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for Strong Heart

by Camaro

person PrincessGuru
schedule November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I for one really liked it and felt it fit well in the plot. Of course I know the plot so thats probably what makes me different from your other reviewrs but I thought it was awesome. Update quicker this time!!!!!!!
person Jay FicLover
schedule November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If that's love, it's one of the most degrading, psychotic, twisted and disgusting forms of it I've ever heard in my life... Yet I guess I should thank God that I, unlike David, was raised in a way that enables me to know and understand the difference.

I suppose Mirai is trying to show Trunks that no form of life, even the most tragic and misserable one, is completely devoid of feeling, and his is no different either, so he can't run or hide from emotions forever... On the other hand, perhaps it was a special way to show him that 'what goes around comes around'.

Even when I admit I uttery and, should I say logically (?) disliked the events happening in this chapter, I understood the topic. However, would you be offended if I humbly asked you to make a small pause from all the gore and sadistic? At least just for the next couple of chapters... I like this story, but my stomach's tolerance has a limit, and if you don't restrain the gory parts a bit I will probably just skip them over... You've given me material for al my future nauseas in the next couple of years. -_-

Besides, dealing with so many strong subjects like rape, sadist-masoquism, torture and such deep and unhealthy levels of mental insanity, obsession, self mutilation and pedophilia suffered by other characters is making Trunks look like a spoiled brat looking for the fun of flirting with danger, when in fact he knows mothing about life... I resist to believe it, that's the reason I try so much to figure out what could have happened to him. He kinda reminds me of the killer girl in the movie American Psycho 2, if you know what I mean: someone who was relatively normal until crossing paths with a psycho and almost becoming his victim, surviving only to become like their almost-killer...


schedule November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This reveiw really should take more time than I have available to me, but I want to say this:

You and I talked about the meaning of love. I described it to you the only way that I knew how, and now, as I read this chapter, you've described it to me as you see it. The greatest enigma of human kind is that we love our misery. Not so much the object of it as the simple comfort of being stuck in the same pain day after day in a monotonous repetition of savagery. Is that love?

My answer is yes. Love of the misery allows for one to be able to dismiss the idea of happiness easily, and therefore, the misery becomes all we ever knew. Trunks will learn when he looks at his life that the monster inside of him is nothing more than a cheap imitation of the happiness he truly seeks.

Great chapter, sweetheart. Remember to take that first sweet breath when you come up out of the water.
person Macha
schedule November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes, Miria is certainly going for shock effect with this display of 'love'. I am actually surprised that Trunks is taking it so badly. I thought he was over shock. *shrugs*

I'd make this reveiw longer, but, although it was an excellent chapter, I think there are things I wish to forget.
person Webtester01
schedule November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter.

I think Tunks is on his way to recovery.
schedule November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Finally!!! An update! Bravissima! I think Trunks is so convinced that he shouldn't give a shit that when he does, he's confused and doesn't understand it. He sees compassion as weakness, and even though he's attracted to it, he hates it because it provides a facet to his personality that he's unwilling to accept. Great chapter, honey!
person bulma90_13
schedule November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A MAZ ING !!!!!
this is quite possibly the most sick thing i've ever read. quite possibly the most addicting. where the hell did you get an idea like this?? crazy. i don't think you need the encouragement, but...continue.
in the begining, we see trunks as an ass(putting it lightly) but then the little hint of how he did feel at one point and then we learn about goten and OH!!!! this is just terrific.
person Jay FicLover
schedule November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have another theory: May be Trunks reacted so badly because he was once raped himself?

I remember in the Red Dragon movie, with Anthony Hopkins, Edward Norton and I think Ralph Fiennes, to save his son the detective (the character of Edward Norton) pretended to treat his son the way he knew Ralph Fiennes\' psychotic grandmother had treated the killer when he was still a child, so that the killer (Ralph Fiennes) would see himself in the detective\'s son and thus be unable to kill him.

In other words, it is said sometimes psychos identify themselves with some people they see getting the same kind of treatment they themselves had suffered in the past, and that makes them unable to see these people as mere objects or \'things\', it makes them unable to dissociate from their pain, and thus they are no longer able to hurt them.

That\'s why I think it might be the case that Trunks was raped, probably when he was a small child, and he was perhaps even left to die afterwards... but somehow survived. The question, then, would be by who. It is obvious Trunks never got the chance to get his own revenge.

Uh oh, don\'t tell me it was Vegeta when Babidi or Bebi brainwashed him... and that Vegeta doesn\'t even remember. Though it would somehow explain Trunks\' twisted fascination with his father.

A second candidate could be... urg, Yamcha, and definitely when Trunks was still a child, wanting to get revenge on the Saiyan Prince and the woman who \"betrayed\" him... That would explain why Trunks is so adamant about saiyajins not following the human ways.
person Elizabeth
schedule November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just read your story and I must say that I\'m impressed with how deeply you delve into the the internal states of your characters. It\'s excelently wrtten and i can\'t wait to see where it goes. I wish you the best of luck and eagerly await your next update.
person chayron
schedule November 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Gods, that was a good lesson. One moment emotionless, and another moment too emotional. Yep, and with the power comes the feeling of being a God, an avenger. Though…actually…I think that there was a possibility that Trunks just used that as an excuse to get his hands “dirty”.

A line between revenge and justice can become so tiny sometimes… And those Vegeta’s words about his indulgence in revenge: “Or better yet, it was a reason or excuse for me to make people look as ugly on the outside as I felt on the inside.” This is so right. So damn right!

I think that from all the chapters I read this is my favorite [(well, not because of all that gore and such – even though it was damn good written (the eyes and brains under Trunks fingernails…Gods, I could feel the slime under my own fingernails… Yuck! But damn good!)]. It’s just…I read and wonder and admire. I think what’s the point knowing and digging so deep inside us; the ignorance is so convenient… Each chapter is like a slap to my face. And each time I can’t wait to get another one.

LOVE THIS STORY!

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