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You are so amazing! I need more! Please update as soon as possible.

Wow..... That's a lot of fighting to get my mind around. I like Goku's thought about Vegeta either satisfying him or killing him. Yep, the two possibilities are just too close.

Excellent chapter. Can't wait for you to torture me with the next one.

"...You must be shaking your head in disgust now. That I would stoop so low. Thinking 'what an douche-bag I turned out to be' after all this time..."

Nope! Not me. I laughed and laughed. XD

"...he pulls another Twizzler from the bag. I told him not to eat my damn candy!..."

GAH this made me laugh too!! Then when they fight at Gokus house, Chichi appears with her frying pan pf doom, bashing Veggie on the head with it!!! Man this whole chapter had me laughing. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Hell Im enoying this whole story and the waiting KILLS me!! Next chapter please!! ^_^v

Urggg.....more teasing? You're evil. [In the nicest way possible, of course.^_^] I really want to see this thin control between Goku and Vegeta break. Is Bulma gonna get in on the action? Is Chi-chi? So many questions. *whimper* I eagerly await the next update.

WOW!!!!!
Damn you great in how you explain it all. just read how they feel about each other and the games they are both playing.
So is Bulma out of the picture now? i'm also glad your not rushing with this story. i'm really enjoying it. please update soon!!!!

Oddly enough, lust and violence both share the same passion, intensity, and energy. Just with different results.

This is my favorite line in the whole chapter! Well, for nothing short of a better explanation, I intensely enjoyed this chapter for a few reasons. I love the way you make battle sensual to the Saiya-jins. They crave battle like humans crave sex, and now, it looks like Ouji-sama and Goku-san are using it as an outlet for their sexual frustration and getting no where!

The intensity between them is exquisite, and it makes the story THAT much better to read! I love ChiChi's reaction to him, and I think that if I were watching a serious DBZ movie, she'd be the same in the movie or cartoon. Just absolutely.... a harpy.

GREAT Chapter, hon. The update was WELL worth the wait.

BG

*poke, Poke, POKE!!!*..... okay, that really didn't get my desire for more of this story out of my system, but I had to try.

I have to tell you a funny story. I was sitting on my little laptop, drinking my nightly kettle of tea, (don't ask) and my husband asks me..."Whatcha readin?" I told him, "One of those gay porno stories about DBZ that you hate so much." He sputtered for a while and shut up, went back to playing his stupid PS2 game, and I went back to reading. I'm glad I'm not a man, because if I was a man, this laptop would have raised the perverbial 5-8" off my lap if I had a dick.

That being said, (no matter how crude) I must say that you are a master (or mistress if you prefer, Rena-sama) of sexual tension mixed with certain obvious facts of a tedious marriage. Trust me, I know all about the life of a tedious marriage, and I started reading this, and my mind is telling me, OH MY GOD that's my husband. Or GEEZE I think I act like that sometimes.

All in all, it's an excellent fiction, and you've made it to my favorites list. Bravissamo!

Ooo-hoo, I loved the bite scene. It was such an act of savage desperation, and what's more, Bejiita seemed to like it. Great fight scenes; you write them very well, and fights are hard to do, IMHO. In this chapter I get the distinct feeling that Bejiita might just be going through the very same turmoil as Goku-- desperately wanting the other that he can't have, taking out his frustration in violence and excessive sex (the 15-times record) with the one he can have, his wife. Questions, questions...

LOVE LOVE LOVE! LOVE!

This was probably one of my favorite chapters so far. There were things that nearly kicked me in the teeth and there were others that were so subtle that maybe only me and you even caught on to them. So since you like to have me read things when I'm sober and when I'm on AIM with you.. (and you weren't around today) I kept an open email next to me where I could copy and paste my favorite parts as I read through. (Now come on.. you love me! SAY IT! hahaha)

Alright.. so let me get this thing started.

They couldn't steal what didn't want to be stolen.

This quote for some reason made the Goku from the show automatically appear in my mind NOT as you have so awesomely formed him.. but as the old Goku.. the original from the series. The innocence, the kindness, the happiness and that terrific smile... I remembered him because it strikes me as though Goku is somehow in a sense reverting back to that old personality. Because he so often blames himself.. (which yeah, he should.. but let me continue) Goku from the series always seems to hold the weight of the world on his shoulders.. and so much else. In your story, he's doing the exact same thing.

He blames EVERYTHING on himself.. even sometimes ridiculous things. His relationship with his wife ISN'T all his fault. The two just aren't compatible if you ask me. But he takes every failure as though he could have ultimately prevented everything... but he doesn't really accept that that's just part of life! That life is full of unpredictable failures...

"Strength is not whether or not a man ever falls.. its whether or not he gets back up again."--loosely Confucius

It almost seems as though subtly (and I may be crazy) he also sees a lot of his deviousness in Goten. It's odd.. but let me continue.

I've been a peeping tom for several months? When I look at you I think of Bulma? When we make love I think of Bejiita?! That I secretly resent you for never giving me a blow job, nor being the oversexed vixen I need you to be? That many of the problems in our marriage are the result of my own selfishness? That for all our new found intimacy and bonding, I have no idea what it is I feel towards my own wife anymore?

This paragraph LITERALLY made my heart sink. Honest to God, I just felt almost ill when I read that. Because Goku suddenly concretes everything we've already suspected. Where there was just the question of his feelings, he's GONE OUT and just said "yeah, the suspicions are correct.. this is how it is". And as much as we want to sympathize with him because we love him... I can't. I hate that he's unable to love ChiChi for what strikes me as very selfish reasons. I mean... I kinda get irritated with him because I'VE had boyfriends and the type that made me feel as though all they gave two shits about was sex..so I can relate to ChiChi. Hell, maybe HALF the reason she doesn't put out is because his affections SHOULD be deeper than that. So in a sense, while I love him.. I hate how flawed he can be.

Unless of course Chichi is suddenly into role play. 'Here Chichi! Wear this blue wig for me!" Or 'Try on my old saiyajin outfit from the Cell saga* It'll look great on you!"

Ok, this made me laugh slightly.. it was an imbittered "you-fucking-male-pig" laugh.. but still, a laugh.

Somehow the world was never big enough for the two of us. The god's must be laughing at me. Are you laughing too?

I really liked how that was written. I like how yeah, it's true and I've even considered it before.. the world ISN'T big enough for those two egos or super powers. Also, the question asked at the end makes it again, feel as though Goku isn't just reiterating this time in his life, but he's speaking to us! He's addressing the reader and wanting us to, in a sense, come closer. Like WE aren't the peeping toms in his life, but part of the journey through it. I loved that.

So what's the first thing I do upon seeing him after all this time? Wanting him as badly as I do?

I pull back my arm and sock him right in his gorgeous little face.

hahhaa.. not even I saw that one coming. It was perfect. it was FUCKING FLAWLESS.. but I didn't see it coming. I cracked up because it was just SOoooo.. unique I think. So unexpected. Here I'm thinking that in a lot of ways, Goku has reverted back to being the ol' blame himself for everything guy and then he pulls something so completely contradictory to his nature that I have to sit back and marvel at how far he's come.

Honestly, that was awesome.

The bite was... odd. I liked the uniqueness but it also sent my mind reeling. I don't know how to feel about it honestly. I don't know if it was supposed to be plotmoving or just in there as a subtlety to represent Goku's desperation. I just know that it really caught my attention and made me almost weary of Goku. That as much as what he does is unpredictable... there's something about HIM that's now unpredictable.. not sure how to word it.

Anyways, I think I'll leave it at this because I don't want to tear everything apart for the readers who check reviews before proceeding. Any questions.. IM me. Other than that... I LOVE it.

Camaro