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Tear Jerker!! One of the best!! Oh I hope you don't abandon this story. This is Awesome!! Any more to come?? Please?? K

SWEEEEET!!! XD well thats for all you have written. It's hard to come by good Gohan/Vegeta fics...well its hard to come by them at all. The story itself has an awesome approach to their relationships. Gohan filling in for his father with Vegeta and Piccolo at his side is something I haven't read either. Great sex scenes and I love the approach on saiyan pregnancy (birth channel). The movie that Goku made was a good twist to make things lively. I cant wait until Vegeta and Gohan get some privacy so they can finaly claim eachother. I really cant think of anything else to type. Please update soon! God I cant believe I said that, I hate it when ppl say that. Authors write as fast as they can...but oh well. The story is so good that I want more!

This is a beautifully written and well thought out story. I love it. I hope you update soon. I can't wait to see what happens when Gohan becomes pregnant. How everyone handles it. I would love to see Vegeta being very over protective. And see him panic when Gohan gives birth.

omgomgomgomgomg! This is deff my fav Gohan/Vegeta fic EVER! This was just...amazing! And I need more! Pweeze? Ok, this whole website is confussing me. I registered but I was wondering if (like ff.net) you can get author updates in the mail...I don\'t see a button for it...of course, I\'m prolly doing something TOTALLY wrong. If there isn\'t and/or I\'m missing something, could you e-mail me when you update anything? powerrangers_r_us@yahoo.com. THANK YOU! Keep ip the amazing work, your...well...amazing.

Oh man you gotta finish that

i likey please continue!!!!! and i liked the way chapter 4 was described.

“You got it. She had to sell herself to save enough money to come back.”

There was silence. Then all of a sudden, the house erupted into laughter. None of them could believe it. Videl went from being the center of attention to being a tramp with a child outside of wedlock. Her life had gone down hill after Gohan broke up with her. The group agreed that she got what was coming to her. Videl had thought she would always be in the spotlight with her dad and that she’ll always have the money and nothing can touch her. Boy, was she wrong.


Awesome. I doubt you could get more hideously out of character for virtually everyone in this fic if you tried.

*Grins* I am so very happy that my review about verbs didn\'t deter you from continuing to write this story. It is, after all, a good story.

lol, I am glad the guys have finally vioced their feelings. Now I wonder what is to come.

On to the next chapter.

i think you\'re an awesome writer, more power to ya, update soon

Well, it\'s an interesting story.

You do need to work on your verb tenses. You had a lot of them that were in present tense that should have been past tense. The most common occurance was you used \'when\' when you should have used \'went\'. Gohan when into the other room. as an example should be Gohan went into the other room.

There were also times it was just the opposite and should have used a present tense verb instead of a past tense one. With as many times as it occured, I had a feeling english wasn\'t your first language.