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Part 4 of my review (I hate how there wasnt enough spce to fit everything in 1 post)

Princess Katarin: *bows* Thank you for introducing a young, female original character who is not a complete slut. I find her to be likeable as well as the rest of your original characters. She\'s got a lot of brain smarts, as well as good skills. And the bit of her storyline/background is interesting. Normally, when original characters have an immediate to connection to main cast characters I do not like it, but how she ties in with Roy I can believe and it seems canon for the series. I thought it was a very beautiful dramatic scene when she brought Roy to the Gate. And the scene in the recent chapter in the hallway. Yeah they kiss, but it\'s not like they\'re constantly all over eachother. Both kisses were signs of appreciation/gratitude, not all out smut filled random make outs. Anyway, from her description of her Prince is it Edward? If it is, I think that\'s rahter sweet. Unlike most heavy yaoi fangirls who I noticed reviewed that bit, I think it\'s rather nice to think of him with a girl like her. From what I\'ve noticed of her charcter and personality, she seems like a good match for him. But, this is only what I\'ve noticed so far. In future chapters, she could turn out to be a huge bitch and all of what I said could be flushed down the toilet. XD

Kenton Ares: The big baddie.....I LOVE HIM! He\'s so creepy and awesome! A much better villain than Dante was! I\'m a huge HUGE fan of creepy evil villains! Like Scar from the Lion King, Drakken from Kim Possible, Mumrah from Thundercats, Blight fromt Batman Beyond, Naraku from Inuyasha, as well as many others! He is just the most awesome baddie Ive ever seen in a fanfic! *is getting all fangirlish* ~fangirly squeal~ I want to start a fanclub for him! In fact, I tihnk I will! Gah I want to see a picture of him! Do you have any? If so, please email them to me! I like him a lot! Good job with him!

Now this is just my review for what IVe read. So you dont even have to care. Ignore it, delete it. Whatever. I just thought Id review one of the longest stories in this section. Great job! Please keep writing! and by the way, Flame VS FullMEtal Redux was the best!! <3 <3 <3 ^_^

~Doll Of Lenore~

^My old email there was the_Fullmetal_Edo@techemail.com but after I saw episode 51 and previews for the movie I had to change it!! XD

I was talking to Kyatto on the boards and she told me to read this. ^_^

I must say, WOW. You\'re a really good writer! And the characters are awesome! Please write more! I\'m very interested in what you have in store for them, especially the doctor. Cause I noticed all of your original characters have a \"destiny\" and Im still trying to figure out what hers is....

Edward is so cocky! It\'s funny!

But Roy is a bit -too- pervy....Yeah he likes his miniskirts, but so do a lot of military men... It doesnt neccasarily mean he\'d rape anyone at any time....

And the yaoi kinda bothers me...but that\'s just because I just cant think of either Ed or Roy as gay, and I have to constantly tell Kyatto to get that yaoi doujins out of my face.... At least Mustang show his straight side a lil bit.....

I look forward to reeding more! Keep writing!

Great story for the most part but some of the things annoy me. Like how Roy is RIDICULOUSLY out of character. i mean, Mustang does not rape everything in sight in the series or manga, so why do all the people who write fanfic make him to be that type of person? The only person I could see roy with is riza hawkeye, and they even state in the series that Roy is STRAIGHT and likes WOMEN. Some yaoi I can deal with, but when all a story is is Roy doing nothing but dirty things to guys it annoys me. (Also, Tenshi reminds me of Chi from Chobits. With all the constanty beign refered to as cuter than all belief and that crap. And I HATE Chi. She\'s annoying. Cute things are annoying. And cute is not part of FMA at all. So lighten up on the cuteness pleeze.) Please let Roy doing something STRAIGHT please? I liked how Roy kissed the character Katarin though, that was cute. An most likely in character for him too. Please have more of things like that! Even if you pair him with Winry I wont mind as long as he is with a girl! And as for Ed, Ed and Al! Elricest is good! Either Elricest, or pair him with a woman, Or Envy, but that\'s only because in a way, EdXEnvy is Elricest! XD
Other than that, the story is great! Keep writing! :D :D :D :D

Great story for the most part but some of the things annoy me. Like how Roy is RIDICULOUSLY out of character. i mean, Mustang does not rape everything in sight in the series or manga, so why do all the people who write fanfic make him to be that type of person? The only person I could see roy with is riza hawkeye, and they even state in the series that Roy is STRAIGHT and likes WOMEN. Some yaoi I can deal with, but when all a story is is Roy doing nothing but dirty things to guys it annoys me. (Also, Tenshi reminds me of Chi from Chobits. With all the constanty beign refered to as cuter than all belief and that crap. And I HATE Chi. She\'s annoying. Cute things are annoying. And cute is not part of FMA at all. So lighten up on the cuteness pleeze.) Please let Roy doing something STRAIGHT please? I liked how Roy kissed the character Katarin though, that was cute. An most likely in character for him too. Please have more of things like that! Even if you pair him with Winry I wont mind as long as he is with a girl! And as for Ed, Ed and Al! Elricest is good! Either Elricest, or pair him with a woman, Or Envy, but that\'s only because in a way, EdXEnvy is Elricest! XD
Other than that, the story is great! Keep writing! :D :D :D :D

Thanks to all who reviewed. A SMALL reminder - this story is a chronicle from a weekly RPG I play in so sometimes stuff happens that isn\'t 100% \"in character\" for the FMA cast. And YES I know ROy is more into gals than guys - there IS stuff coming up where he\'ll be more like he is in the show! The story is going to get a little darker too (which is also like the show if anyone here has seen it to epsidoe 51!!) so please bear with me! And I do agree that we do hav eone person in the group who is too cute for the FMA universe but, well, he will also be doing some more \"canon\" things later on in the story. We\'ll try in our game sessions to get him to keep the cuteness down . THANKS FOR READING!!

Cute story so far, and one of the longest I\'ve seen for FMA. It\'s kool that u play in tabletop RP. I like some of the OCs, though personally, in my mind, anyone who creates an OC for an anime series (even if it is roleplay) is a bit kinda mary-sueish. OCs are alright for something like D&D or Vampire RPs, but for a set anime series with characters already being RPed out, random OCs just joining up with the main cast is kindy retarted. But how you put in your OCs like the evil Kenton dude and the Princess, you gave them proper introduction, they weren\'t set with the main cast in the beginning and I like that. They actually had to do something to get them to be part of the story they weren;t just -THERE-. Whichh is wy I dont understadn anythin bout Tenshi. Why was he there in the first place? He not in FMA, even in the manga. So why was he with Ed n Roy in the beginnin? Same for the cool doctor lady. You should explain more -WHY- they are there. Not just randomly have them there. Also, you should get more in depth with Doctor Seris\'s relationships with the characters, cause right now all it seems like she is just there to help out a lil bit and seems rather clueless, while with Tenshi and Katarin you specify how they relate to the other characters. Does the doctor like Al or something? cause a lot of times she iz hangin out with him. Could you rite chapter explain stuff bout her? I\'ll review again once more chapters are written and posted, because it took me so long just to reed whats already up LOL Ok good story writ more plz!!!!

~Pink Panda~

The reason there isn\'t much about Doctor Series is that she is a lot like Lt. Maria Ross (if you watch the show she kinda just showed up after Armstrong assigned her to watch ed and Al). and Docor Series got assigned to be with Ed and Al on their mission by roy. There will be more about her as the person as soon as the person who created her gives me more back story on her. The only info I have on her is what we do \"in game\" and what she does \"in game\". The story is a transcrtipt of our RP fleshed out so it works as a story. As far as Tenshi goes he has a really involved backstory that I might have to do as SEPARATE from the Iserlohnn storyline. He got introduce dinto our game through an adventure that predated the ISERLOHNN chronicle. He is a cool character and the show does mention other Alchemists even though they aren\'t given names or anything. What we did in our game is give one of those faces you see in the background a name and a story! And for those of you wondering what \"THE SINS\" are up to that will be explained VERY SOON....!

Aww.. I love this story and can\'t possibly say enough good things about it! ^____^ I\'ve been reading for a while now but I didn\'t want to review till I caught up :D Now that I caught up, though, I\'m so sad ;_; Shame on Roy. I\'m an avid Roy/Ed reader and I don\'t want them to be split up in such a unique story @_@ Oi, anyways, I love the update and the rest of the story and look forward to more updates ^___^

*Gives her a RoyEd cupcake* :3?

Yay! Great chapter! I can\'t wait to read more! keep it coming please!

No! How can you stop it there!? I must know what will happen. Hey is her prince Ed?No I am not saying Ed should go with her! I am a RoyxEd fan! They are meant to be! Okay then I am out of subject! Heh anyways please udate soon! You have a gret story going on here!