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Haven\'t read this story cause I thought the reviews section would be funnier... and it was.

Hehe, Camaro, lorofthepies, Disgusted: I only hope people keep writting stuff like this so I can get to read more of your flames, they\'re 100% more amusing than the actual stories. ^_^

And Camaro: an author doesn\'t need to be a virgin to write such a crappie sex scene, really. I have met virgins who are great lemon writers... It\'s got to do more with the IQ, then, I guess?

What some people don\'t understand is that porn can also be good or poor in quality. Just because there\'s sex it doesn\'t make it good porn authomatically.

this is incredibly sick and disgusting. I didn\'t like this fic at all, it totally sucked, you are a bad writer and you give a bad name to most of the writer\'s out there

Ahem* I have arrived. Well, this isn\'t that bad. It sucks, don\'t get me wrong.. but it\'s about at a thin line between Suckville and Pretty-damn-bad-wouldn\'t-show-my-mother Land.

First of all, Chi Chi in a see-through night gown? Have we all not witnessed the frigid, dried up shrew-bitch that is Chi Chi? Good God man, would you THINK?!

10 inch Monster though.... ::shakes head:: man, I know you guys wanted me to tear this shit up but damn hahaha, I gotta admit I LOVE the wording. I keep expecting anything now... this shit is unpredictable... any time now... it\'s gonna be his \"wild love dragon\", \"The Gohan Express\", \"The personal love shack\", \"Little red riding hood\'s big basket\" \"Love meat\"... God, it could be anything.

But Love juice? LOVE JUICE?!! OH MY GOD! Are you serious?! Well shit, I\'ll give ya creativity points for the embarrassment. I can only imagine some poor poor schmutz opening up the refrigerator.

\"Oh! Don\'t drink that.. that\'s my LOVE juice\"..

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Good lord.. have you no shame? HOT LOVE BOX?

And let me just get this straight for the sake of laughing later.... Chi Chi is having multiple orgasms from him touching her boobs? ::raises hand:: Who here wants a swig of whatever kinda twisted monkey mojo juice that bitch has been drinking? Gotta love it when virgins write sex scenes. Soon ya get words like \"Entrance Anal\" hopping in there... sick sick shit.

Does anyone else here freaking LOVE how twisted the wording is? It\'s all so.. contradicting. Ya get crazy words like \"Hot love box\" in there and then all of a sudden pussy, cunt, meat....BALLS?! JeSUS!

The only way you could have possibly made this already vomit-inducing story any sicker would be to have Gohan call her \"mom\" when he talks dirty.

\"Ok, I\'m gonna fuck you doggy-style mommy\"... \"Ooohhhhh yeah, you like that do ya mommy?\" ::spank spank:: \"You\'ve been a dirrty dirrty mommy, haven\'t ya?\"

::nods head:: Yeah.. yeah, that\'d do it. That\'d send me sprawled out on the floor, diving for the nearest toilet. I will NOT sleep tonight.

So I\'m just gonna be straight. I didn\'t like this.. in fact, I\'m gonna do this story a favor, print it up and use it as toilet paper for the next week. That way it\'ll come in handy and actually have a purpose, ok? And \"who should his next victim be? boy or girl?\" Who here already feels like a victim for reading this crap? Yep, ol\' Gohan and his great big unbelievable basket had his way with us today.

Camaro

PS.. Oh, and Disgusted, while it disturbs me that you know that information hahaha, I for one would like to meet King Dong.

Well, it was better than 50cent\'s pile of crap...just... I\'ll give you that. Gohan was more in character.

*is waiting for Camaro to come and post something to amuse the living daylights out of me*

*cannot be bothered*

What the hell is wrong with this sudden explosion of shite? Poor AFF, we\'re going to have to get buckets of disinfectant for this. I think this is one of the better ones too.

My advice: Try to use more eloquent language. I know no one is perfect, but \"Love juice\" is not eloquent in any way you use it.

Please don\'t post anymore chapters. You wasted AFF\'s database resources with this. I hope you\'re happy.