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You\'re back! You\'re back! *falls to the floor in utter ecstasy* I am so happy there\'s another sequel. I can\'t believe Goten went along. And Vegeta let him. The second chapter was great. Wonderful hidden recap you had there. Very clever. I can\'t wait for the next chapter.

Haha..chapter 2 made me feel really nostalgic as it brought back memories of the final chapter of Uncharted Waters. Ah the carnage...I remember how I held my hand over my mouth with the thought, \"HOLY SHIT!\" flying through my mind. The way chapter 2 played out makes my hyped for the next chapter. I\'m anxious to see what the beaten and hospitalized have to say. *dances* Update again soon, please! ^-^

oO.

Methinks Piccolo is either going to be uberly pissed, or really really close to going demonic again. And filler chapters are great things, they are needed to help further plot along, even when there isn\'t that much action. *tilts head* I feel for Yamcha, and I really feel for Krillen too, I don\'t usually say that, but he\'s gotta be there to help pick up what pieces are left, and honestly- probably the only sane one that\'s gonna be left.

I just hope nothing fucks this up...

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Lovely chapter, as always ^_^

Hi Makoto it\'s B. I\'m so happy to see you writing again, you were always one of my favorite authors, you write emotions so well. Your fic Unconditional Bonds really made me love the VegetaXPiccolo pair and was probably the inspiration for my fic \"Hail to the King\" (I really should finish that...). Anyway I\'m so glad you\'re writing this, truthfully I was kind of disappointed the the ending for the fic before this one (can\'t remember the name off the top of my head). You explained that it was rushed and just to wrap it up, but I was like w-what... no!!! You can\'t leave it like \'that\'!
Anyway this is starting out good, we\'ve got some interesting plot bunnys to work with. You\'ve got to wonder what Goku\'s thoughts are going to be when he finds out Goten went with Vegeta. My first thought what he\'s going to think Vegeta took him to get even, but if everyone knows Goten went willing, it sounds like it\'ll turn into an angst fest. And poor Trunks (can\'t say his choice was a good one, I really don\'t see the GokuXTrunks pairing, they just seen to have nothing in common. Maybe Mirai Trunks, but not chibi... shrug, I still want to see where their relationship goes). And poor, poor Piccolo. Oh, I hope he doesn\'t go into a depressed mental rant, I want him to go out there and take back what\'s his. Piccolo\'s a very strong character I can\'t see him giving up or letting go on someone or thing he cares for.
Anyway please update when you get the chance, write at your own pass I\'ll be happy so long as you keep it up.
b-chan
p.s. Maybe I\'ll do you some fan art too. Good fics usually get the creative juices flowing for me and art just draws its self.

Hooray, second chapter and i suppose this one is essental or something? since you usually dont involve characters unless something like them being gay/married/widowed/killed off, i could go on but ya kno i still love how this story isn\'t from a single POV and very...original, thats the word to describe it :D

Oh god i\'ve read unconditional bonds and uncharted waters(having missed school to read them) and i loved every chapter since you have so many twists and so many POV\'s. I think these are incredible and i hope you\'ll finish Kings, Tyrants and Demons!

arnt u gaNNA WRITTE MORE IN HERE AND SALVATION? I HOPE U DO

O.O I\'m so damn glad to see this started up again, especially this series. This story, and one other is about the only reason I ever read DBZ fanfiction anymore. Most of the other stuff has just gone to shit, or people have gone away. PiccoloxVegeta is such an interesting pairing and its also a more logical one to me, as well. Once again, you blow me away with your eye for detail, your wonderful ability to portray a character without losing his essense.

All in all, I can\'t wait to see what happens next.

I am forever your faithful fan.

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Makota i am quickly becomeing a very big fan i hope u write more and i hope u show a littel as to what happens to piccolo.

colt

MAKOTA! I\'ve been waiting for this sequel forever! When I saw this story listed, I swear I had a small seizure. Finally, the sequel to the first fic I ever read on AFF. This just made my freakin month! I feel like I can do a backflip right now.

A great first chapter for it too. I was wondering what became of Goten. Oh god, I\'m SOO happy I can barely form words right now.

Update again soon. VERY SOON. I WANT MORE!

Lots of love,
Yuurei