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Undoubtly your best chapter yet.

Sci-fi? Mirai plays a role of the psychologist - it’s like hypnosis, only with special effects. And the patient can be involved and see his own reaction. So convenient!

So Trunks was bothered by his father’s words, after all. I thought he wouldn’t be. Well, yeah, not so much because of his words, but because of his own reaction to them.

It seems Mirai is making some progress; Trunks hadn’t been comfortable while watching his “conquest” at the grave. Though, I think that Trunks can start boasting about another conquest – Mirai is almost his. I wonder how this is going to end. Even though Mirai feels and sees that Trunks is starting to consider his behavior, starts thinking about his reasoning, it might happen that it will never be enough of this. Both of them would be badly burned in that case. Ah well.

Trunks just loves using his Saiyan side as an excuse for what he’s doing. He’s a damn coward. It’s easier for him to ignore one side of his, than to deal with them both. Everything happens to others but not to him. And he wants it to stay like that; he wants to keep that brick wall between him and his emotions, between himself and other people. He just loved to believe the tale that his father is a Saiyan, and Saiyans just live for fighting and sex and don’t care about anything else in the world. Spoiled brat. But while a child he could have an excuse, but as he grew older it got too serious, and he still believes that tale, and even if it tears apart his soul, even if it kills him, he still won’t accept that his belief and wish are wrong. I really hope Mirai can help this bullet-head.

I loved everything you said about Gohan and power. It’s so damn true! He always has been afraid that it would take over his mind completely, become his undeniable part, and there would be no way back. He always felt the need to answer everyone else’s hopes; to be more Human as his mother wished, to be more Saiyan as his father and as the dangerous circumstances demanded. Poor kid.

Waiting for update and getting ready for another trip to Trunks’ head.

this is still going great I can't wait to see the next installment!!
Really I am not kidding you. I am really enjoying this! You don't know who to feel sorry for in this story. Although I am rooting
for both Trunks and Mirai to find happiness if they can. Gee I guess the dead body remark did get to Trunks.

Cant wait to see what other memories they poke around in.

Wow...intense...magnificent! So well written...

...words cannot describe the feelings and emotions this story has provoked...

I must say: Trunks uncaring and unfeeling...the epitome of narcissim...a serously spoiled brat!!
well he is a prince...an alien...stronger and more powerful than any human, and he saved the world...so yes he suffers from delusions of grandeur and he is filled with righteous power. As the saying goes: power corrupts and absolute power corrupts absolutely: and our little guy has both: In Spades!!!!

One must commend him for having the presence of mind to snap back from what is obviously a mind shattering experience; the flipside of what was once a mind blowing experience. At first was the lust of the hunt and the thrill of the kill...only to get slapped in the face by the reality of his actual conduct... he himself as the ultimate predator... unfeeling, uncaring.

But the essence of the encounter is this: he is a hunter...deadly and accurate in persuit of his prey... only now he is thwarted at every turn by his nemesis... and mirai is his nemesis...in addition to the other crap...he comes in second to his other self...

As for the thrill of the kill and the lust for power... he was a very powerful being at a very early age... a fused being... part of the euphoria he felt was a result of his fusion with Goten... neither are whole, both are broken... after having tasted perfection...

Our young princeling...a hybrid, a fused being, misses that power...that taste....

the longing was so overwhelming he chose an alternate form of addiction... that of the predator...and he is deadly and accurate in his trade.... so what if his rival found a way to 'color' one of his most cherished memories... the end more than justifies the means... he is persuing the ultimate challenge... he is high on the ultimate drug... the thrill of the chase...
which happens to be the most powerful aphrodisiac of all.

The answer is so simple...yet so complex...he misses the power... the euphoric feeling he had when he was Gotenks... he can never recapture that ... not as a single entity...

As for the full bloods: Vegetto was a helluva power trip for them also...

As for Goku mourninig the loss of ChiChi and being inconsolable... hell he didn't love her... he was probably regretting all the time he abandoned her... or mourning the fact that she knew he never really loved her...hell knows...I wonder what she said to him on her deatbed to make him wail like a banshee...and knowing her...it probably was pretty nasty...and she did get the last word... bedding the brat was probably the best sex he had in his life...and he used him ... used the brat... for phyisical release... til the thrill of the hunt meant destroying someone else...

Kudos to Mirai for finding a way to 'see' and allow Trunks to 'see' himself as he persued his conquests...a very interesting turn of events...but he has his work cut out for him... our young princeling is very resilient and a hard sell...

it's gonna be very interesting to see his reaction to his other conquests...

I read this all the way through last night but due to keyboard problems couldn't submit. I just have to say I'm drawn in. I just reflected how time and time again the DBZ fandom portrays some of the best writing I've ever seen on AFF.net.

I think it's because the authors here and you as well, are reaching for a greater potential when you write your fanfictions about Dragon Ball Z. You're adding so much depth to what could be a very shallow story to begin with, you know the whole fighters saving teh world (let's not even talk about the whole GT mess).

I love what you and other authors are doing here and I put you right up there with my favorites in this fandom. I really really look forward to an update and I hope i mentioned how sucked in I was -I couldn't stop reading honestly. I just, it's wonderful, I hope you know that.

To Bruce's Girl: Yeah, I agree, there's something so erotic about the forbidden, yet it only lasts for that little while... Argh, these experiences show tempation exists, don't you think? I hate it when my body's needs cloud my true heart and my rational mind.

Generally speaking, I think there's something erotic about sexually conforting a person that you secretly like and always knew deep down you can't have... It's like the feverish pursuit of a challenge. But we can't just ignore that there are other ways to give comfort. I guess love is when you fall inlove with your friend: someone you can trust that will take care of you, like you for who you are and respect you...and the sex can come later. I think Trunks wanted to ease Goku's pain as a means to forget his own, whatever that might be: lonlieness, being misunderstood, not being able to relate to anyone, abandonment, rejection, inferiority complex... whatever.


And it sounds like I was right: hybrids ARE crazy! *snickers*


By the way, Bruce's Girl, did you try talking with the guy and apologizing? I'm sure things were pretty different between the two of you from then on... but it's stilla good start to try and mend things a bit.

I think this is the best chapter you've written so far and let me tell you why. There is a depth to this chapter that is scraped across the the top and then seeped into every word.

Memories have a funny way of changing. Each experience we have changes our reaction to our past actions time after time, proving that progression does exist. I have a particularly terrible memory of something that I did. I met a beautiful couple, and we were great friends. The man was gorgeous, half Italian, half white with beautiful, emerald green eyes, and his wife...well...she was just as beautiful. They went through a pretty nasty divorce, and while the guy worked at night, I kept his kids for him when he got custody of them. He loved his wife more than anything on the Earth, and without her, we was an empty shell of a man with nothing to live for except to raise his children.

Well, one night, he came home from work, tired, exhausted, sore, and I took advantage of his pain and exhaustion. At the time, it was erotic, and probably the best sex I've ever had, but now, when I look back on it, I'm disgusted by my actions. Myrril trusted me, and I betrayed him by using him as nothing more than a piece of ass. He's still a good guy, and I have to say he's the best father I've ever seen.

What it boils down to is that the best memory I used to have has now become my most shameful. I look at myself and wonder if what I did was worth the night that I spent with him, and I have to say no. Beautiful as he is, the act itself was disgusting and ugly, and I'll never look at it any other way. The power of experience is amazing. Isn't it?

Well, that was rather interesting. *blinks* Firstly how Trunks reacted to his own memories. I didn't think he had any regrets about what had happened, but unless the device is having some sort of side effects, he wasn't very happy at what he was reliving.

Now, the part where Goku was just using Trunks as medicine. Hm ... I guess everyone has their flaws, I am just surprised this was Goku's, but they were both getting what they wanted without either of them getting hurt: great sex with no attachments.


WHOOOT! Does this mean I get to see what happened between Trunks and Gohan now? *really hopes so*

Great job as usual.

BTW... I am away from home, so I don't have access to my MSN or email. Have a Happy New Year if you don't hear from me sooner.

Awesome...truly awesome...

I just read all eighteen chapters...so II will comment on chapter eigtheen first:

The little narcissist has met his match. Imagine...all this time living with the false assumption that no one could resist his charms, only to find out that the object of his desire, was not fighting his attraction for him, but his desire to kill him...

Imagine...finding out that the one you want, the one you crave...the one whose lust you perceive...isn't the lust of the flesh, but the lust of the kill...

The narcissist now has awakened what he truly desired...the lust for the kill...except he's already dead...! Dead to the one he craves...poetic justice! The brat just found out he's living on borrowed time!

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Mirai has questioned Goten, seen Gohan and been tempted by Trunks... I cannot wait to see what Goku has to say... his perspective should be very interesting... as interesting as Gotens...

Vegeta is as ruthless as ever... and unless he changes, he will kill his son about his Kakarott. The Little Narcissist has only til his mother closes her eyes... then all bets are off...

I love it....can't wait to see the outcome...

Marai is making progress with Trunks... slowly.

At the same time, Trunks is making progress with Marai.

Irony.


Your descriptions and the way you convey their feelings and thoughts is fabulous!!! Keep up the great work.