rate_review Reviews

Hi! I finally finished that porject like an hour ago and i read this chapter... it was really good... but why did it have to stop?! *sniffles* Hehe, I can\'t wait till the next chapter!

Loved this chapter! I can\'t help wondering though, what will happen if the two vegetas meet each other? And goku seems to have the same feelings for both of them... and i keep thinking about tose \'daydreams\' goku used to have... i smell a plot twist coming on... hahaha! I know this sounds weird but i keep thinking that somehow the two vegetas will merge, or that maybe this is some kind of dream that goku is having... but i honestly dont think its a dream... okay, enough of my babbling, i cant wait for the next update!

I am very sorry if I gave you the impression that I didn\'t like the last chapter. I thought it was great. You have a plot going, and sometimes, with plot, comes drama. *nods*

On with this chapters review. Again, I loved chapter. Actually, I think it is my favorite so far. (Of course, the next one will be my new favorite when it comes out. hehe)

Goku speaking up when he did to Chichi was priceless. I sort of feel sorry for Kakarot, but I am glad it is an older version of Goku, with a bit more knowledge of what he is getting himself into. lol

I am very happy Vegeta was able to share the part of his past with Goku that he had been holding back. That had to have been a terrible burdon, and now, although it is not gone, it is certainly less of an obstical.

MWuahahahahahhahahaha, Earth, here they come!

wow that chapter was funny with goku being a stinky bastard

*snerrrrrrrk*...I must say, the humor here has just the right touch...not too goofy and not too sappy...nice balance...

your paragraph breaks have improved immensely...yes, it will feel excessive at first, but it will feel more natural the more you practice...there are still a few strange word usages that give away your language skills...other than those one would think you are a native speaker...I\'m terrible at languages and find myself envious at your breadth of tongue...your plot is tying together nicely even if some of it is convenient, but hell you can\'t go on and on about every aspect, that would just become tedious...so kudos for sticking with the elements that were most important to your plotline...I think I still hate Chi-chi, though...*snerk*

I\'m not sure if you intended this to be funny; \"So, Radditz finally got him in the end.\" ...but...I can\'t help but want to say \'Well DUH!...how does he think Raaaven _got_ pregnant??\'....*snickers*...it was a subtle and wonderful pun...and even if it was accidental it was great simply because sometimes stuff like that writes itself and that\'s one of the best moments one can have as a writer...*grins*

I am _really_ looking forward to the last few chapters of this...

Chichi and Kakarott....LOL

Wonderful chapter.

and action begin :P
please, add next chapter soon, ok? I am wery curious about earth people, will there will by Sons and Trunks? or not? and second Vegeta? my o my! update soon, ok? ^^ PLEASE! Your other stoies too! I love your stories!

O.o Vegeta better hurry up and do something or Goku\'s gonna go mental... O_o;

Oh this is good - are you very fluent in Russian? Coz if you are I\'ll need your help with a story I\'m writing.

Ahhh misunderstandings and love. They happen so often between these two but I rely on you to make it all better!

Bulma! Earth leader! Excellent choice!

excellent chapter...the plot seems to be tying together nicely and I\'m looking forward to seeing what happens with Bulma and the earthers...

the huge paragraph with Radditz speaking should be chopped up some, I know paragraph breaks are hard, I have a hard time with them sometimes too, especially with dialogue...try breaking this particular paragraph up whenever the specific thing Radditz is speaking of changes...

couple of typos/misspellings...nothing major..

good job!