schedule
June 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yay you updated ,love the please keep going
schedule
May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The second chapter is much better than the first. You did a good job of keeping the POV in the same person (ie-first person, second person, third person.). I\'m really enjoying your characters and the shades of drug abuse that is going on.
There are a couple of rough spots, like mis-spelled words and a few things that could be tightened up. Perhaps you should consider a Beta to help iron out the rough spots. I know from experience that it\'s really difficult to see the problems in your own writing because you know what you were trying to say.
Can\'t wait to see more from you!
There are a couple of rough spots, like mis-spelled words and a few things that could be tightened up. Perhaps you should consider a Beta to help iron out the rough spots. I know from experience that it\'s really difficult to see the problems in your own writing because you know what you were trying to say.
Can\'t wait to see more from you!
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May 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s hard to review because of the content of the story ,
but i will be the first to review ,
I like it ,its differnt & sad but good character development
I like the story
so please keep with it
and how many chapters do you have for it
but i will be the first to review ,
I like it ,its differnt & sad but good character development
I like the story
so please keep with it
and how many chapters do you have for it