating). I hope Trunks can eventually find it in himself to resist Gohan (even though Gohan\'s just so hot...^o^), because he is my absolute favorite character and I would hate to see him get hurt. ^^ Because no matter how much I love Gohan, I hate him for taking advantage of my schnookums...*pets Trunks\' hair* Such a cutie...^_^
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March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Permission to kiss your feet? ^o^ This one HELL of a fic, and I love you for it!!! And to Vickalinda for thinking of the plot!! *melts into a pile of goo* This is one of THE greatests fics I have read. I can\'t even find any constructive criticism. Great choice of song, you know. ^__^ I\'ll never hear this song without thinking of this fic, really. More VERY soon, please? Gotta see what Gohan and Trunks say to each other.
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March 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Do you KNOW how great this fic is?! *dying* You HAVE to update this soon, because I gotta know how things are going to turn out in this story! Words cannot describe how much I love this...*grins* More? Soon? Please?