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August 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
omgness... i love this story so much thank you for making this Vegeta/OFC fanfic! it is awesome please please update soON!
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You know, I think this story is... borderline horrible. But you know what, I really commend you for continuing to post despite what people think or have to say about it. That takes balls and I respect that you can keep going and posting new chapters as a grand \"fuck you\" to anyone who doesn\'t like it. While I agree with what most everyone said, it\'s cool you kept it up and just did you thing how you wanted. You go girl!
Camaro
Camaro
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay...you don\'t have great grammar and obviously the sex scenes are...well...lets be polite. Unrealistic at best. I also think you need to make this easier to read...and it isn\'t really much of a fic anyway...I think Self-insertion fics are ridiculous and empty at best, as well as very vain. You are sure Vegeta would pick you, but I doubt that. I\'m a yaoi fan usually, but he has Bulma and self-insertions...eugh!!! How VAIN are you? *shakes head in disapproval*
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May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
GAH! My eyes!!
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eh? I tried to read this, and got through some bits of it. But what the hell are you thinking, leaving no spaces like that? How\'d you proof read it? Firstly, you whack enter after a line of speech in standard text, and you should break up the paragraphs more anyway.
The actual quality of writing isn\'t anything I\'m coming back for (kind of makes me glad about the paragraphs thing- I didn\'t have to put up with it because my eyes gave in), however, it did not make the extremely appaling section of things I\'ve read. The spalling was alright. But \"O.O\" is NOT a word. Its a smiley at best.
You are lucky people cannot read it enough to complain properly.
The actual quality of writing isn\'t anything I\'m coming back for (kind of makes me glad about the paragraphs thing- I didn\'t have to put up with it because my eyes gave in), however, it did not make the extremely appaling section of things I\'ve read. The spalling was alright. But \"O.O\" is NOT a word. Its a smiley at best.
You are lucky people cannot read it enough to complain properly.
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May 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Er- like Camaro here, I did not even read the fiction - I attempted to, but my eyes began to bleed to do the lack of space between the hunks of text. It looks rather \'good\' though..! Even though I\'m clueless when it comes to DBZ - I\'d love to actually read this, and leave a constructive review. Please..! Double space..!! I beg of you..!