rate_review Reviews

For some reason the story seems to be written by two different persons. The chapters, until Vegeta, Radditz and Nappa landed on Earth were wonderful. All the description/story of the young kidnapped prince and his guards/friends was just unbelievable; I just couldn’t tear away and was biting my fingernails while reading every word. That humiliation Frieza inflicted upon the prince, the filming of two nothing suspecting lovers [(I just loved how you described Radditz’s and Nappa’s relationship and love for each other. I usually don’t like Nappa; for me he associates with a bald dumb-head, but you made me love him. The bond and instincts were perfectly thought out and described. I loved the scene where Nappa was healing in regen. tank (after Zarbon raped Nappa), and Radditz was thinking about cleaning his wounds, liking them clean and staying close to his mate. It was just so intense!)].

And after they three went to Earth it all started getting…well…dunno. It became just…strange. I understand that Vegeta have been tortured and is brainwashed, but hell…he was just pissing me off with that his constant indetermination toward Goku. He sort of fell in love with his Kakarott when he saw him the first time, but was hitting and slapping Kakarott all the time. Did he try to knock his love into Goku’s head or something (there was some lame excuse that he was doing that because he himself was being hit by Frieza all the time, but it’s just silly)? And Goku…for heaven’s sake…when did he become such a sissy? (Though he’s rehabilitating…). Descriptions of surroundings are still wonderful as they were in the first part of the story and the sex was really good, but for some reason…the story just got…strange. Though, the first part won my heart. Despite this strangeness in latter chapters, the story is a wonderful read.

Goooood.

ooh now what might vegeta have in his hands??? please update soon

....whoa you\'re scary when yelling at flamers..... but yeah i luv your story and the updates are well worth the wait i luved the part in the chapter when raditz says goku is a retard that isn\'t worh vegeta\'s time, i couldn\'t stop laughing for about five minutes. oh and by the way that was an evil cliffhanger, update soon!!!!

WAHAHAHAHA!!

me? beta you?...ahm...*lips quirking*...no...I\'m not interested in spending all my time in minute corrections...your spelling SUCKS...the story idea is good...but since you obviously don\'t want me to read it I\'ll be glad to just dump this fic and skip on to something else...

and let me tell you something child, you\'d better grow a thicker skin if you want any editor anywhere to so much as glance at your work...if I\'d given you a real review you\'d have blown a gasket...I _was_ trying to be nice...

and no...I didn\'t bother to read this chapter, since your jolly little \'fuck off\' killed any appetite I might have had for more...

bottom line...learn to read, and write...

Just to let you know, I am a lazy SMUCK and haven\'t been reviewing, and that will probably continue to be the case. I love this story, and so do several others, and I see you have the reveiws to keep you motivated in updates.

You have an excellent story here, and just to let you know, I will probably continue to read this story without more than this one review.

Excellent job, good charater developement, lol, excellent... foreplay. :)

Macha

ah amour... lol the image of guku standing above vegeta and nibbling his nose in a sexy way will be stuck in my head, in fact, im going to draw it sooo any hooo...
Update! cant wait for next chappie!

yay! you updated and there\'s a little action going on here, i like how vegeta admires and insults goku at the same time its funny and actually kinda sweet. update soon!

Awww poor Geta ^_^ LOVE your fics you simply MUST update soon REALLY i want to know what happens ^_^ Kepp up the awsome work darl and I shall forever read it.

okay...I\'ve been following this for a while...and though it\'s got a lot of fluff and nonsense in it, there are elements that I find very good...however...you have more typos than a thousand chimps typing on a thousand typewriters for a thousand years...I suspect english is not your first language, and if it is I do apologize but your spelling is excreble...this would improve a great deal if you found a competent beta reader...not just anyone mind you, but someone who understands decent grammar and who can tell when the spellcheck is stupid...