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December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i reviewed this story, but i assume the glitch ate my review. anyways, hot chapter. i have a thing for watching hot wax. one time i saw dita von teese on tv. she had this girl, all bondaged up, and presented to a crowd. and then she pulled up what could badically be described as a cauldron, filled with hot wax. she used a LADLE and just poured the stuff all over the girl. that was hot.
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December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
^.^ *claps* Much better, and I don't see a problem at all. It flowed so very nicely. And I love how you tied Trowa's kink to his circus days. But I have got to wonder what Wufei's kink will be.
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December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow....31 chapters...and yet...it hasn't gotten old. I really do love this fic, one of the better ones I have read. Keep up the good work!
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December 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
XD My brain has turned to mush...
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December 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Treize is wild!!! XD Talk about insatiable!!!
And this perverted see-saw was just uterly HOT!!!
If this is a punishment session, I think the boys are gonna continue being naughty so they can be punished again and again! I love the way you make Duo so shy and surprised about what's happening to him. He loves the pleasure but kinda "innocent" XD.
Can't wait to see who's next!!!
Thank you for writing!
Hugs
Ojousan
And this perverted see-saw was just uterly HOT!!!
If this is a punishment session, I think the boys are gonna continue being naughty so they can be punished again and again! I love the way you make Duo so shy and surprised about what's happening to him. He loves the pleasure but kinda "innocent" XD.
Can't wait to see who's next!!!
Thank you for writing!
Hugs
Ojousan
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love your story, I simpel LOVE it!!!
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice story
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is excelent but I must say that I have to give you a bit of construtive crit. When someone else starts to speak or has an inner thought a new paragragh is formed. Even if it\'s on the same subject. Otherwise it just gets confussing.
For example:
“No need to run from me, Duo!” Tubarov called out, “You’ve done it before! But I’ll go easier on you this time—I’ll use lube!” he laughed. That was the final straw. He balled his hands into fists, and felt something hard in his hand. He heard his uncle pass by the closet. When he felt that he was past, he crept out, sneaking up on his uncle. Tubarov sensed something was up and he whirled around. Too bad he didn’t see that helmet. Duo swung his helmet hard, taking out one of his kneecaps. Tubarov howled in pain as Duo ran around the house, gathering some essentials, and he came back and yelled at his uncle. “Fuck you! I’m outta here!” he screamed. “No, you can’t—you’re only 14! You still need me!” Tubarov pleaded. “NO, I don’t, you-you FREAK! My mind’s fucked up because of you!!! Do you have any idea what your years of touching and groping have done to me!? I don’t even know what I want anymore!” Duo ran out with tears running down his face.**
It should be:
“No need to run from me, Duo!” Tubarov called out, “You’ve done it before! But I’ll go easier on you this time—I’ll use lube!” he laughed.
That was the final straw. He balled his hands into fists, and felt something hard in his hand. He heard his uncle pass by the closet. When he felt that he was past, he crept out, sneaking up on his uncle. Tubarov sensed something was up and he whirled around. Too bad he didn’t see that helmet. Duo swung his helmet hard, taking out one of his kneecaps. Tubarov howled in pain as Duo ran around the house, gathering some essentials, and he came back and yelled at his uncle. “Fuck you! I’m outta here!” he screamed.
“No, you can’t—you’re only 14! You still need me!” Tubarov pleaded.
“NO, I don’t, you-you FREAK! My mind’s fucked up because of you!!! Do you have any idea what your years of touching and groping have done to me!? I don’t even know what I want anymore!” Duo ran out with tears running down his face.**
That\'s the only problem I find with this fic. It\'s so rare to find fics with so much BDSM in them. And this fanfic has certainly been a treat. =)
For example:
“No need to run from me, Duo!” Tubarov called out, “You’ve done it before! But I’ll go easier on you this time—I’ll use lube!” he laughed. That was the final straw. He balled his hands into fists, and felt something hard in his hand. He heard his uncle pass by the closet. When he felt that he was past, he crept out, sneaking up on his uncle. Tubarov sensed something was up and he whirled around. Too bad he didn’t see that helmet. Duo swung his helmet hard, taking out one of his kneecaps. Tubarov howled in pain as Duo ran around the house, gathering some essentials, and he came back and yelled at his uncle. “Fuck you! I’m outta here!” he screamed. “No, you can’t—you’re only 14! You still need me!” Tubarov pleaded. “NO, I don’t, you-you FREAK! My mind’s fucked up because of you!!! Do you have any idea what your years of touching and groping have done to me!? I don’t even know what I want anymore!” Duo ran out with tears running down his face.**
It should be:
“No need to run from me, Duo!” Tubarov called out, “You’ve done it before! But I’ll go easier on you this time—I’ll use lube!” he laughed.
That was the final straw. He balled his hands into fists, and felt something hard in his hand. He heard his uncle pass by the closet. When he felt that he was past, he crept out, sneaking up on his uncle. Tubarov sensed something was up and he whirled around. Too bad he didn’t see that helmet. Duo swung his helmet hard, taking out one of his kneecaps. Tubarov howled in pain as Duo ran around the house, gathering some essentials, and he came back and yelled at his uncle. “Fuck you! I’m outta here!” he screamed.
“No, you can’t—you’re only 14! You still need me!” Tubarov pleaded.
“NO, I don’t, you-you FREAK! My mind’s fucked up because of you!!! Do you have any idea what your years of touching and groping have done to me!? I don’t even know what I want anymore!” Duo ran out with tears running down his face.**
That\'s the only problem I find with this fic. It\'s so rare to find fics with so much BDSM in them. And this fanfic has certainly been a treat. =)
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November 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Are you an expert in this because you seem to know a lot.
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW 0___0 soooo hooottt!!! It was delicious ^^ keep going! I love this fic!! Poor Dou, he\'s going to be SOOOO sore by the time they barly finish half of wat the others want to do with him.