rate_review Reviews

Oh I LOVE dark fanfic. I love thinking of them, I love writing them, and I totally love reading them, especially this one. This was short, but god was it good. You definatly know who to build up the angst. Two mistakes that bugged me...1 screems is spelled screams, you should probably go change that...2 you used his instead of him in the last sentence, which almost through off the entire effect you were conveying by utterly confusing the reader. Besides that this was very enjoyable, if you have Kaaza, you should download the AMV (anime music video) someone did of using Trunk\'s angst and torture, I don\'t remember what it was called but it is very popular and it is one of the best ones I have ever seen. The reason I mentioned that was after reading your fic, I couldn\'t help but thinking if there had been dialouge in the AMV it probably would have been your story. Totally weird I know, but sometime you just have to love randomness.

Nishi

Ps the spelling mistakes in my review are done on purpose, or that is what I am claiming. Maybe you should use that defense too.

you know who = you know how
through off = threw off

(goes away hiding in shame)

Screams, dude, screams.