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March 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
How exciting.
<33
I liked that a lot! I even sent it to my sister.
I laughed so hard when it said "ChiChi died of a heart attack." Oh my god, lol. I was not expecting that.
Thought their new found play-time shoulda been slightly longer, but thank you machine for making them find each other!!
Too bad he didn't keep it thought, I'm sure he could have found.... more interesting ways to use it with Goku.
;)
<33
I liked that a lot! I even sent it to my sister.
I laughed so hard when it said "ChiChi died of a heart attack." Oh my god, lol. I was not expecting that.
Thought their new found play-time shoulda been slightly longer, but thank you machine for making them find each other!!
Too bad he didn't keep it thought, I'm sure he could have found.... more interesting ways to use it with Goku.
;)
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August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I thought that was a very original idea, the work-out equipment thing, really!
Though who knows, I haven\'t read many DBZ fics.. but I may start. ( :
Adorable, the \"my boyfriend\" at the end, lol.
I always think it\'s awesome when a man takes on the challenge of writing a yaoi.. the different perspective is something a woman can never harness very well.
Keep writing and I can\'t imagine you\'ll get anything but better.
-DeeDubya a.k.a. Jaxxy.
Though who knows, I haven\'t read many DBZ fics.. but I may start. ( :
Adorable, the \"my boyfriend\" at the end, lol.
I always think it\'s awesome when a man takes on the challenge of writing a yaoi.. the different perspective is something a woman can never harness very well.
Keep writing and I can\'t imagine you\'ll get anything but better.
-DeeDubya a.k.a. Jaxxy.
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August 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lmao! this is really good for your first PWP! Made me laugh, which is a good sign! I really liked vegeta\'s abruptness - spot on!
Where did you get the idea for the equipment?! and is it actually supposed to be used for what they used it for?! *grin*
Great work!
Hellagoddess
Where did you get the idea for the equipment?! and is it actually supposed to be used for what they used it for?! *grin*
Great work!
Hellagoddess
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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
XP Gah! Cute!
A little short with lemons, but definitely a cute ending.
A little short with lemons, but definitely a cute ending.
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March 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
its ok
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March 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*grins* That was so funny. And extremely different. I like it! But it was quite an odd machine...
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March 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hehe, the machine provided Vegeta with training and fucking... then little Kaka-chan, not wanting to be anty less than this new plastic competitor, ALSO started providing even BETTER training and fucking... which resulted in \"By bye machine...\"
*Little Kaka-chan grabs useless idiotic machine and blasts it to pieces*
Little Kaka-chan: Veggie won\'t be requering your services any longer cause now \"I\" am around!!!
*Little Kaka-chan grabs useless idiotic machine and blasts it to pieces*
Little Kaka-chan: Veggie won\'t be requering your services any longer cause now \"I\" am around!!!
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ROTFLOL
Oh my goodness that was great!
Thanks for sharing
*huggles*
Oh my goodness that was great!
Thanks for sharing
*huggles*
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOL! i absolutwly loved the ending of this! =D its awesome. keep it up!
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March 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved the end punchline for this! Hahaha, thats even better than my treatment of telemarketers.
Nice PWP too, original. (I haven\'t seen many machine ones, much less G/V ones)
Nice PWP too, original. (I haven\'t seen many machine ones, much less G/V ones)