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Hello again! *coughs, looking at everyone nervously* Does anyone know what I am? Well...I don\'t care lol. I\'ll tell ya anyway. A 15 year old virgin :P With a high IQ of course.

Oh, and Camaro? I know about King Dong because of my mum. No joke here. Seriously. My mum (for a strange reason) told me when I was 13 and I\'m sorry for him myself. An erection would kill him because of the lack of blood everywhere else, so god knows how he became a porn star... *coughs again* Glad you came and delivered Camaro. *bows*

Next should be Bulma or 18, just any girl

I agree jay fic lover but you\'ve got to be a virgin to say shit like \'chichi had multiple orgasms as gohan sucked her titties\'

why am I the only one who left their email address?

I know I have written some of the crappies stories this website has ever seen but damn.I\'m not trying to be mean so I\'ll say it needs some work, and this seems like it was written by a 12-year old virgin.A woman cant cum multiple times from gettin their tits sucked on.Make your stories more detailed and they will begreay trust me. Thi is a very gentle review compared to some of the review I\'ve gotten.

Good story. But please, NO BOYS! I want Gohan to pursue only girls like Bulma, Snow, Launch and Mrs. Briefs (all the gals he knew before the cell games).

Thank you Camaro, you have delivered. Very amusing.

I think that it should be a girl.

I like the story plot. please please don\'t put gohan haveing sex with any boys. try and make the chapters longer like 4 pages on microsoft word also more graphic.
I recomend ever Erasa, lime, bulma or 18 save videl for last.try and put some threesoms in (mff) some good threesoms coples would be gohan/bulma/chichi, gohan/erasa/videl, gohan/videl/18, gohan/chichi/18, gohan/videl/chichi or gohan/videl/bulma

WHERE IS CAMARO WHEN YOU NEED HER????? THIS IS UTTER BOLLOCKS... *shudders* Eugh...well..it was a little better than Gohan raping Pan, but...seriously...Gohan is sick...and so OOC I can\'t believe it!!!

\'The door then quietly opened and Gohan walked in and sat right by his mother. As soon as he saw his mother his cock went hard.\' Eugh...just...eugh.

\'She quickly opened her eyes and saw Gohan’s ten inch monster.\' The biggest \'dick\' of all time is about 18 inches and belongs to the porn star King Dong, look it up if you don\'t believe me.

\'Chi-Chi then grabbed his meat and slowly jacked it off.
“Gohan that’s the biggest piece of meat I’ve ever seen,” she groaned.\' \'Meat\'? You\'re so eloquent with this, please, do write a love poem.

\'After gulping her love juice he cleaned her pussy walls of it with his tounge.\' Again, very eloquent. \'pussy\' and \'love juices\' are SUCH a turn on.

\'“Okay I’m gonna fuck you doggie style!” She then stood on all fours and stuck her ass out. Gohan then mounted her and slid his dick inside her hot love box and pumped into her faster and harder each time until they both climaxed and cummed at the same time.\' First off, it\'s CAME at the same time, not cummed. You were in present tense, weren\'t you? Keep it the same! Also, \'love box\' Oh great, now it\'s a \'love box\' is it??

Eugh! JUST SICK!! Write more, and get more flames. This story is unbelievably bad.