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By the way, forgot to mention that Trunks sounds like the Devil, mixing lies with the truth, to sound more convincing. certain people have a knack for knowing other people's weaknesses and memories that provide them with a source of guilt and shame to weaken them. This is a very dangerous verbal attack which most people easely fall prey to, if they don't prepare for it in advance.

Like Father Merrick said to Father Karras when they were performing the exorcism on the possessed Regan (in the movie "The Exorcist"): "It is not wise to make conversations with the Devil, for he's a deceiver, and mixes lies with the truth."

Oh My God...Trunks is one suck fuck, but and honest one. Go to respect that. Girlfriend, this is showing me Gohan in a new light, so far removed from the innocent, gental boy that I have pictured in my mind. While it's a shock, I "can' see it. For someone who's personality was so light, there was really only one way he could break, and thats pretty much how it went. I was so glued to this chapter. I really can't wait till you update. Make it soon, m'kay?

~Kenya

wow....this is great! This is like a whole new level of literary work I have ever read!! PLZ continue as soon as possible, and even if u hit writer's block, I don't care. 'Cuz the wait is totally worth it, can't wait for an update. But I do pose one question. Is Goten's part in this story over? Or does he come back and face Trunks and/or his brother? Because I would completely flip if that happens, ooh, can't u just feel the angst? OK, until next time! ::Gives Son Grin::
-BlackTigerG2

I don't think I've reviewed yet. But I've been reading this story, and I totally love it!! This was an awesome chapter--extremely intense, angry, and erotic. It made my blood boil. ^^ You're a phenomenal writer! Keep up the good work!!!

Undoubtedly the best story i have read on this site
to-date. This chapter gave me goose bumps on
my arms. Plz PLZ update as soon as you can. I'll
be watching the comp til you do!!!!!

(Is speechless)

Poor Gohan... or should I say, poor Trunks?

How is Trunks ever gonna get the blurriest ressemblance of a life, now?

Hello Todesengle,

Other than the name being a mouthful...I loved this chapter. I have to say, the blood was a good touch. I do hope Mirai knocks some sense into Trunks though. I almost threw my laptop in a hissy fit with some of the comments Trunks made. Oh well, I have to wait I suppose. Poo.

_Jenn

Jesus Christ!!

So you know? I don't read DBZ fics. I tried once, but I couldn't find any that were good. Periodically I'd search again, hoping that I'd find something. I found your fic some time ago (I think after you posted chapter 9), and it is the only DBZ I read. Ever. You are the sole exception. The bright light in this fandom. This is fucking amazing. The depth, angst, and brutal truth you mix into this leaves me breathless. Probably the darkest, best written fic I have read in a long time. The brutality is gorgeous. It is sick and oh so wrong, but you don't use it without purpose, which makes it beautiful to behold. The cynical view is masterly. The way you pull this off... is genius.

You may not be finished, but thank you for writing this.

Images and Reflections... Which is the Final Reflection?

Or should I say: LIKE FATHER...LIKE SON!

This is so laced with irony! Trunks yet again has reenacted an event done by his father. Has he been secretly reading his daddy's diary? Or is he just psychic?

*Who could ever forget that erotic sight when Vegeta ki bound Goku to the side of that mountain?*

Where do I begin... with the sheer eroticism of G ki bound to that mountain? Or the violence of their passion...which is not for one another... or with the extreme violence of Trunks words as he cruelly and maliciously ripped Gohan's world apart as he oh so generously pointed out his true nature by ripping him down one side and up another?

What cruelty! What violence! What passion! What irony!

The perverseness of this delimma is the cruel hoax they play on each other.... each wanting someone else... yet taking their frustration out on each other... they in essence used each other... creully. Trunks feels ... it's just buried deep inside... Gohan aches... desperately and passionately for a memory... for someone who he thinks is lost to him... he... is... they are...like the pristine landscape... broken and damaged..a travesty of its former self...

Young Mr Purple Hair... is well... seeking revenge after a fashion... how dare he not be allowed to be himself... in a way he was forced into an image also... no wonder he wanted to strip Gohan of that...fake facade! He also had been forced to wear one... that's why he could recognize another's self induced prison! He was right about one thing... Gohan was so confused he had himself believing that he needed glasses! There's nothing wrong with his eyesight... it's perfect! That's one mirror that needed to be cracked... one illusion that needed to be shattered... Both destroyed by their mothers.

Makes one wonder as to the real reason Trunks seduced Goku... was it to get back at his father? or was it more basic... the image of his beloved Goten... Gohan was for revenge... and a poor substitute for Goten as well...

Ironic... that. Not only did he use Gohan as a substitute, but he also got revenge on Mirai. He took years of frustration of being compared to his doppleganger out on the one thing [person] that truly loved Mirai... he took revenge,took his virginityand stole his innocence. I would say that was a good days work...

Gohan on the other hand once he realized what he'd done... had no pieces... nothing to grab onto... all his illusions had been torn to pieces... ripped to shreds... but what had he mourned? the loss of his virginity? the loss of his carefully maintained facade? or the fact that the Trunks he was with wasn't the Trunks he wanted? That he wasted himself on a spoiled selfish brat who was more interested in revenge than in him... that he was just a means to an end... or that he'd lost control... and realized just how Saiyan he really is... that he drove out the human for awhile! Forgot his mother's conditioning. Trunks apparently forgot that Gohan has a title as well... but he really should give him a new title... "The Prince of Pathos!" because he sure is pathetic!

Magnificent!! Bravo!!!

Wow. What an amazing, beautiful and corrupted story. You really know how to captivate people with the vivid imagery, and blood and gore. This story has strong sensuality and sexuality. Everything just flows so well and I'm just stunned by every chapter. I feel as though some of the lessons intended to be taught to the characters are meant to be taught to me. One thing about Mirai strikes me, he's trying to teach Trunks things and basicually being a hypocrite like he's holier than thou when it seems, he needs to learn some of the things he's trying to teach. Or maybe, he's learning himself ALONG with Trunks. You know what? The way you've written this; it's like all of this is what could have been cut out in DBZ, what Akira Toriyama meant it to be between the fine lines. Stories like this make you think; and you know it's powerful when the reader is shocked into finding out something about themselves. You did an extremly destructive job with the violence and gore. And the lesson in love? It's amazing because not many of us think of love as fucked up as Mirai has shown Trunks through David and Susan; I know I didn't. I know I would have thought David's love of his stepmother as an obsession and nothing more; but you've done an excellent job of describing love in all it's shades and in showing how it's never just beautiful and painfree. So, we shouldn't look for it in others because we won't find it in anyone but ourselves. I think that was a lesson learned through Gohan's pretenses. Thanks for the inspiration.

Love,
Shay