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August 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
No words I could possibly say could do your work justice.
All i can say is that i will be checking diligently for your next update.
However, there are some odd spelling mistakes in chapter 18 that you might wish to double check.
All i can say is that i will be checking diligently for your next update.
However, there are some odd spelling mistakes in chapter 18 that you might wish to double check.
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January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please write more!!! awesome story!!
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December 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
awesome story !!!! you are an fantastic writher! please write more:D
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August 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow...I am so glad I found this story. By just reading the summary, I just didn't expect it to be so...intense! Hahaha. You are a great writer and I was never bored at all while reading. I love how Goku is depicted. He's just so innocent and unusure and new to this whole thing...he's obsessed. I really like the down-to-earth, sarcastic type comments he makes throughout the story, which just makes you love himmore! I love Vegeta. God..I love Vegeta in this story. He's just so...hot. And I can feel his annoyance and unease around Goku, too. The interactions between characters are great and I am excited to see what happens next. So....great stuff!
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August 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow...I'm glad I found this story. Quite amazing. I'm only on chapter two but I am blown away by your writing skills. I love Goku in this story. He's so curious and clueless and cute! "People actually put that in their mouth?!?!" Tha line made me laugh so hard. All these lines are just great. Awesome story.
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February 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Rena. I read this the instant you posted it. Then I read it the next day twice. Then I waited and read it again. I've had to have read this chapter like ten times by now, but I'm STILL dumbfounded. You make it impossible for me to write you a decent review, you evil, woman. You evil, evil, so awesome woman, you. Damnit. You know what got me? This line: "Gn.! OOuhh!! Yesss.... hurt me like you love me..!!"
CHILLS. HAD A SHIVER RUN UP MY SPINE. EVIL. YOU ARE. YOU. ARE. EVIL.
Oh man, the best kind of evil EVER.
CHILLS. HAD A SHIVER RUN UP MY SPINE. EVIL. YOU ARE. YOU. ARE. EVIL.
Oh man, the best kind of evil EVER.
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January 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
sigh*
Sometimes your writing is so good, it makes me a little jealous. hahaha.. and that like, NEVER happens. Sorry it took so long for me to review, you know how life goes though.
I really loved how personable this chapter was. How Goku repeatedly scolds and then justifies himself to the audience. It really drags me in and I often times find myself grinning at the screen, shaking my head as I read. I just LOVE that aspect of the story! It really gets a response out of me ya know?
This chapter in particular had me laughing. How Goku simply blast ALL of Vegeta's new things, just to start a fight. It was so rotten, so mischievous yet I LOVED IT! And yes, I've always seen Vegeta as the vain type. I mean, he's a prince and a good looking one at that!
Yet just to start a fight, Goku blows all of his newly bought things to smithereens. I just really adored this chapter for that. Because it's so playful and awkward.. yet you KNOW (and you showed many a time) that the underlining appeal for both of them is sex. It's like their own sort of sex, their own sort of gratification.
YET.... we all know that both Saiyans WANT the real kind of sex... so my question is... how much longer can they hold out?
This entire story has been one big building up for an UNBELIEVABLE orgasmic release. It's like a prolonged orgasm! hahaha Once it actually happens, I'll probably just roll off my bed and die! hahaha..
But AWESOME chapter Rena. AWESOME. I really LOVE the idea that they'll perhaps "do it" soon.. but with chapters like this coming along? I don't mind the wait at all!
Keep it up!
Camaro
Sometimes your writing is so good, it makes me a little jealous. hahaha.. and that like, NEVER happens. Sorry it took so long for me to review, you know how life goes though.
I really loved how personable this chapter was. How Goku repeatedly scolds and then justifies himself to the audience. It really drags me in and I often times find myself grinning at the screen, shaking my head as I read. I just LOVE that aspect of the story! It really gets a response out of me ya know?
This chapter in particular had me laughing. How Goku simply blast ALL of Vegeta's new things, just to start a fight. It was so rotten, so mischievous yet I LOVED IT! And yes, I've always seen Vegeta as the vain type. I mean, he's a prince and a good looking one at that!
Yet just to start a fight, Goku blows all of his newly bought things to smithereens. I just really adored this chapter for that. Because it's so playful and awkward.. yet you KNOW (and you showed many a time) that the underlining appeal for both of them is sex. It's like their own sort of sex, their own sort of gratification.
YET.... we all know that both Saiyans WANT the real kind of sex... so my question is... how much longer can they hold out?
This entire story has been one big building up for an UNBELIEVABLE orgasmic release. It's like a prolonged orgasm! hahaha Once it actually happens, I'll probably just roll off my bed and die! hahaha..
But AWESOME chapter Rena. AWESOME. I really LOVE the idea that they'll perhaps "do it" soon.. but with chapters like this coming along? I don't mind the wait at all!
Keep it up!
Camaro
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*snerk* Goku is starting to lose it. He and Vegeta do *not* have a healthy relationship. Or maybe the fighting IS healthy for saiyans, as a type of courtship? It’s interesting to see how they’re converting their feelings of mutual lust into violence, since I’m assuming Vegeta is still unwilling to cheat on Bulma. It’s like substituting Equal for sugar. Its close, but nothing like the real thing. I’m wondering how long it will take (and what it will take) before one of them cracks.
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi,
As promised this time I'm leaving a review instead of commenting directly on AIM.
Well what can I say. First the whole fic is pure genius, I loved the way you're painting goku and allowing us to discover his personality and thought. The whole relationship is extremely hot and intense.
For this chapter my favorite line is "I kissed him with my fist. He groped me with kicks. We fucked with our eyes. He fellated me with taunts and endless profanity."
That's truly hot and poetic at the same time. It also sum it up very well.
My favorite scene is when Goku blast what Vegeta bought. LOL I never thought of Vegeta like a shopping addict but I've to admit that could fit with his personality.
Can't wait for the next chapter. Sorry for the lame review too.
As promised this time I'm leaving a review instead of commenting directly on AIM.
Well what can I say. First the whole fic is pure genius, I loved the way you're painting goku and allowing us to discover his personality and thought. The whole relationship is extremely hot and intense.
For this chapter my favorite line is "I kissed him with my fist. He groped me with kicks. We fucked with our eyes. He fellated me with taunts and endless profanity."
That's truly hot and poetic at the same time. It also sum it up very well.
My favorite scene is when Goku blast what Vegeta bought. LOL I never thought of Vegeta like a shopping addict but I've to admit that could fit with his personality.
Can't wait for the next chapter. Sorry for the lame review too.
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhh... Just fucking delicious.
Isuppose the best is the anticipation, isn't it? The patience and game they are playing...a very long prelude. Tsk, tsk, tsk...always a contest. Men and their ego...
Loved it!
Isuppose the best is the anticipation, isn't it? The patience and game they are playing...a very long prelude. Tsk, tsk, tsk...always a contest. Men and their ego...
Loved it!