rate_review Reviews

Your spelling is off, but the story is good so far. I would suggest spacing out the words more into paragraphs, it does make it easier to read. So far I like the story. Envy should get his ass kicked for saying such things to Ed though, who asked that cross dressing palm tree . . . anyway, can't wait to read the next chapter.

I think its nice tho also a bit unclear

I like this, update soon please, it would be a little easier if you gave a bit of detail to where he's kept because i couldn't really get the concept of being frozen in ice but not, just a suggestion.

Waii! Can't get enough! Update soon! <=)

ARE YOU EVER GOING TO UP DATE!!! AHHHH!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!

MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!!

Hey, great story! I love how you use so much descripttion in your story, it makes it very entertaining to read! Just one suggestion, though; more paragraghs. I don\'t mean make it longer, just punctuate your story a bit better. I know it\'s a pain, and it\'s sometimes hard to know where a thought ends, but you really need to use paragraphs more effectively. That is the ONLY thing that is keeping this story from being an absolutly AWESOME read! Hell, if you want, I\'ll be a beta reader for you. It absolutly kills me to see a story as good as this held back by something as stupid as grammar.
If you\'re interested in my beta-ing your stories (which I would LOVE to do!) drop me an e-mail! I may be picky to the point of insanity, but isn\'t that a good trait in a beta? ^_^ Any-who love love LOVE the story!

UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!! ^__^

sounds good. there are so far envy/ed pairings as is.

hate you? No way, I loove you! MOOORE!