rate_review Reviews

Please add another chapter!

More please!

Really good! Short and sweet. It has real good potential. But the only advice I can give is when your doing a \'3 Years\' type of B/V fic, you have to remember to stick with how the story goes. I don\'t mean how the t.v. shows, you can basically take a \'3 Years\' fic and twist it anyway you want, I\'m talking about you have to make sure Trunks is at least born, or talks about being born. I\'m probably guessing you already know that, I\'m just giving you a heads-up, if you know what I mean;) (I didn\'t mean that in a perverted way, sorry if you thought that) But hey, you wanted all the advice and comments, so, what can I say? I hope this has helped is some way, shape, or form! Loved your fic, and cant wait to read more!!


-Kitty:)

There needs to be more naughty and funny stuff >:D but pretty good!