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Your story is interesting, but your spelling and grammer are bad. Your story could be better if you got a beta-reader. It's not hard to find one. But then again, you don't seem to want one. Well, you can post low quality stories on the net if you want, but yours could be better quality if you edited them first or at LEAST used spell check. Ah well... you got rude when someone tried to hepl you out earlier. I can't stand little bitches like you who are obviously very young and narrowminded enough to think that you don't need any help with your work. Oh yeah, you art is great.

You know what? FUCK this resolution!

You know what I can't stand Keiko? Bipolar bitches who review stupid shit they ought to be working on THEMSELVES! "your spelling and grammer are bad." Yeah hun, it'd be "grammar". ::rolls eyes::

If Hiba doesn't fucking feel like paying so much attention to things like that (as YOU obviously don't "you art is great") than that's her business. I've always found that as long as it isn't tedious to read, that one should be paying more attention to the storyline itself rather than picking away at petty things in an attempt to bitch the author out later. If you're going to flame little twat, FLAME!

Camaro

Your story is interesting, but your spelling and grammer are bad. Your story could be better if you got a beta-reader. It's not hard to find one. But then again, you don't seem to want one. Well, you can post low quality stories on the net if you want, but yours could be better quality if you edited them first or at LEAST used spell check. Ah well... you got rude when someone tried to hepl you out earlier. I can't stand little bitches like you who are obviously very young and narrowminded enough to think that you don't need any help with your work. Oh yeah, you art is great.

Personally I think that Ending compleatly KICKED ASS to the major. Awsome plot twist got to love it. Still think you shuold writ some other fics peopls need more stroies that end like this I'm alsmot sick of happy endings.

i'm currently reading past to future and i'm on chapter 38 illness and i absolutely love the story i'm sorry that nobody pretty much reviewed if i had read this earlier i would have haelped be your muse,reviewed every chapter,and even beta test if i had to to get you to keep writing so yeah just thought i should tell you and thanks for writing such an awesome story

Oh my god...only furiza could be beaten to a pulp, have his DICK
ki-blasted
off, be mashed into the ground and STILL be alive and walking!

NOOOOOOO Raditzu! Don't go with the bad man! I had such a hard time
beta-ing the latter parts of this...i got so caught up in the story
that i
forgot i was looking for grammer and stuff like that! Wow...amazing
chapter! I actually almost cried when Goku-saa died! (that's a big
reaction from me...i'm such an ice-queen...)

I hope they're happy together in the afterlife! Maybe you should do a
little happy chapter about them together...it would be nice...*sighs*

Keep up the awesome writing!

Hella ^_^ V

after all that?.... that f'n sucked. so this was really a frieza/veggie fic... how misleading... and what? what happened to vegeta's other child... the one carried by bulma? you misled your readers andleft a story full of holes...

hope you're happy with yourself... you just lost this reader... because you chose a pat ending and didn't fill in the holes... I could have respected part of the ending, but you chose not to respect the reader...this just sucks!


after all is said and done, what did you really accomplish? N-O-T-H-I-N-G! ~~ ABSOULUTELY NOTHING

BIG WASTE OF TIME!

WHAT A CROCK OF CRAP

just read the whole story from begining to end.... cried my eyes out several times. Amazingly writing piece of art, though you left me feeling utterly heartbroken for Geta at the end. * glomps vegeta and never lets go* *takes her freeza figure and tosses it in her toilet **flush** shouts: TAKE THAT YOU CHIBI RAPING LIZARD!* please don't let it end soooooo sad! of coarse it's up to you... sometime happy endings are over rated. BUT I SIMPLY LOVE THIS STORY TO MUCH FOR IT TO JUST END LIKE THAT!!!!!!!!! but anyway, i just wanted to let you know that this is an awesome story, very unque in everyway. Weither you do do more or not i shall remember this as one of my favourites *and i've read alot of dbz fanfiction*!

I liked your story but I couldnt read the last chapter well. I strange letter things were the " ' , should be. I got stuff like this ¥. Could you like maybe reupload it? :)

this is probably one of the best dragonball z fanfics i have read in ages love the story so far, I'm up to chapter fifteen and i love it look forward to reading the ending.

WHAT IN THE HELL-HOLE WORLD IS WRONG WITH YOU????????
I thought Goku and Vegeta were going to live happily ever after in Other World, but now........
NOW THAT SCUMBAG OF A MONSTER HAD TO RUIN EVERYTHING!!!!
ANOTHER CURSE I PLACE UPON YOUR HEAD.

I know I sound mad and upset, that's the way I am when two people can't be together.

Please, please, please don't let this be the end.
I beg of you, PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!

P.S I really love the story *hee hee*.